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July 11, 2024

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Yose(寄席)

Recently, I am interested in Yose(寄席), where various traditional Japanese entertainments are held. I regularly visit a vaudeville theater in Asakusa and enjoy listening to Rakugo, stand-up comedy as well as watching magic, paper cutting, acrobatics, and so on. The theater, built in 1907, is well-known as the comedy hall of fame in the downtown area and has been attracting a lot of fans.

Also yesterday, I visited Asakusa Engei Hall(浅草演芸ホール) and had the first experience of asking a paper cutting performer to make a piece of paperwork in accordance with my request. As I knew he usually accepts audience’s requests, I had decided what to ask him in advance, that is, a piece featuring a cat in anger. Luckily, he nominated me who had raised the hand quickly and started cutting deftly while jokingly saying, “Don’t consider me to be able to cut whatever you want!” However, in two or three minutes, he finished and showed a marvelous piece of work to the audience. It featured a cat in anger against her owner who was offering her the meal piling high up. It was very precise and humors. As I was really satisfied with it, I deeply appreciated him and handed over an envelope containing a 1000- yen note to him. He happily put it inside of the breast of the kimono. This piece of work has become a family heirloom.


最近、寄席に興味があります。寄席では、さまざまな日本の伝統芸能が行われます。浅草の寄席に定期的に通い、落語や漫才を聴いたり、マジックや紙切り、曲芸などを観たりしています。1907年に建てられたこの劇場は、下町のコメディの殿堂として有名で、多くのファンを魅了しています。

昨日も浅草演芸ホールに行って、紙切の芸人にリクエストをして紙細工を作ってもらうという初めての体験をしました。彼は普段観客のリクエストに応じること知っていたので、何を頼むかは事前に決めていました。怒った猫です。幸運にも、彼はすぐに手を挙げた私を指名してくれて、冗談交じりに「あなたの望むものを何でも切れると思うなよ!」と言いながら、手際よく切り始めました。そして2、3分で素晴らしい作品を仕上げ、観客に披露しました。それは、怒った猫と猫に山盛りの餌を差し出して詫びる飼い主を描いた作品で、非常に緻密でユーモアにあふれていました。私は本当に満足したので深く感謝し、千円札の入ったお祝儀を彼に手渡しました。彼は喜んでそれを着物の懐にしまいました。この作品は我が家の家宝となりました。

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Recently, I amhave become interested in Yose(寄席), where variousa type of traditional Japanese theater where various entertainments are held.

Since an English audience wouldn't know Yose, I changed the sentence to define it clearly.

I regularly visit a vaudevillyose theater in Asakusa and enjoy listening to Rakugo, (a form of stand-up comedy), as well as watching magic, paper cutting, acrobatics, and so on.

We just learned what 'yose' is in the last sentence, so we can use it in this sentence without an explanation.

The theater, built in 1907, is well-known as the comedy hall of fame in the downtown area and has been attracting a lot of fans.

Also yesterday, I visited Asakusa Engei Hall(浅草演芸ホール) and had the first experience of asking a paper cutting performer to make a piece of paperwork in accordance with my request.

As I knew he usually accepts audience’s requests, I had decided what to ask him in advance, that is, a piece featuring a cat in anger.

Luckily, he nominated me who hachose me because I'd raised themy hand quickly, and started cutting deftly while jokingly saying, “Don’t consider me to be able to cut whatever you want!” However, in two or three minutes, he finished and showed a marvelous piece of work to the audience.

It featured a cat in anger against her owner who was offering her the meal piling high upa pile of kibble.

'Kibble' is dry cat food.

It was very precise and humorous.

As I was really satisfied with it, I deeply appreciated him and handed over an envelope containing a 1000- yen note to him.

He happily put it inside of the breast of thehis kimono.

This piece of work has become a family heirloom.

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July 12, 2024

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いつもありがとうございます。数々のご指摘、大変納得いたしました。

Recently, I am've been interested in Yose(寄席), where various traditional Japanese entertainment shows are held.

I regularly visit a vaudeville theater in Asakusa and enjoy listening to Rrakugo, (stand-up comedy,) as well as watching magic, paper cutting, acrobatics, and so on.

The theater, built in 1907, is well-known as the comedy hall of fame in the downtown area and has been attracting a lot of fans.

Also yesterday, I visited Asakusa Engei Hall(浅草演芸ホール) and had the first experience of asking a paper cutting performer to make a piece of paperwork in accordance with my request.

As I knew he usually accepts audience’s requests, I had decided what to ask him in advance, that is,which was a piece featuring a cat in anger.

Luckily, he nominated me who had raised themy hand quickly and started cutting deftly while jokingly saying, “Don’t consider me toassume I'll be able to cut whatever you want!” However, in two or three minutes, he finished and showed a marvelous piece of work to the audience.

It featured a cat in anger againstangry towards her owner, who was offering her the meala plate with food pilinged high up.

It was very precise and humorous.

As I was really satisfied with it, Iand deeply appreciated him and, I handed over an envelope containing a 1000- yen note to him.

He happily put it inside of the breast of the kimono.

This piece of work has become a family heirloom.

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ronpei

July 11, 2024

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添削いただきありがとうございました。

Yose(寄席)

Recently, I am interested in Yose(寄席), where various kinds of traditional Japanese entertainments are held.

I regularly visit a vaudeville theater in Asakusa and enjoy listening to Rakugo, a.k.a. stand-up comedy, as well as watching magic shows, paper cutting, acrobatics, and so on.

"aka" is short for "also known as." It's a very colloquial phrase but I put it in because it's a prime example of when you would use it in conversation.

