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Talk 8
I wanna be speak like native!! Seriously!!🙇♂️🙇♂️🙇♂️🔥🔥
Could you please help by correcting anything that's wrong or unnatural in my sentences?
You can change the order of the sentences, or do whatever you want!
I'd like to learn some common phrases and slang！ 🙏
Also, I'd like to get your advice on talking to foreigners.
I look forward to your constructive comments.✍️
By the way, "A" is me and "B" is a foreigner.
B: Excuse me? Could you do me a favor?
A: Uh~, sorry. I'm in a hurry. So I don't know if I can help you but what's wrong?
B: Oh, thanks! Do you know how to get to Kinokuniya bookstore?
A: Sorry, I don't know. The station attendant might know. So I can show you ticket counter, if you want.
B: Oh, really?! Thank you!
A: You're welcome. This way.
B: Okay.
Oh, wait. Isn't that guy over there a station attendant?
A: Oh, maybe yes! You can ask that person.
B: Oh, thank you so much!
A: Right here is fine? Just in case should I go with you?
B: Uh~, if you still have time for me, It's reassuring going together, haha.
A: Okay.
ーーー Five minutes later.
A: Are you going to be OK?
B: Yes! You've been very helpful. thank you so much!
A: Nah, haha. I didn't do anything after all. Anyways, have a good trip!
B: Thank you! Take care!
A: You too!
May 20, 2022
Talk 7
I wanna be speak like native!! Seriously!!🙇♂️🙇♂️🙇♂️🔥🔥
Could you please help by correcting anything that's wrong or unnatural in my sentences?
You can change the order of the sentences, or do whatever you want!
I'd like to learn some common phrases and slang！ 🙏
Also, I'd like to get your advice on talking to foreigners.
I look forward to your constructive comments.✍️
By the way, "A" is me and "B" is a foreigner.
B: Excuse me? Would you happen to know where a rental store called "Tutaya" is?
A: Is there one nearby?
B: Yes. Probably.
A: Sorry. I don’t know.
Give me a sec, let me check.
B: Thank you.
A: Oh, It seems like the store is no longer in business.
B: Really?!
A: Yeah.
That's too bad.
Can I help with anything else?
B: Oh, It's okay. Thank you so much!
A: You're welcome. Take care.
B: You too.
May 20, 2022
Relation
Dans ma école il y a une fille. Je sais qu'elle m'aime et moi j'aime la aussi, bien sûr amical rien avec d'amour. Le probleme c'est que nous sommes très gênant, par exemple je ne suis pas un gars timide mais j'essayer de pas regarder dans ses yeux si on a un cour ensemble parce que ça me rend nerveux et je crois c'est la même situation pour elle. Mais je pense que on a fait de progrès maintenant on parle plus qu'avant. Je souhaite que nous devons d'amis proches.
May 20, 2022
A Trip
Tomorrow, we're going to get up very early because we will go to spend the day in Girona. We will take a high speed train, so the travel will be short, about thirty nine minutes. Usually, I don't take trains, but this is the better way to arrive girona city, besides fast and comfortable. Tomorrow there be will an urban sketcher meeting in that city, so we will spend drawing all morning. After lunch at the afternoon, we would like to visit this beautiful city. It will be funny.
May 20, 2022
20 mai 2022 - jalousie
Racontez-nous la dernière fois que vous avez vraiment jalousé quelqu’un.
Il y a longtemps que je n’ai pas eu cette sensation et la dernière fois que je l’ai eu, c’était en 5ème et 6ème année du lycée. À ce moment-là, j’étais toujours la chouchoute de ma prof préférée mais il y avait une autre camarade qui l’admirait aussi et elle était aussi la chouchoute de cette prof. On avait des notes similaires et on était tous les deux des élèves responsables. Peut-être qu’on voulait tous devenir la meilleure élève (ou simplement personne) sous les yeux de ma prof. En effet, j’étais jalouse chaque fois que ma camarade parlait plus à elle et pour une raison que je ne savais pas pourquoi, ma prof prêtait plus attention à ma camarade qu’à moi et je n’aimerais pas beaucoup cette camarade.
