March 1, 2021
My experience
I have strong confidence that I am capable of further learning of this major. One significant driver is that I am a qualified member to your program in terms of social practice accumulation. Taking some concrete instances, I have significant leadership experience as a deputy store manager of a makeup shop. During my tenure, I led our sales team to achieve first place in terms of sales volume. I am also a good team player and independent problem solver as a sales assistant of Kenji department in Decathlon. I assisted the manager and solved many challenging problems through time management, via establishing a clear division of work and with the whole-hearted cooperation of every team member, during which I was awarded the Outstanding Member of Staff and was chosen as the Service Star for my excellent performance. Moreover, my experiences as a member of multiple school clubs and an organizer in arranging the Star of Outlook English Talent Competition have greatly enriched my college life and also helped to improve my communication and organizational skills. Another key factor involves my keen interest in luxury goods, fashion and sales management expertise. I have dabbled in a wide range of books and took business-related online courses and completed these course with certificates in my spare time, which definitely widened my knowledge preserve. For instance, the online course-Financial Markets of Yale University offered me an overview of the ideas, methods, and institutions that permit human society to manage risks and foster enterprise; Successful Negotiation: Essential Strategies and Skills of University of Michigan greatly improved my ability to negotiate. To successfully complete these online courses, I was required to take tests and carry out thesis.
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My experience
I have strongam very confidencet that I am capable of further learning of this major.
I am very confident that I am capable of further learning of this major.
One significant driver is that I am a qualified to be a member tof your program is in terms of social practice accumulationexperience.
One significant driver that I am qualified to be a member of your program is in terms of social practice experience.
Taking some concrete instances, I have significant leadership experience as a deputy store manager of a makeup shop.
During my tenure, I led our sales team to achieve first place in terms of sales volume.
I am also a good team player and independent problem solver as a sales assistant of Kenji department in Decathlon.
I am a good team player and independent problem solver as a sales assistant of Kenji department in Decathlon.
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I assisted the manager and solved many challenging problems through time management, via establishing a clear division of work and with the whole-hearted cooperation of every team member, during which I was awarded the Outstanding Member of Staff and was chosen as the Service Star for my excellent performance.
Moreover, my experiences as a member of multiple school clubs and an organizer in arranging the Star of Outlook English Talent Competition have greatly enriched my college life and also helped to improve my communication and organizational skills.
Another key factor involves my keen interest in luxury goods, fashion and sales management expertise.
I have dabbled inread a wide range of books and took business-related online courses andin order to broaden my knowledge. I completed these course with certificates in my spare time, which definitely widened my knowledge preserve.
I have read a wide range of books and took business-related online courses in order to broaden my knowledge. I completed these course with certificates in my spare time.
For instance, the online course-Financial Markets of Yale University offered me an overview of the ideas, methods, and institutions that permit human society to manage risks and foster enterprise; Successful Negotiation: Essential Strategies and Skills of University of Michigan greatly improved my ability to negotiate.
To successfully complete these online courses, I was required to take tests and carry out thesis.
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I have strong confidence that I am capable of further learning of this major.
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One significant driver is that I am a qualified member to your program in terms of social practice accumulation.
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Taking some concrete instances, I have significant leadership experience as a deputy store manager of a makeup shop. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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During my tenure, I led our sales team to achieve first place in terms of sales volume. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I am also a good team player and independent problem solver as a sales assistant of Kenji department in Decathlon.
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I assisted the manager and solved many challenging problems through time management, via establishing a clear division of work and with the whole-hearted cooperation of every team member, during which I was awarded the Outstanding Member of Staff and was chosen as the Service Star for my excellent performance. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Moreover, my experiences as a member of multiple school clubs and an organizer in arranging the Star of Outlook English Talent Competition have greatly enriched my college life and also helped to improve my communication and organizational skills. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Another key factor involves my keen interest in luxury goods, fashion and sales management expertise. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I have dabbled in a wide range of books and took business-related online courses and completed these course with certificates in my spare time, which definitely widened my knowledge preserve.
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For instance, the online course-Financial Markets of Yale University offered me an overview of the ideas, methods, and institutions that permit human society to manage risks and foster enterprise; Successful Negotiation: Essential Strategies and Skills of University of Michigan greatly improved my ability to negotiate. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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To successfully complete these online courses, I was required to take tests and carry out thesis. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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