Thatere was meeting friends, a part -time job… There was meeting friends, a part-time job…

I retotally forgot that! I totally forgot that!

People don't really say "really forgot." The adverbs that go with "forget" are usually "totally" and "completely."

The couple sitting in front was talk about their troubles at work.

This week I completely forgot a few important “things”. This week I completely forgot a few important things.

But at the last momentinute, an angel coames and reminded me. But at the last minute, an angel came and reminded me.

Use the past simple here.

Hence, I managed to show up and don’idn't make a fool of myself. Hence, I managed to show up and didn't make a fool of myself.

The “angel” iwas a man or woman. The “angel” was a man or woman.

Like last night was my part -time job night. Last night was my part-time job night.

Or, "Last night, I worked a shift for my part-time job."

Since I wasI completely forgot about that. I completely forgot about that.

When Iile I was sitting ion the bus on my way go homethe way home, the couple sitting in front of me was talking about their troubles at work. While I was sitting on the bus on the way home, the couple sitting in front of me was talking about their troubles at work.

Not a complete sentence - combine with the next one.

Their voices reminded me, that I haved a part -time job to do. Their voices reminded me that I had a part-time job to do.

So, I immediately get ouot off the bus and gowent to my work place on time. So I immediately got off the bus and went to my workplace on time.

You get on a bus, then you sit on the bus, then you get off the bus.