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En train d'apprendre deux langues au même temps
En ce moment, je suis en train d'amelliorer mon frances (je sais que je fais beaucoup des erreurs quand j'écrire) et aussi en train d'apprendre le portuguese. Je veut consolider ma langue oral et ma langue écrit en français, pour gagner plus fluidité d'en côté, et pour faire moins érreurs de l'autre.
Quant au le portuguese, je le trouve la langue écrit plus facile, parce que elle est très similaire à l'espagnol, mais j'ai quelques problèmes avec la pronunciation, alors, je éssaie de pratiquer souvant et de participer à toutes les conversations online que je peux.
March 3, 2022
030301-A simple analyze of an ad
The picture is a print ad of DR diamond ring, coming from its official website. This company sells proposal rings, and its main customer is the vast heterosexual community.
I think it is a successful ad for feelers because the diamond ring is an appearance product, and its value source is romantic love. This billboard has heavy imagery and little copy: customers can see a giant product picture on the left and a terse description on the right.
The image shows a hand wearing the wedding ring resting on the other hand so that the viewers can imagine the bride's joy. There is a ring box with a brand logo and a letter of agreement to shape a responsible husband's image. The copy-writing stresses "only" and "always", like a marriage proposal. The customers would have vicarious emotional experiences from this brand.
*This is a homework clip written for my Business English class.
March 3, 2022
March 3, 2022
Writing Practice
Okay, if you go to a strange city for work, you will have some colleagues; if you go to another city for business, you will have your business partners; if you go to the city to study, you will have your classmates, so you don't need to try to get to know people. As long as you have your life circle, people will have the chance to get to know you.
There are many activities that people can do in their spare time. They can watch movies, do exercises, travel, study and so on. In short, everyone has their hobbies. They can do what they like to spend their free time.
March 3, 2022
수요일의 글
1. 가지를 좋아하는다니요? 가지를 싫어하는 줄 알았어요.
2. 열에 있으면 밀지 말도록 하세요.
3. 살도 빠질 겸 새 옷을 살 겸 덜 먹으려고 해요.
4. 하늘이 어두은데 비가 올지도 몰라요.
5. 대회를 이긴 적이 없어요.
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1. 대학에서 다녔을 때 독일에 유학했어요.
어, 정말요? 이전 독일에 유학한 줄 몰랐어요.
2. 새로운 커피머신이 어때요?
아침으로 편리한 반면에 너무 시끄럽네요.
3. 왜 땀을 흘리고 있나요?
제 차가 고장을 하는 바람에 걸어와야 했어요. 그래서 너무 더워요.
4. 태윤 씨가 많이 먹지만 몸이 약한 모양이에요.
네, 요즘도 피곤해 보여요.
5. 오늘까지 너무 많은 업무를 끝내야 해요.
몇 업무를 남겨요. 끝내 줄게요.
March 3, 2022
March 3, 2022
一か月後死ぬとしたら
いつものように厳しく添削してください。文法的に合っていても不自然な文であれば遠慮なくどんな風に言えば良かったか教えてください。文章をすべて変えても全然構いません。むしろそうしていただいた方がありがたいです！
今日は特に話したいことがないんで、初めての課題を使うことにした。その課題は１ヶ月後死ぬと知ったら、残りをどう生きるかという質問。私だったら、多分周りにいる人に教えない。心配させたくないのもあるけど、何より、私への態度や接し方を変えてほしくない。変な気遣いをされるのは嫌だし、今のままでいいと思ってる。そして、日本語の勉強をやめる。私にとって、今に至っては日本語の勉強は趣味みたいなものになってるんで、別にやりたくないとは思わない。しかし、そこにたくさんの時間を費やしてる。人生があと１ヶ月だったら、その時間を別のものに充てたい。それに、そもそも語学の習得という観点から、1ヶ月はそんなに長い時間じゃないと思う。1ヶ月勉強したところで、その時の私にあって、今の私にないものなんて想像できない。とにかく、日本語の勉強をなしにする。仕事は多分やめないけどね。六年生の卒業式はもうすぐだし、最後までちゃんと見届けたい。生徒に英語を教えるこの仕事はもちろん好きだけど、それより私の生徒のこと自体が好き。みんなはいつも元気でいい子だから、私から去っていくことはできない。他は、北海道に行きたい。今まで行ったことがないし、雪も好きだからきっと楽しいだろう。日本は本当にどこに行っても綺麗な景色が見られる気がするけど、特に北海道の景色に興味がある。後は、多分アメリカに帰って家族や友達と過ごすかな。ずっと見たり読んだりしたいと思ってたけど、できなかった本や映画があるからついにそれをしようかな。考えてみればやりたいことが少なくない？まあ、どうせ実際にその状況になったら、多分想像通りには行かないだろう。
March 2, 2022
Examen Oral
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J'ai écrit ceci pour mon examen oral l'année dernière et je dois présenter ça encore le semaine prochain. Pouvez-vous m'aider l'améliorer?
