June 2, 2026
Just sharing a few moments of my daily routine.
My friend, Eugene, and me have been living in house of his ex-wife for the last half a year. But she will comeback to Bali this week and we need to go out her house.
The task of searching the new place laid down on my shoulders for some reasons.
So, my main hobby last week was scrolling though Facebook Marketplace, group-chats, connecting the owners and driving to the houses for check it.
Unfortunally, I couldn't find the place as we have now, because we can't make an advance payment for the whole year. So in this case, the price immediately goes up or the quality of the interior decreases.
Also I even texted the numbers on street advirtisements in the target districts. Finally, I have chosen the place with some compromises, but the good one.
There were a few cute moments from our fellows in this story. The fellows is the several girls hang out in our place with hooka and boargames. At the first, they worried about me and strongly advised me start to search for a mouth before rent ends. According to gender stereootypes (god forgive me, please), girls often are more anxios than boys, so I put the deal to the last moment.
At the end, they were upset when have known what the place I chose, because the house is a little far away from them and we couldn't meet as ofter as earlier.
Then they started to throw me ad links with diffenent options. On them opinion they were better than mine, but it weren't.
Because the girls searched fast and not in depth with the panic attack, lol.
I looked at their posts and photos and have to explain them why they didn't fit to us.
But their behaivor has heated my heart by it care and cute.
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Just sharing a few moments of my daily routine.
My friend, Eugene, and meyself have been living in the house of his ex-wife for the last half a year.
I'd say '....I have been living with Eugene in his ex-wife's house for the last 6 months, in Bali...'
My friend Eugene and myself have been living in the house of his ex-wife for the last half a year.
I'd say '....I have been living with Eugene in his ex-wife's house for the last 6 months, in Bali...'
Sounds more natural. But I understood the idea.
But she will comeback to Baliis coming back will this week and we need to go out her house.
'....and we need to vacate / move out....
But she is coming back will this week and we need to go out her house.
'....and we need to vacate / move out....
Introduce Bali in the initial sentence.
The task of searching thefor a new place laid down on my shoulders for some reasons.
The task of searching for a new place laid down on my shoulders for some reasons.
So, my main hobby (task) last week was scrolling though Facebook Marketplace, group-chats, connecting with the owners and driving to the houses forto check ithem out.
So, my main hobby (task) last week was scrolling though Facebook Marketplace, group-chats, connecting with the owners and driving to the houses to check them out.
Hobby is a stretch on this... something like 'task' would sound better.
Unfortunaltely, I couldn't find theany place as we hasimilar to where we live now, because we can't make an advance payment for the whole year.
Unfortunately, I couldn't find any place similar to where we live now because we can't make an advance payment for the whole year.
Quel dommage!
So in this case, the price immediately goes up or the quality of the interior decreases.
Alsodditionally, I even texted the numbers on street adviertisements in the target districts.
Additionally, I even texted the numbers on street advertisements in the target districts.
Finally, I have chosen the place with some compromises, but theit is a good one.
Finally, I have chosen the place with some compromises, but it is a good one.
or ....but it is better....
There were a few cute moments from our fellows in this story.
The fellows isare the several girls that hang out in our place with hooka and board games.
The fellows are the several girls that hang out in our place with hooka and board games.
At the first, they worried about me and strongly advised me start to searching for a mouth (mouth?) before rent endsis depleted.
At first, they worried about me and strongly advised me start searching for a mouth (mouth?) before rent is depleted.
According to gender stereoo types (god forgive me, please (hahaha)), girls often are more anxious than boys, so I put aside the deal toill the last moment.
According to gender stereo types (god forgive me, please (hahaha)), girls often are more anxious than boys, so I put aside the deal till the last moment.
AtIn the end, they were upset when have known whatthey learnt of the place I chose, because the house is a little far away from them and we couldn'twont be meeting as oftern as earlier.
In the end, they were upset when they learnt of the place I chose, because the house is a little far away from them and we wont be meeting as often as earlier.
I have made future tense assumptions
Then they started to throw me ad links with diffenent options.
On themTheir opinion they were better than mine, but it weren't.
Their opinion were better than mine.
Because the girls searched fhastily and not in -depth withdue to the panic attack, lol.
Because the girls searched hastily and not in-depth due to the panic attack, lol.
I looked at their posts and photos and haved to explain to them why they houses didn't fit to usus. (or didn't fit our lifestyle).
I looked at their posts and photos and had to explain to them why the houses didn't fit us. (or didn't fit our lifestyle).
But their behaivior has heatwarmed my heart by it care and. It was cute.
But their behavior warmed my heart by care. It was cute.
Warmed my heart / melted my heart.
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Lovely! Throw a party and invite me. Lol.
Enjoy your new house Shonga!
House moveMoving houses.
Moving houses.
Just sharing a few momentsI wanted to share a bit of my daily routine lately.
I wanted to share a bit of my daily routine lately.
My friend, Eugene, and meI have been living in house of his ex-wife's house for the lpast half a year.
My friend, Eugene, and I have been living in his ex-wife's house for the past half a year.
But she willis going to come back to Bali this week, and we need to gomove out of her house.
But she is going to come back to Bali this week, and we need to move out of her house.
The task of searching thefor a new place laid down on my shoulders for somhas been weighing me down for multiple reasons.
The task of searching for a new place has been weighing me down for multiple reasons.