Pendant l’année pour préparer à l’examen publique, il y avait une fois que j’ai reçu une très mauvais note sur un des exercices de géographie et cette fois-ci, ma prof m’a écrit des mots d’encouragement et j’ai pu enfin sentir sa soin à moi. Mais après ça, je me suis réfléchis : elle avait prêtais plus attention à ma camarade, c’était parce que ma camarade avait plus de besoin que moi; et c’était parce qu’elle avait confiance en moi qu’elle ne me parlait pas trop.
May 20, 2022
Patients, Families Or Doctors
Please correct me and give me some advice about writing. Thank you very much!!!
Patients, Families Or Doctors, Who Should Be The Dicision-Maker?
With the improvement of medical and health awareness, people's concept of medical consumption is constantly changing. A consumption habit with clear demand and purpose is gradually taking shape. Although people's purpose and autonomy in the process of medical treatment avoid the waste of medical and health resources caused by blind consumption, they are also prone to disagreement with doctors in the process of diagnosis and treatment. And who should be the final medical decision maker has sparked heated discussions in the society.
Many people hold the view that the patient’s opinion is the most significant and decisive because they know best what they need. For them, the most important thing at the moment may not necessarily be survival, but the financial burden and quality of life of their loved ones. They will take their physical state, economic situation and social relationships into consideration before making what they think is the best dicision for themselves and the people around, and such a decision should be respected. Furthermore, patients have the right to participate in and make decisions about their own medical care, so respecting their choice reflects the respect for individual autonomy and the maintenance of dignity. Take euthanasia as an example, many late-state patients request it because it allows them to maintain a natural and intact state of life until the end of life, thus they can pend the last time of life with peace of mind and maintain their own dignity. In this case, when the choice is reasonable and feasible, medical staff should adopt it, rather than being stubborn about their own opinion with authority.
Patients do play an important role in medical decision-making, but most people believe that doctors always represent the authority in this field. Although the medical literacy of modern people is much higher than before, medicine is such a profound subject that it’s difficult for non-medical professionals to keep abreast of the latest medical advances. Therefore, medical staff who have undergone systematic study and training can judge the real situation of the disease more accurately than patients. What’s more, decisions made by doctors are not only more professional, but also more objective than those made by patients. Patients may, for a variety of reasons, make decisions that are not the result of thoughtful thinking, but are on a whim or in an emotional state, which often has irreversible consequences. Because of the concept that life is sacred, doctors always look at the problem from the perspective of health and interests, and can more calmly and accurately make decisions that are beneficial to patients.
There is a saying goes, it is a family matter when a person is sick, which suggests that family opinion is also an important factor in medical decision-making. Normally, the health status of patients is not only related to their personal life, but affects the mental state and life quality of their loved ones. Besides, some patients may be in an emotional state when they make decisions. For example, they have just quarreled with their families, or they want to resolve the conflict within the family by hurting themselves. At this time, the opinions of family should be considered to prevent patients from making decisions that they will regret.
In actual clinical diagnosis and treatment, who would be the ultimate dicision-maker should depend on the situation and ethical analysis when there is disagreement. First of all, it is necessary to determine whether the patient has the ability to make autonomous decisions. Those over the age of 18 have the ability to make independent decisions, while those under the age of 18 do not. When the patient has the ability to choose, but cannot agree with family, the patient's opinion should be considered first. When the patient does not have or loses the decision-making ability, the decision-maker should be his family. And if there is disagreement within the family, the views of family representative, such as father in most cases, should be considered first.
When the best plan of the medical staff is rejected by a patient or family member with normal ability to choose, they should find out the real reason for the rejection, and then do a targeted explanation. The choice should be respected and detailed medical records should be made if this kind of effort fails. But if a patient and his family members make a decision that goes against their life value and causes harm to society and others, medical staff can use the right to interfere such dicision and take measures to prevent uncontrollable consequences from happening.
All in all, no matter who makes the dicision, the interests of the patient should always be put first and the patient's autonomy should be fully respected.
May 20, 2022
Hausarbeit
Welcher schöne Tag!
Heute gibt es viel zu tun. Ich hoffe, dass ich alles auf meiner Liste erledigen kann. Ich muss das Gras mähen und die Fensters putzen. Wenn jemand meine Wäsche falten will, sag mir, weil ich das nicht zu tun will.
Den Spiegel muss ich auch putzen, damit ich mein einziges Gesicht klar sehe. Endlich, soll ich nicht vergessen, ein gutes Buch zu lesen.