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Ma passion c’est volley. Quand j’étais plus jeune, ma maman me disait que je devez avoir un passe-temps car j’étais paresseuse et je n’ai rien chez. Alors, j’ai choisi volley. D’abord, je pensais que je le détesterais mais en fait c’étais vraiment amusant!
Maintenant, je joue toujours au volley cependant j’aime aussi la lecture. Je crois que je lis depuis deux ans. D’habitude s’il pleut puis je reste dans chez moi et je lis depuis pendant des heures. J’adore ça! A mon avis, des classiques sont plus agréables que des romans d’amour. J’aime beaucoup avoir de passe-temps parce que j’amuse quand je le fais.
Le weekend prochaine, je vais aller à la meilleure libraire en ville ‘Waterstones’ avec ma copine, Anwyn. J’espere acheter un nouveau livre qui je m’intéresse. Apres, nous irons un match de volley et nous regardions notre amie, Holly, jouer. Elle est absolument incroyable. Un fois qu’elle a fini, on retournera chez Holly et on regardera des films. Par contre, je ne veux pas regarder des films d’horreur donc j’imagine que nous regardions des film d’action. Ce serait folie totale.
March 2, 2022
March 2, 2022
Des outils me permettant d'améliorer mon français
Après un an de pause, je me suis encore une fois abonnée au Monde afin de faire face aux phrases au niveau plus élevé que les autres journaux. Même au sujet pareil, les articles du Monde sont plus difficiles à lire en matière de grammaire, de sturucture des phrases, et surtout de vocabulaire. Je me crois mieux équipée maintenant pour décortiquer le contenu, mais je verrai.
Ce qui reste à faire est de trouver un bon site web qui me permet de m'entraîner en français de langage familier. Il m'arrive de temps en temps de regarder des vidéos YouTube des jeunes youtubeurs qui parlent très vite, mais malheureusement (et bien sûr) il n'y a pas de sous-titres. Donc si je tombe sur une partie qui m'est imcompréhensible, ça le restera, ce qui est très frustrant. J'aimrais bien que les vidéos de Squeezie en soient accompagnées de fait qu'il prononce les mots coup sur coup en étant avec ses amis. Ça serait un bon entraînement.
March 2, 2022
Veleno (di Pablo Trincia)
Ho stampato il libro e scaricato i podcast della serie mesi e mesi fa, ma ancora non avevo avuto il coraggio nemmeno il tempo di fare nulla con questo materiale.
Qualche settimana fa, ho scoperto che esiste anche la serie televisiva su Amazon Italia. Ho cominciato a cercarla come matta e ieri finalmente l'ho trovata su un sito di streaming.
Ho guardato la prima puntata e mi è colpita in tale modo che adesso voglio vederla e rivederla ancora e ancora, dato che non ho capito un pezzettino della storia. Non ci sono dei sottotitoli disponibili come quelli che ci sono su Amazon o Netflix.
Allora ho messo tutta la mia voglia di guardarla e mi sono concentrata nel modo in cui parlano. É stato un buon esercizio di ascolto!!!
Adesso comincerò a guardare la seconda puntata, dato che ce ne sono soltanto cinque.
Non ho condiviso l'informazione nel gruppo dell'italiano dato che quando dico qualcosa nessuno mi fa caso. Allora, capisco che non sono interessati e mi taccio. Che cerchino l'informazione da sé stessi...
Questo non è egoismo ma capisco che parlare con chi non vuole ascoltare è perdita di tempo!!!!! Il mio é prezioso!!!!
March 2, 2022
March 2, 2022
A Shot in the Dark - 50
Part no. 50.
This summary was deliberately written in the present tense (analyse it as if it’s taking place* as you read it).