So, my main hobby last week whas been scrolling through Facebook Marketplace, messaging group- chats, connecting with the owners and driving down to their houses forto check ithem out.
So, my main hobby last week has been scrolling through Facebook Marketplace, messaging group chats, connecting with the owners and driving down to their houses to check them out.
Unfortunaltely, I couldn'thave not been able to find thea place as we haveof now, because we can't make an advance payment for the whole year.
Unfortunately, I have not been able to find a place as of now, because we can't make an advance payment for the whole year.
So in this case, due to this, the price immediately goes up, or the quality of the interior quality decreases.
So, due to this, the price immediately goes up, or the interior quality decreases.
Also I even texted the numbers on street adviertisements in the target districts.
I even texted the numbers on street advertisements in the target districts.
Finally, I havewas able to choosen the a place with some compromises, but the still relatively good one.
Finally, I was able to choose a place with some compromises, but the still relatively good.
There were a few cute moments from our fellowsthe people in this story.
There were a few cute moments from the people in this story.
The fellows is the sSeveral girlswomen hang out in our place with hookah and board games.
Several women hang out in our place with hookah and board games.
I am going to assume you are describing adults, so women would be more appropriate than girls.
At the first, they were worried about me and strongly advised me to start to searchlooking for a (mouth before rent ends?).
At first, they were worried about me and strongly advised me to start looking for a (mouth before rent ends?).
I don't really understand what you mean by "a mouth before rent ends". I think two correction possibilities come to my mind:
1) "looking for a new place before the lease is up."
2) "looking for a job before rent is due."
Okay, so upon reading further, I think the first option might be the most apt.
According to gender stereootypes (gGod forgive me, please), girls oftwomen are often more anxious than boys, so I put off the deal toill the last moment.
According to gender stereotypes (God forgive me, please), women are often more anxious than boys, so I put off the deal till the last moment.
At the end, tThey were upset when have known whatthey came to know the place I chose, because the house is a little far away from them and we couldn't meet as oftern as earlier.
They were upset when they came to know the place I chose, because the house is a little far away from them and we couldn't meet as often as earlier.
Then theyUpon knowing, they then started to throwsend me ad links with diffenrent options.
Upon knowing, they then started to send me ads with different options.
OIn themir opinion, they were better than mine, but ithey weren't.
In their opinion, they were better than mine, but they weren't.
The sentence could also be entirely rephrased as "They thought the options they sent me were better, but they really weren't."
BThis was because the girlswomen searched fastquickly and not in depth with the panic attack, a lot of depth due to them being in a state of panic (lol).
This was because the women searched quickly and not in a lot of depth due to them being in a state of panic (lol).
I looked at their posts and photos and haved to explain to them why they didn'weren't the best fit tofor us.
I looked at their posts and photos and had to explain to them why they weren't the best fit for us.
But their behaivoviour has heatwarmed my heart by it care and cutwith the amount of care put into it, and also with how cute they were.
But their behaviour has warmed my heart with the amount of care put into it, and also with how cute they were.
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I think you really did do an amazing job at writing this short story, and I just wanted to add that you could do a better job at writing if you added more context as well as using connectors to improve the flow of the story.
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Just sharing a few moments of my daily routine.
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My friend, Eugene, and me have been living in house of his ex-wife for the last half a year.
My friend, Eugene, and
My friend Sounds more natural. But I understood the idea. |
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But she will comeback to Bali this week and we need to go out her house.
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But she Introduce Bali in the initial sentence. |
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The task of searching the new place laid down on my shoulders for some reasons.
The task of searching
The task of searching |
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So, my main hobby last week was scrolling though Facebook Marketplace, group-chats, connecting the owners and driving to the houses for check it.
So, my main hobby last week
So, my main hobby (task) last week was scrolling though Facebook Marketplace, group-chats, connecting with the owners and driving to the houses Hobby is a stretch on this... something like 'task' would sound better. |
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Unfortunally, I couldn't find the place as we have now, because we can't make an advance payment for the whole year.
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So in this case, the price immediately goes up or the quality of the interior decreases.
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Also I even texted the numbers on street advirtisements in the target districts.
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Finally, I have chosen the place with some compromises, but the good one.
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There were a few cute moments from our fellows in this story.
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The fellows is the several girls hang out in our place with hooka and boargames.
I am going to assume you are describing adults, so women would be more appropriate than girls.
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At the first, they worried about me and strongly advised me start to search for a mouth before rent ends.
At I don't really understand what you mean by "a mouth before rent ends". I think two correction possibilities come to my mind: 1) "looking for a new place before the lease is up." 2) "looking for a job before rent is due." Okay, so upon reading further, I think the first option might be the most apt.
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According to gender stereootypes (god forgive me, please), girls often are more anxios than boys, so I put the deal to the last moment.
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At the end, they were upset when have known what the place I chose, because the house is a little far away from them and we couldn't meet as ofter as earlier.
I have made future tense assumptions |
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Then they started to throw me ad links with diffenent options.
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On them opinion they were better than mine, but it weren't.
The sentence could also be entirely rephrased as "They thought the options they sent me were better, but they really weren't."
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Because the girls searched fast and not in depth with the panic attack, lol.
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I looked at their posts and photos and have to explain them why they didn't fit to us.
I looked at their posts and photos and ha
I looked at their posts and photos and ha |
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But their behaivor has heated my heart by it care and cute.
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But their beha Warmed my heart / melted my heart. |
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