May 20, 2022
May 20, 2022
Steven Pinker et le taux d'homicide
Considérons l'argument de Steven Pinker, psychologue et savant des sciences cognitives canadien-américan, au sujet du progrès social.
Dans son livre "The Better Angels of Our Nature: Why Violence has Declined." publié en 2011, Pinker remarque dans quelle mesure le monde est devenu plus pacifique et moins appauvri.
Le psychologue fait allusion au taux d'homicide aux pays occidentaux qui est baissé depuis le quatorzième siècle.
Au dix-neuvième siècle, le taux d'homicides aux pays occidentaux était à partir de 78 jusqu'à 98% plus bas qu'au quatorzième siècle.
C'est une réduction du nombre de morts à cause du meurtre en Europe de L'Ouest de 80 pourcent environ.
Pareillement, le monde est amélioré en ce qui concerne la pauvreté extrême où on observe une amélioration d'affaires aussi.
Entre 2010 et 2020, la proportion de la population mondiale qui vive dans la pauvreté extrême a baissé (de 16% à 9%): c'est-à-dire 9% de la population subvient à ses besoins avec moins de 1.90 dollars par jour.
C'est une situation atroce mais toutefois elle s'améliore.
Merci pour votre aide :)
May 20, 2022
Mi nuevo trabajo
El mes pasado empecé un trabajo nuevo por el gobierno en una ciudad una hora de mi casa. Estoy un encargado y es la primera vez que ha tendido dirigir otras personas. Tengo un equipo de dos y ambos son muy amable. Estaba un poco nervioso en el principio, pero poco a poco he encontrado mi confianza. En mi trabajo tengo que crear una nueva estrategia eso va a guía la economía local. Normalmente tengo que interactúa con las empresas en la localidad. Los sectores de importancia es el turismo, la industria, y el sector renovable. Dime abajo que tipo de trabajo que tienes.
May 20, 2022
Un paseo en bicicleta
El martes tomé un paseo en bicicleta. Era muy divertido, pero duro. Divertido porque me encanto el paisaje y las montañas, duro porque por supuesto hay montañas que tengan que estar subiendo. Cuando empecé subir la primera inclinación me dolían los muslos, y me pregunté por qué hago esta tortura. Continué, y después de diez minutos el dolor desapareció. Un rato mas tarde y fui en la cumbre de la colina. Ahora era tiempo de relajarme. No tuve que pedalear desde 3km, y el viento me refrescó cuando mientras rodaba abajo sin pedalear. La próxima colina era más fácil, y disfruté vistas bonitas durante el resto del paseo. Después me sentí el beneficio del ejercicio varias días.
May 20, 2022
La contaminación del aire
¿Cuál crees que es la amenaza más preocupante para los seres humanos? Explica tu respuesta.
Hoy en día los seres humanos enfrentamos un montón de peligros y amenazas. El calentamiento global, el cambio climático causado por las acciones humanas y la contaminación de plástico de los océanos son cosas que generan mucha preocupación. Y mientras que es verdad que tenemos que arreglarlos, también hay otros peligros en que no nos enfocamos tanto. Creo que la contaminación del aire es algo poco hablado pero muy peligroso, ya que no podemos ver con nuestros ojos si el aire que respiramos ha sido contaminado o no.
Hay muchas fuentes de la contaminación del aire, pero la más grande es la industria. Los talleres y fábricas generan mucho químicos no saludables que pueden herirle los pulmones o incluso matar a alguien. No obstante, ya que estas partículas peligrosas son demasiado pequeñas para ver con nuestros ojos, no parece que hay ningún riesgo. A pesar de esto, cualquiera que haya vivido en una ciudad con mucha contaminación puede decirte los afectos desagradables de la contaminación del aire.
Hay muchas imágenes en el Internet de ciudades cubiertas en humo. Pero el humo solo se ve en el peor de los casos, y mucho después de que la contaminación en el aire ha alcanzado niveles peligrosos para la salud de los seres humanos. En Estados Unidos, a pesar de que tenemos requisitos que las empresas tienen que acatar, la contaminación del aire ya ha alcanzado estos niveles, y en la mayoría del país el aire nos envenena lentamente.
May 20, 2022
Le Donjon de Naheulbeuk était en vente aujourd'hui, alors...