It’s early morning and Sergeant Brunswick is heading over to Mrs. Thorpe’s house. The dinner room is now back to its intended purpose** after the forensic team scoured it through the night. Brunswick believes that Mrs Thorpe may well turn out a valuable witness, her position almost at the forefront of the whole situation. On his arrival there he finds, of course, a distressed Mrs. Thorpe. When she seems to have braced herself, he starts to interview her. He first raises her encounter with the female con artist posing as a poll lady. Mrs Thorpe gives a vague description of this woman and some interesting details as well. For example, this poll lady had kept a perfect posh accent throughout the conversation. However, when she was ready to leave, her Cockeny rhyming slang got the better of her, giving the game away. Another interesting detail is that she had a list of questions and she stuck to it, asking nothing else. Brunswick reasons it’s likely that she cunningly made a point of looking interested only in that list, while discreetly assessing if Mrs. Thorpe’s house was a worth target. One thing seemed to stand out more than others. The poll lady offered Mrs Thorpe a ticket to the hippodrome show for last night. She has done it with other victims as well. When he feels satisfied with what he’s learnt, Brunswick turns the subject to the late Braithwaite. Mrs Thorpe explains that Braithwaite was livid when he heard of the poll lady’s visit. Braithwaite was adamant that the poll lady was a con artist and that the police should be alerted at once.
*Can I use “unfolding” instead of “taking place”?
**I meant that a murder had occured in the dining room and, therefore, the police had closed it off (as a crime scene).
March 2, 2022
March 2, 2022
Quelle est votre saison préférée de l'année ? Pourquoi ?
Ma saison préférée est le printemps. Je ne sais pas pourquoi. Je pense que je l'aime quand les fleurs commencement fleurir ou quand il fait beau, donc mes amis et moi pouvons aller se promener dans la campagne. Aussi, l'été est trop chaud pour moi et l'hiver est trop froid. Je trouve l'automne très ennuyeux puisque il pleut tous les temps et je reste chez moi.
March 2, 2022
March 2, 2022
Eine email meine Freundin
Lieber Eva,
mein Stadt wurde letzte woche ein neues vegetarisches Restaurant eröffnet. Ich schreibe dir, dass sie mich besuchen. Ich möchte auch mit dir ins Restaurant gehen.
Das neue Restaurant ist ein bischen klein, trotzdem ist die Atmosphäre angenehm. Es hat grüne Tische und Stühle. Es hat eine Terasse. Die Speisen sind sehr gerne, weil die Obst und Gemüse sehr frisches sind. Findet man viele Salat, Obssalat, und gekochtes Gemüse. Ich mochte die gegrillte Schüssel mit Gemüse sehr. Man kann viele gekochtes Speise findet, aber man findet rohes Salat auch. Meine meinung ist, dass das Gesunde ernährung ist wichtig. Es is sehr wichtig roh Gemüse zu essen.
In zwei Wochen werde ich zu dir am Bahnhof gehen. Wir werden im Park spazieren gehen, weil uns frisches Luft wichtig ist. Wir werden ein Eis essen. Dann werden wir das Restaurant gehen, weil ich einen Sitzplatz reservien. Ich warte auf dich.
Herzliche Grüße
Deine Csilla
March 2, 2022
L'ingénieur
Il y a beaucoup de différents espèces d'ingénieur. Par exemple un pour les bâtiments, les électricités, les ponts et cetera. C'est bien sûr un travail dur mais avec un bon salaire. En plus si on aime cet sorte de travail on peut parvenir beaucoup de choses. D'ingénieurs changent la monde, si on veut devenir un on doit apprendre un variées de choses. On a besoin d'être capable à travailler avec
plusieurs.
March 2, 2022
OJ Simpson
Me acuerdo de que cuando era niño el tribunal de OJ Simpson acaparó los títulos en la nación. Creo que era un hito en la sistema judicial que puso a relieve el poder del dinero en el proceso de juicio. Al parecer el equipo demandante presentaba varias evidencias que indicaba que Simpson había cometido el crimen de asesinar a su esposa. Sin embargo, al final fue exonerado de todos los cargos que se le imputaron. Al escuchar el fallo muchas personas se pusieron atónitos y indignados que dejaran libre alguien que, a su juicio, obviamente había cometido un delito. Para colmo años depués el mismo Simpson publicó un libro detallando cómo hubiera llevado a cabo el asesinato llamado, Si lo hubiera hecho. Tanto a la familia de la victima que a aquellos que seguieron de acerca el juicio pensaron que él estaba burlándose y saliendo con la suya.
March 2, 2022
IELTS Writing
As the world popuation grows, the sources of human needs are becoming harder to access. One major need of humans is food and every day food sources become less. Some people believe that in order to require the needs of the food for the population, countries should consider insects as food ressources. This essay will discuss the benefits and the drawbacks of insect consumption.
