Aesthetic pressure for unattainable beauty standards is one of the evils of modern society. Aesthetic pressure for unattainable beauty standards is one of the evils of modern society.

Aesthetic pressure forto achieve unattainable standards is one of the evils of modern society. Aesthetic pressure to achieve unattainable standards is one of the evils of modern society.

One says "pressure TO do X", not so much "pressure FOR X".

Both women and men suffers with this problem nowadays, mainly because of social media, where we comparisons wie ourselves to the models are madwe see on there. Both women and men suffer with this problem nowadays, mainly because of social media, where we compare ourselves to the models we see on there.

I feel like the last clause was too passive, so I made it active :)

Both women and men suffers with this problem nowadays, mainly because of social media, where people are comparisonsed with models are made. Both women and men suffers with this problem nowadays, mainly because of social media, where people are compared with models.

Models which went troughThese models have had plastic surgery or drug usageused drugs, either for fat loss or muscle growth. These models have had plastic surgery or used drugs, either for fat loss or muscle growth.

Models which went troughThese models have often undergone plastic surgery or drug usage, either for fat loss or muscle growth. These models have often undergone plastic surgery or drug usage, either for fat loss or muscle growth.

This is not a complete sentence. Also note that "trough" --> "through" was misspelled.

Brazil is one of the biggest fitness communityies in the world right now and it has many influencers on the internet recommendadvertising procedures, or products or even to people, forto regular people, saying that it will help them achieve thise beauty standard. Brazil is one of the biggest fitness communities in the world right now and has many influencers on the internet advertising procedures or products to regular people, saying that it will help them achieve the beauty standard.

Brazil is one of the biggest fitness communityies in the world right now and it has many influencers on the internet recommending procedures, or products for even to people, for thempeople to achieve this beauty standard. Brazil is one of the biggest fitness communities in the world right now and it has many influencers on the internet recommending procedures or products for people to achieve this beauty standard.

It worth remembering that Brazil is a tropical country and has a huge beach culture, where people are always trying to have the best body in the summer when they go to the seaside enjoy their vacation, so. So, one can imagine that there is a lot of body expositionexposed bodies there, whatich makes people felel pressured to achieve thisa desirable body. It worth remembering that Brazil is a tropical country and has a huge beach culture, where people are always trying to have the best body in the summer when they go to the seaside enjoy their vacation. So, one can imagine that there is a lot of exposed bodies there, which makes people feel pressured to achieve a desirable body.

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"Body exposition" is correct but sounds like of unnatural. You might say something instead like "there are a lot of people there showing off their bodies".

On Brazilians TV channels, there has been a surge in news about deaths of people doing unimaginable things to attain to this goal in the pursueit of the dream body, eand up dying because of health complications. On Brazilians TV channels, there has been a surge in news about deaths of people doing unimaginable things in the pursuit of the dream body, and dying because of health complications.

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I believe social media and movies have a great impact on what people perceive as normal nowadays, so, f. For example, even some tennis players are called fat by some people on the internet, only because they aren’t very muscular. I believe social media and movies have a great impact on what people perceive as normal nowadays. For example, even some tennis players are called fat by some people on the internet, only because they aren’t very muscular.

I believe social media and movies have a [great] impact on what people perceive as normal nowadays, so, f. For example, even some tennis players are called fat by some people on the internet, onlysome people on the internet even call some tennis players fat just because they aren’t very muscular. I believe social media and movies have a [great] impact on what people perceive as normal nowadays. For example, some people on the internet even call some tennis players fat just because they aren’t very muscular.

It sounds weird here to say "I believe... great impact" because it sounds (to me at least, on the first read) like you're saying the impact is a good thing. The word "great" often has a positive connotation. (E.g. "I think it's great that you're picking up litter in your community.") In this case, to make the sentence less confusing, you might consider replacing "great impact" with something like "huge/enormous impact".

This illustrates how problematic the relationship between ‘normal’ and perception is.Brazilians have between what they perceive as a ‘normal’ body, and what is actually normal. This illustrates how problematic the relationship Brazilians have between what they perceive as a ‘normal’ body, and what is actually normal.

This illustrates how problematic the relationship between ‘normal’ and perception is. This illustrates how problematic the relationship between ‘normal’ and perception is.

I'm not sure what you're getting at in this sentence...? Do you mean to say that what the masses say online has a strong and often negative impact on what each of us perceives as normal?