Le Donjon de Naheulbeuk était en vente aujourd'hui, alors je l'ai acheté.
Je faisais un parcours des critiques et suis rendu compte qu'il fait partie de l'histoire des joueurs françaises. Il parait que tout le monde qui joue les jeux de rôles a entendu parler, au moins, du Donjon de Naheulbeuk.
Je suis intrigué. Mais quoi faire en première? Jouer le jeu vidéo? Lire les livres? Écouter à les mp3s? C'est le problème éternel des séries avec une longue histoire... on commence par ou d'abord?
May 19, 2022
May 19, 2022
May 19, 2022
Warum möchtet ich nach Deutschland gehen?
Ich möchte ein Berufausbildung machen, deshalb möchte ich nach Deutschland gehen, weil Deutschland ein gutes Berufsausbildungssystem hat. In Deutschland, Alter und Bildungsstand sind kein großes Problem. Deutschland ist sehr gut für mich, besonders die Landschaften, das Klima, die Einwhner, eine starke Industrie, die schöne Architektur, die gute Infrastruktur und die aktuelle Demokratie, alles sind in meinen Augen sehr wertvoll.
May 19, 2022
Un nuovo locale
Caro Francesca,
Grazie per avermi pensato della sua ultima proposizione di stabilire un nuovo locale qui a San Francisco.
Secondo me, tra le idee che mi hai presentato, il locale più adatto della mia città sarebbe il locale si intitola "hip hop". Sai bene che San Francisco abbia molti giovani "hipster" che lavorano nel settore high-tech e apprezzano bene un locale con cibo di varie culture, insieme ad un ambiente invitante con il collegamento internet disponibile per tutti gli ospiti. Inoltre mi sembra ottimo il prezzo medio di 35 euro (circa 40 dollari americani) che proponi.
Se vuoi, ho del tempo libero nei prossimi mesi e potrei lavorare con te per sviluppare di più la sua idea. Forse ti consiglio pure alcuni collaboratori miei che possibilmente aiutarti. Fammi sapere.
Baci e abbracci,
Matteo
May 19, 2022
Shopping!
I went shopping with a friend today. After work, we had met near our office, and We went to Ginza.
I bought a two-pieces dress, and she bought two T-shirts.We have walked about two hours so tiered, We went to home after dinner.
She told to me, "It was satisfied that think two T-shirts to wanted.",and I got a two-pieces dress that aimed.
It was satisfied that think two T-shirts to wanted.",and I got a two-pieces dress that aimed,so I wrote this diary very happily.
May 19, 2022
Talk 1
Could you please help by correcting anything that's wrong or unnatural in my sentences?
You can change the order of the sentences, or do whatever you want!
I'd like to learn some common phrases and slang！ 🙇♂️
Also, I'd like to get your advice on talking to foreigners.
I look forward to your constructive comments.✍️
By the way, "A" is me and "B" is a foreigner.
B: Excuse me? Do me a favor will you?
A: Sure, what’s happened?
B: How do I get the bathhouse? Uh~, sento?
A: Oh, yeah! Sento.
B: Do you know the way?
A: So do you know the name of that place?
B: Oh, forgot to say...wait a sec. Well, Yunoizumi Kenkou Center.
A: Oh, I know. It's a little different from a sento, but putting that aside... Anyways, well... How can I say directions...
B: Can you draw a map?
A: Oh, sorry. I'm rubbish at drawing, haha,
Well... My explanations might be long, so if you want, I can show you.
B: Oh, that would be great, thank you!
A; You’re welcome.
This way then. Let’s go.
B: Yes, let’s go.
Anyways, back to what you were talking about before, like sento and Kenkou Center are different. What did that mean?
A: Oh, well... I'm no expert, so I don't know the clear difference, so this is just my personal opinion, a Sento is like having only a bath, while Kenkou Center is like having a restaurant, karaoke, ping-pong, comic book room, and various other facilities. Japanese generally call it a Kenkou land.
B: Oh, I see.
Then, what’s the difference between Kenkou land and Super Sento?
A: Well... I don’t know, haha.
Give me minute. I'll google it.
B: Haha, I'm not much that curious, so there's no need to do.
A: I'll look into it just in case it might be something to talk about, haha.