Some insects have been consumed in different cultures for centuries and known to be rich in protein. There has been reports and researchs about edible insects and their consumption. Some scientists believe that meat production and consumption causes environmental problems and world's current ressources will not be able to feed the whole population in the future therefore people should replace them with more sustainable and durable options of protein. Insects such as cockroaches are rich in protein and can live in almost any circumstances even after nuclear explotions. Therefore they are a good alternative for regular protein sources such as chicken and fish.
Although insects are rich in nutritions they also harm the environment and and affect the food chain negatively. They carry diseases and may cause serious problems to humans and other animals. If a country decides to consume insects as foods, the government should regulate them carefully or do it itself in order to prevent the overpopulation of the insects.
In south Asian countries such as Thailand and India, insects are common street food with huge consumption even though their not-so-charming apperance. Insect consumption may started due to lack of food in these countries and become a cultural habit. In my view, they not really appealing and may cause some digestion problems. If there would be no other option they are good alternatives but for now I do not see an urgency to consume insects as food ressources therefore will not recommend to do so.
March 2, 2022
2 mars 2022 - votre endroies à vous
Vous êtes plutôt plage, montagne, forêt ou un tout autre lieu?
Je suis plutôt plage. Le plage, ça représente la mer et le soleil. J'aime beaucoup me connecter à la mer parce qu'elle est comme le monde. Chaque côté d'elle touche un plage ou au moins un front d'une ville. Quand la vague touche mes pieds, peut-être qu’elle a déjà voyagé cents kilometres d'Afrique à mon front. En ce moment, je me sens de ne plus coincer ici. De plus, la mer est tellement grande qu'elle peut accomoder beaucoup de choses, et même ma tristesse.
March 2, 2022
March 2, 2022
030201 - A lamentable comedian
I checked out a funny vedio clip from a variety show. One guest is DaBing, who is a talented impersonator. He is also quick-minded and humorous when he retorted the host‘s joke. I nearly died laughing in five minutes and had a boundless feeling.
Suddenly, I saw some comments saying he had passed away because of drugs. I am shocked! Then I read an article about how he struggled with addiction. In five years, he was caught four times and sent to detox three times. Every time, he swore that he would never touch drugs, but he cannot keep his promise. He destroyed his credit and career path.
I felt so sad because he made things as jolly for the audients but he was caught by the sadness and physical pain. I hope nobody would be ruined by drugs anymore, though I knew it is a mirage.
March 2, 2022
1인 가구
사회가 다른 방향으로 발전해 나가는 결과로 1인 가구 현상이 일어났다. 이는 독립적으로 사는 것이 좋아서의 일부 이유이다. 하지만, 대부분 사람이 결혼해서 가족을 만들 경제적 여유가 없기 때문에 1인 가구를 선택한다. 물가가 비싸는 것도 그렇고, 부동산을 소유하지 못하는 이상 혼자서 사는 선택이 최선이라고 여기는 사람이 많다. 1인 가구 방향으로 가는 대부분 이유는 경제적 여유가 없는 것에 있다. 이러한 현상으로 인해 생길 수 있는 문제가 상당히 많다. 예를 들면, 저출산 같은 문제가 점점 심하게 나타나며, 노동력도 함께 부족해지고 있다. 사회 문제가 아니더라도 개인에게도 문제가 충분히 생길 수 있다. 반복하는 일상 속에 갇혀 있다는 느낌으로 우울증이 찾아오기 일쑤다. 누구와 함께 지내면 친근하게 살아가는 데는 힘이 되고 격려가 된다. 그래서 1인 가구 현상을 덜하기 위한 대책 방안의 필요가 있다. 사람이 경제적인 여유와 충분한 벌이가 되어 있으면, 자기와 맞는 사람을 만날 때 망설임 없이 결혼을 진지하게 생각하게 된다. 이는 가능해지도록 국가의 사업들이 월급을 충분히 제공해야 한다. 부동산을 보유할 수 있게 그의 값을 줄이는 것도 또 한 방법이다. 그 외에도, 개인이 결혼 중요성과 필요성을 인식시키는 강의나 프로그램을 만들면 문제를 해결하는 데 영향을 미친다. 결혼 선택을 하든 말든 개인의 자유이자 영역이다. 외재적인 요인을 없애도록 해야 할 뿐이다.
March 2, 2022
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