Dec. 29, 2020
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Yes I will, the only reason I eat food is because the craving I get. Not because I choose to eat food conscientiously
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As a sub-heading in a larger article, it might be fine, but as a title this is rather odd.
Yes, I will,ould: the only reason I eat food is because the cravings I get.
The scenario in the question is completely hypothetical, so the conditional tense should be used instead of the future tense.
Not because I choose to eat food conscientiously.
This should be merged with the previous sentence: by itself and unaccompanied by any question that it might respond to, it sounds like a sentence fragment.
"Conscientiously" refers to meticulousness (often with a moral connotation), so it doesn't make sense here. "Consciously" is better.
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I think the journal would make more sense if you included the prompt that it was for in it. You could try rephrasing the question ("Would I take a pill that would allow me to never eat?") or even incorporate it into your sentences ("I would take a pill that would allow me to never eat, because…"). It will read better that way.
Jan. 1, 2021
thanks, this very helpful
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Yeah Yeah As a sub-heading in a larger article, it might be fine, but as a title this is rather odd. |
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Yes I will, the only reason I eat food is because the craving I get. Yes, I w The scenario in the question is completely hypothetical, so the conditional tense should be used instead of the future tense. |
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Not because I choose to eat food conscientiously Not because I choose to eat food consci This should be merged with the previous sentence: by itself and unaccompanied by any question that it might respond to, it sounds like a sentence fragment. "Conscientiously" refers to meticulousness (often with a moral connotation), so it doesn't make sense here. "Consciously" is better. |
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