You can also put it in your knowledge.
Since you came all the way to Japan, so here's a present from me, haha.
I'm sure that will help you in the future.
A child might say, "Dad! What's the difference between a Super Sento and a Kenkou Center?!" you will be able to answer it with your head held high.
B: Yeah, could be, haha.
A: Oh, I see.
Legally, they are the same, it's says. But in terms of rank, the order seems to be Kenkou land, Super Sento, and Sento, in that order.
B: Oh, I understand.
Anyways, Which do you prefer?
A: Well... I've never been them, haha.
B: Why? You don’t like Sento?
A: I guess if I had to choose, I would say I don't like it. Because I’ve heard a scary story that really happened...
B: I'm all ears.
A: Ok, but I don't care what happens...
B Yeah.
A: This is story I heard from acquaintance. One day the guy started working part-time at a Super sento. And then late one night he was cleaning the bathtub as usual.
However, he felt something different from the usual atmosphere. He felt like something was watching him. And he shifted his eyes a little bit in that direction. And there was a shadow in the tub. But he had the courage to shift his eyes in that direction, and there it was! There was big poos floating in the water.
He said that on average, he sees it once a week... Oh, I'm getting chills. I felt something looking at me...
B: Yeah, yeah. I got it, haha.
I'm beginning to fear you.
A: Anyways, while I'm telling about dumb story, we're here.
B: Oh, thank you so much! You helped me a lot!
A: You"re welcome. If you ever wanna hear another scary story, look for me.
B: Ok, I'll do that, haha.
A: Ok then, have a good trip!
B: Yes! Take care!
A: You too!
May 19, 2022
La naturaleza en mi infancia.
Yo definitivamente prefiero la naturaleza a la ciudad. Era una niña, me encantaba dar un paseo con mis padres. Siempre escalaba los árboles y corría detrás de las palomas. A veces, mis padres me llevaban a alimentar a los patos en el parque. Jugábamos a la pelota hasta noche o a veces ir a dar paseo en bicicletas al atardecer. De vez en cuando, íbamos del sur, donde es muy bonita naturaleza y siempre tranquilo y pacífico. Yo encantaba las grandes colinas y los ríos y los lagos. Solíamos nos alojar en una pequeña casa de campo cerca de sus amigos y todos las mañanas, comíamos frutas frescas y bebíamos dulce zumo de naranja y manzana. Mis recuerdos de la naturaleza en mi infancia son muy positivos y lo extraño mucho.
May 19, 2022
Who is the Final Decision Maker in Medical Relationship？
With the progress of medicine and the development of social civilization, the medical industry has gradually transformed into a service-oriented one. The roles of doctors and patients in the medical relationship have also changed. In the old traditional medical practice, physicians had the authority and decision-making power and were responsible for major decisions. The emergence of the bio-psycho-social medical model makes the new medical model change people's view of health and disease. At the same time, this also puts forward new requirements for doctors' medical work ethics. Doctors must not only diagnose and treat diseases, but also pay attention to patients. As the patient's opinion becomes more prominent in the medical process, it is increasingly argued when a patient's treatment decision is contrary to that of the doctor or family member, who is the final decision maker? In my opinion, this should be done on a case-by-case basis.
When there is a disagreement between the doctor and the patient, the first consideration should be whether the patient has full capacity for civil conduct. If the patient does not have or is limited in capacity, it should strive to reach an agreement with the patient's family. When the patient is conscious and able to make decisions independently, if the choice is reasonable and feasible, the medical staff should adopt the patient's choice, and should not be authoritative and stubborn. Of course, in case of the patient's choice goes against their own health interests, especially when the patient can give up diagnosis and treatment due to psychological reasons, the medical staff should patiently persuade them and cooperate with their families to adjust their psychological state if necessary. However, when the persuasion is ineffective, in addition to endangering the patient's life and requiring medical staff to exercise the necessary right to intervene, the patient's choice should still be respected in most cases. If the patient's decision contradicts the interests of others and the society, the physicians should assist the patient to adjust the choice. When the patient's choice poses a threat to the health and life of others or harms the society, the doctors should limit or interfere with the patient's choice.