The theater, built in 1907, is well-known as the comedy hall of fame in the downtown area and has been attracting a lot of fans.

Also yesterday, I visited Asakusa Engei Hall(浅草演芸ホール) and had themy first experience of asking a paper cutting performer to make a piece of paperwork in accordance with my request.

As I knew he usually accepts audience’s requests, I had decided what to ask him in advance, that is, a piece featuring a cat in anger.

Luckily, he nominated me whopicked me, as I had raised themy hand quickly, and started cutting deftly while jokingly saying, “Don’t consider me to be able to cut whatever you want!” However, in two or three minutes, he finished and showed a marvelous piece of work to the audience.

It featured a cat in anger against her owner who was offering her thea meal pilinged high up.

A more figurative expression could be "a tower of food"

It was very precise and humorous.

AsBecause I was really satisfied with it, I showed him my deeply appreciated himion and handed over an envelope containing a 1000- yen note to him.

He happily put it inside of the breast of the kimono.

This piece of work has become a family heirloom.

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ronpei

July 11, 2024

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素早い添削、誠にありがとうございます。

Yose(寄席)


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Recently, I am interested in Yose(寄席), where various traditional Japanese entertainments are held.


Recently, I am interested in Yose(寄席), where various kinds of traditional Japanese entertainments are held.

Recently, I am've been interested in Yose(寄席), where various traditional Japanese entertainment shows are held.

Recently, I amhave become interested in Yose(寄席), where variousa type of traditional Japanese theater where various entertainments are held.

Since an English audience wouldn't know Yose, I changed the sentence to define it clearly.

I regularly visit a vaudeville theater in Asakusa and enjoy listening to Rakugo, stand-up comedy as well as watching magic, paper cutting, acrobatics, and so on.


I regularly visit a vaudeville theater in Asakusa and enjoy listening to Rakugo, a.k.a. stand-up comedy, as well as watching magic shows, paper cutting, acrobatics, and so on.

"aka" is short for "also known as." It's a very colloquial phrase but I put it in because it's a prime example of when you would use it in conversation.

I regularly visit a vaudeville theater in Asakusa and enjoy listening to Rrakugo, (stand-up comedy,) as well as watching magic, paper cutting, acrobatics, and so on.

I regularly visit a vaudevillyose theater in Asakusa and enjoy listening to Rakugo, (a form of stand-up comedy), as well as watching magic, paper cutting, acrobatics, and so on.

We just learned what 'yose' is in the last sentence, so we can use it in this sentence without an explanation.

The theater, built in 1907, is well-known as the comedy hall of fame in the downtown area and has been attracting a lot of fans.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Also yesterday, I visited Asakusa Engei Hall(浅草演芸ホール) and had the first experience of asking a paper cutting performer to make a piece of paperwork in accordance with my request.


Also yesterday, I visited Asakusa Engei Hall(浅草演芸ホール) and had themy first experience of asking a paper cutting performer to make a piece of paperwork in accordance with my request.

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As I knew he usually accepts audience’s requests, I had decided what to ask him in advance, that is, a piece featuring a cat in anger.


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As I knew he usually accepts audience’s requests, I had decided what to ask him in advance, that is,which was a piece featuring a cat in anger.

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It was very precise and humors.


It was very precise and humorous.

It was very precise and humorous.

It was very precise and humorous.

He happily put it inside of the breast of the kimono.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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He happily put it inside of the breast of thehis kimono.

It featured a cat in anger against its owner over its meal.


As I was really satisfied with it, I deeply appreciated him and handed him over an envelope containing a 1000- yen note.


Luckily, he nominated me who had raised the hand quickly and started cutting deftly while jokingly saying, “Don’t consider me to be able to cut whatever you want!” However, in two or three minutes, he finished and showed a marvelous piece of work to the audience.


Luckily, he nominated me whopicked me, as I had raised themy hand quickly, and started cutting deftly while jokingly saying, “Don’t consider me to be able to cut whatever you want!” However, in two or three minutes, he finished and showed a marvelous piece of work to the audience.

Luckily, he nominated me who had raised themy hand quickly and started cutting deftly while jokingly saying, “Don’t consider me toassume I'll be able to cut whatever you want!” However, in two or three minutes, he finished and showed a marvelous piece of work to the audience.

Luckily, he nominated me who hachose me because I'd raised themy hand quickly, and started cutting deftly while jokingly saying, “Don’t consider me to be able to cut whatever you want!” However, in two or three minutes, he finished and showed a marvelous piece of work to the audience.

It featured a cat in anger against her owner who was offering her the meal piling high up.


It featured a cat in anger against her owner who was offering her thea meal pilinged high up.

A more figurative expression could be "a tower of food"

It featured a cat in anger againstangry towards her owner, who was offering her the meala plate with food pilinged high up.

It featured a cat in anger against her owner who was offering her the meal piling high upa pile of kibble.

'Kibble' is dry cat food.

As I was really satisfied with it, I deeply appreciated him and handed over an envelope containing a 1000- yen note to him.


AsBecause I was really satisfied with it, I showed him my deeply appreciated himion and handed over an envelope containing a 1000- yen note to him.

As I was really satisfied with it, Iand deeply appreciated him and, I handed over an envelope containing a 1000- yen note to him.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This piece of work has become a family heirloom.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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Luckily, he designated me raising the hand quickly and started cutting deftly while jokingly saying, “Don’t consider me to be able to cut whatever you want!” However, in two or three minutes, he finished and showed a marvelous piece of work to the audience.


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