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Argument about long school holidays
Most primary schools have long holidays in summer around the world, which is criticized by some people, though, being supported by others.
The most manifest signification of long-period holidays is that it gives students opportunities to relax after, perhaps, industrious study. No one can continuously study or work all the time, and if there were no interval between a school year, hardly no children could be trapped in mental health problems. Therefore, this relaxation may help them perform better in the next semester, let alone some countries appearing to get scorching summer, which may cause some vulnerable people, especially children, to be faint.
On the contrary, parents, the majority of the opposers of this viewpoint possibly worry about long vacations affect their childrens' academy. Of course, if their children are exposed to an environment which is suffused with juvenile delinquency, this will be hazard to their study, or even health. For instance, some teenagers may learn to gamble or smoke. From another prospective, some parents cannot be ever-present to supervise their children for the reason that they may be hectic or they could not be bothered to care children. Hence, it is common to see complaints against long-holiday policy.
An argument about long school holidays
Most primary schools have long holidays in summer around the world, which is criticized by some people, though, beingbut supported by others.
The most manifest significationimportant benefit of long-period holidays is that ithey gives students opportunities to relax after, perhaps, industrious study.
HolidayS (plural) --> they (not it)
Manifest and signification are very rare and very formal words, which don't fit here.
No need to use long-period, just long is good.
No one can continuously study or work all the time, and if there were no interval between a school years, hardlyalmost no children cwould be trapped inescape without mental health problems.
"hardly no children could be trapped in mental health problems" --> this means that none of the children would develop mental health problems, as in they'd be fine. From the start of your sentence, I don't think this is what you mean.
Therefore, this relaxation maycould help them perform better in the next semester, let alone. Furthermore, some countries appearing to get scorching summer, which may cause some vulnerable people, especially children, to be faint.
This sentence seems to contain 2 seperate ideas (1. they could relax, and 2. the summers are very hot). I think it would sound better if each idea got it's own sentence.
On the contrary, parents, (the majority of the opposers of this viewpoint possibl) may worry about the impact of long vacations affecton their childrens' academyic success.
Of course, if their children are exposed to an environment which is suffused with juvenile delinquency, this willcould be hazard to their studyacademic success, or even their health.
Nice use of the word suffused :)
For instance, some teenagers may learn to gamble or smoke.
From another prospective, some parents cannot be ever-present to supervise their children for the reason that- they may be hectictoo busy, or they couldmay not be bothered to care about their own children.
Hence, it is common to see complaints against a long-holiday policy.
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For instance, some teenagers may learn to gamble or smoke. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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From another prospective, some parents cannot be ever-present to supervise their children for the reason that they may be hectic or they could not be bothered to care children. From another prospective, some parents cannot be ever-present to supervise their children |
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Hence, it is common to see complaints against long-holiday policy. Hence, it is common to see complaints against a long-holiday policy. |
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Argument about long school holidays An argument about long school holidays |
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Most primary schools have long holidays in summer around the world, which is criticized by some people, though, being supported by others. Most primary schools have long holidays in summer around the world, which is criticized by some people, |
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The most manifest signification of long-period holidays is that it gives students opportunities to relax after, perhaps, industrious study. The most HolidayS (plural) --> they (not it) Manifest and signification are very rare and very formal words, which don't fit here. No need to use long-period, just long is good. |
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No one can continuously study or work all the time, and if there were no interval between a school year, hardly no children could be trapped in mental health problems. No one can continuously study or work all the time, and if there were no interval between "hardly no children could be trapped in mental health problems" --> this means that none of the children would develop mental health problems, as in they'd be fine. From the start of your sentence, I don't think this is what you mean. |
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Therefore, this relaxation may help them perform better in the next semester, let alone some countries appearing to get scorching summer, which may cause some vulnerable people, especially children, to be faint. Therefore, this relaxation This sentence seems to contain 2 seperate ideas (1. they could relax, and 2. the summers are very hot). I think it would sound better if each idea got it's own sentence. |
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On the contrary, parents, the majority of the opposers of this viewpoint possibly worry about long vacations affect their childrens' academy. On the contrary, parents |
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Of course, if their children are exposed to an environment which is suffused with juvenile delinquency, this will be hazard to their study, or even health. Of course, if their children are exposed to an environment which is suffused with juvenile delinquency, this Nice use of the word suffused :) |
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