With the exception of the above, the adoption or choice of medical decisions by patients may sometimes be inconsistent with those of their families. At this time, from my perspective, we ought to give concrete analysis to concrete problems. If the patient has the ability to act independently, usually the patient and family members should fully discuss and agree before taking action. However, when the condition is urgent and the doctors believe that the patient's opinion is reasonable, the patient's opinion should be put in the first place. And a written agreement should be signed; If the patient is emotionally unstable or in a bad state, respect the opinions of family members, and listen to the opinions of family representatives when family members disagree. However, when the opinions of family members or representatives of family members go against the patient's health or life interests, doctors should consult the ethics committee or seek consultation with the leader of the patient unit.
To sum up, doctors, patients and their families are partners in the process of diagnosis and treatment. Doctors have professional medical knowledge, so that they can provide professional services for patients' disease treatment. They play a leading role in medical treatment. However, as the subject of diagnosis and treatment, patients' opinions should also be valued and taken seriously. Today, the process of patients seeking medical treatment has gradually changed from passive acceptance to cooperation and joint participation with doctors. Therefore, we should not only adopt the doctor's advice in medical decision-making based on the doctor's authority, nor should we specifically follow the patient's request because the patient is the served person. When there is a disagreement between doctors and patients, they should respect the opinions of patients or their families on the basis that their requests are reasonable. For unreasonable demands, doctors should adhere to their own responsibilities and bottom lines.
May 19, 2022
19 mai 2022 - Atténué
Un homme mystérieux vous offre une potion magique qui aiguise l’un de vos sens (vue, ouïe, goût, odorat, toucher), mais atténue les autres. Buvez-vous cette potion ? Si oui, quel sens choisissez-vous?
Non, je ne bois pas cette potion parce que je ne connais pas cet homme. La potion n’est pas scientifiquement prouvée pour cet effet « magique », et aussi, la risque est grande. Je pense que chaque sens a sa propre beauté et ils se complémentent pour nous permettre de percevoir le monde. De plus, je suis déjà très contente de la capacité de ces sens maintenant alors il n’y a pas le besoin de boire cet potion magique.
May 19, 2022
Лечебные воды (2/2)
Несколько дней назад, я писал об источниках лечебных вод. Мне повезло столкнулся с одним этих недавно, когда я гулял. Я его не злал, хотя он надохится возле моего дома, где я живу. На самом деле, это прекрасное место: традиционная французская деревня с каменными домами, окружанная лесом, и в какой-то прогалине недалеко, источник со красивой полой скалой, в котором стоит статутка Девы Марии.
Моя мать, которая знает все виды легенд и рассказов о регионе мне объяснила, что вода тут лечит почечные и глазные проблемы. Я также познакомился с любезной женщиной, которая приносила ботелки от источника. Она мне рассказала, как вода ей помогла с проблемами кожы. Повыше, несколько десятков метров дальше на пути, я нашёл маленькую часовню. Кажется, что есть поклонение к Деве защитнице вод со средневековья. Я даже прочитал, что священная сила источника избавила деревню от чумы, по народным приметам (я сомневаюсь в этом утверждении!)
Интересный факт: анализировали воду в лаборатории, и знали, что она очень чиста и очень немного радиоактивна. Может быть эти свойствы объясняют её лечебную силу.
Иногда, мне так случится: я открываю такие места, как маленькие сокровищя. Они там, недалеко от меня, но они также нераскрыванны, поэтому, я не знаю, что они существуют. Я считаю, что это относится к причинам, по которым я всегда рад гулять!
May 19, 2022
Cómo y por qué comencé aprender el español.
¡Hola a todos! Pues, de hecho la lengua prefiero aprender español. Y voy a compartir mi experiencia de aprenderlo. Me puse en marcha en el primer año de mi universidad. Es que ya había aprendido inglés a nivel alto y en este momento me aburría mucho. Entonces mi madre me dijo que si tienes tanto tiempo libre, puedes intentar aprender español porque hay mucha gente usarlo en cualquier lugar como inglés. Sentía que tiene razón. Al comienzo lo estudiaba con los videos en YouTube y Duolingo. Después de saber con suficientes palabras, empecé chatear en línea con la gente. Para mí me ayudaron mucho con respecto a escrita y habla. También siempre me corregían si hay unos errores en las oraciones. Unos de ellos todavía son mis amigos. Lo que más me acuerdo es que por el idioma distinto encuentro un mundo más diverso y la gente simpática.
