Looking at the sky
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When I look at the sky, especially at night, I like to think about how many similar places there are to our planet, also I wonder if everything is part of one living being. Its beautiful and mysterious at the same time because the universe is infinity and, we still don't know him well sometimes we are arrogant and we believe the best in technology and we fight amongst ourselves, believing ourselves to be superior, instead of uniting to protect our planet and discover the universe. But I believe that there are dark forces preventing us moving forward.
When I look at the sky, especially at night, I like to think about how many similar places there are to our planet, also I wonder if everything is part of one living being.
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"When I look at the sky" is correct, but "When I look into the sky" is a more common phrase for this context (looking into outer space)
ItsIt's beautiful and mysterious at the same time because the universe is infinityinfinite and, we still don't know himit well.
"still don't understand it well" is a more common phrase than "still don't know it well."
sometimesSometimes we are arrogant and we believe in the best in technology and we fight amongst ourselves, believing ourselves to be superior, instead of uniting to protect our planet and discover the universe.
But I believe that there are dark forces preventing us from moving forward.
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Great Job! That was fun to read, and it had minimal errors!
Thank you for yor help
When I look at the sky, especially at night, I like to think about how many similar places there are to our planet., also I also wonder if everything is part of one living being.
These are 2 independent clauses added together using a comma (comma splice). You would need either FANBOYS or a semicolon
ItsIt's beautiful and mysterious at the same time because the universe is infinityinfinite and, we still don't know himit well.
Its= possessive It's = It is Universe is not male (no gender/object = it)
sometimesSometimes we are arrogant. and we We believe the best in technology and we fight amongst ourselves, believing ourselves to bewe are superior, instead of uniting to protect our planet and discover the universe.
This is a very long list so you should break it up into multiple sentences.
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When you have the same verb "believe the best in technology" and "believing ourselves to be," you could change one of the verbs to avoid unintentional repetition. For example, you could say: "trusting technology" "thinking that"
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