May 11, 2020
热水
当我上了从九年级到十年级的时候，我晚上总是喝绿茶。我以前常常开夜车来做作业。绿茶帮助了我不入睡。我也听到了绿茶让你减肥。可是因为我晚上喝得很多杯绿茶，所以我经常做完作业后熬夜，平常入睡二点半左右。然后我次日很累，在学校想睡觉。我今年开始喝热水。我了解我不要只喝茶，但是就想喝热的饮料。我现在入眠得更早，子夜左右。
When I did homework at night from 9th grade to 10th grade, I always drank green tea. In the past I often stayed up late and worked on homework. Green tea helped me not fall asleep. I also heard that green tea helped you lose weight. But because I always drank a lot of cups of green tea at night, I often stayed up late after doing my homework, normally at 2:30 AM. Then, the next day I would be tired and wanted to sleep at school. I started drinking boiled water this year. I found out that I didn't actually want to drink tea, I just wanted to drink a hot drink. Now I sleep earlier at around midnight.
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当我上了从我九年级到十年级的时候，我晚上总是喝绿茶。
我九年级到十年级的时候，晚上总是喝绿茶。
我以前常常开夜车通宵来做作业。，
我以前常常通宵来做作业，
而绿茶能帮助了我不入睡在做作业的时候睡着。
而绿茶能帮助我不在做作业的时候睡着。
我也听到了绿茶让你说绿茶可以帮助减肥。
我也听说绿茶可以帮助减肥。
可是因为我晚上喝得很多杯绿茶，所以我经常做完作业后熬夜还是没办法睡觉，平常入睡二点半左右才入睡。
因为我晚上喝很多杯绿茶，所以我经常做完作业后还是没办法睡觉，平常二点半左右才入睡。
然后我次日(第二天)会很累，在学校想睡觉。 然后我次日(第二天)会很累，在学校想睡觉。
次日 is a very formal expression, seems a little wired here. Though not a problem, I think using 第二天 will be better.
我今年开始喝热水。
我了解我不要只喝茶，但是就发现我不是非要喝茶，就是想喝热的饮料。
我发现我不是非要喝茶，就是想喝热的饮料。
我现在入眠得更早，子夜左右比以前睡得更早了，十二点左右就睡了。
我现在比以前睡得更早了，十二点左右就睡了。
Midnight is actually 半夜 or 子夜, but in your former statement, 2:30 am is also called 半夜, and you want to express the meaning of "sleep earlier", so I think using actual time will be more suitable.
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当我上了从九年级到十年级的时候，我晚上总是喝绿茶。
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我以前常常开夜车来做作业。
我以前常常 |
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绿茶帮助了我不入睡。
而绿茶能帮助 |
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我也听到了绿茶让你减肥。
我也听 |
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可是因为我晚上喝得很多杯绿茶，所以我经常做完作业后熬夜，平常入睡二点半左右。
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然后我次日很累，在学校想睡觉。 然后我次日(第二天)会很累，在学校想睡觉。 然后我次日(第二天)会很累，在学校想睡觉。 次日 is a very formal expression, seems a little wired here. Though not a problem, I think using 第二天 will be better. |
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我今年开始喝热水。 This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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我了解我不要只喝茶，但是就想喝热的饮料。
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我现在入眠得更早，子夜左右。
我现在 Midnight is actually 半夜 or 子夜, but in your former statement, 2:30 am is also called 半夜, and you want to express the meaning of "sleep earlier", so I think using actual time will be more suitable. |
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