May 19, 2022
Bitte helfen Sie, mein Anschreiben zu korrigieren
gerne bewerbe ich mich für diese Stelle. Ich bin ein Masterstudent, der an der Hochschule XYZ „123“ studiert und ich wohne in Coolstadt mit einem Vollstipendium des Coolstiftungs. Aktuell schreibe ich mein Thesis, „Hier ist ein Titel” und ich stehe am Anfang Oktober zur Verfügung.
Diese Stelle interessiert mich, weil ich die Möglichkeit hätte, zu mehr als X Projekten in X Ländern beizutragen und über sie ständig zu lernen. Bei einer Organisation so groß wie Organisation123 zu arbeiten, wo es mehr als X Millionen Euro jährlich in Weltweiten Projekten und Kommunikationen ausgegeben sind, würde ich helfen, die Verwirklichung Kinderrechte und die Versorgung Grundbedürfnisse aller Sorten zu erfüllen für Millionen Kindern jedes Jahr. Sowohl so viel zu lernen als auch so groß einen Beitrag zu leisten gibt mir langfristiger, tiefer Motivation.
Als Praktikant bei dem ABC, als Stelle123 und durch meine ehrenamtliche Erfahrungen mit über zehn NROs habe ich die notwendigen Fähigkeiten entwickelt, um erfolgreich zu sein, sei es bei Recherche, Schreiben, Technologie, Sprachen oder interkultureller Kompetenz. Insbesondere meine Fähigkeiten, komplexe Informationen in verständliche Berichte umzuwandeln, meine organisatorischen Erfahrungen in der Verwaltung und meine Kommunikationsfähigkeiten mit vielen Stakeholdern sind von Vorteil. Zum Beispiel habe ich als Stelle123 über X $ Millionen für NROs gewonnen und ich war bei OrganisationABC verantwortlich für circa 100 Förderungen jährlich. Ich habe mehr als 400 Budgets für 200 Bewerbungen und Programmberichten gebaut und mit Programmbereichen und Finanz durch alle diese Zuschüsse gearbeitet. Letztens habe ich bei der ABC ein Netzwerk von 200 Organisationen aus 70 Ländern verwaltet und ich habe eine Reihe von 45 Veranstaltungen mit 260 Referenten bei dem größten Weltklimagipfel organisiert und verwaltet, wobei es 4.500 Zuschauer gab. Besonders Relevant zu dieser Stelle ist der 50-Seitige Bericht, den ich zu diesen Veranstaltungen geschrieben habe.
Des Weiteren bringe ich sehr starke sprach- und interkulturelle Kompetenzen, die bei Organisation123 von Vorteil sind. Ich habe aus Eigenmotivation Deutsch bis zu C1 gelernt und ich habe sowohl Spanisch als auch Mandarin bis zu B2 in der Schule gelernt. Jetzt fange ich mit Französisch auch an und ich habe vor, aller diesen Sprachen bis zu C1 zu lernen. Ich habe bei der Organistation123 und meiner ehrenamtlichen Arbeit auch mit Menschen überall koordiniert und ich freue mich darauf, weiter in solchen multikulturellen Umgebungen zu arbeiten.
In meinem Studium habe ich das Hintergrundwissen von internationalen Organisationen wie GIZ, BMZ KfW, World Bank u. a. entwickelt, das für diese Rolle notwendig ist. Ich habe viel über die Sozialsicherheitsprogrammen in Ländern wie Äthiopien, Nigeria, Mexiko, oder Brasilien gelernt, inklusiv die, die durch die größte internationale Zuschussgeber unterstützt sind. In Kombinierung mit meiner Erfahrung aus den USA mit Fundraising und meiner Fähigkeit, mich schnell in neue Kontexten zurecht zu finden, werde ich die Weltweite und Europäische Zuwendungsgeber schnell kennenlernen.
Zum Schluss habe ich die notwendige Fähigkeiten und die Zuverlässigkeit, Verantwortungsgefühl und Flexibilität, die für diese Stelle notwendig sind. Gerne würde ich diese Stelle annehmen, um mit meinen Erfahrungen und Fähigkeiten zum Projekterfolg beizutragen. Danke für Ihre Zeit und ich würde mich freuen, Sie in einem persönlichen Gespräch zu überzeugen.
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