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On Reevaluating Worldviews
When I was younger, I used to be an ardent believer in capitalism. I believed that it was the system that brought the most prosperity to humanity. I was convinced that the invisible hand of the market fairly distributed wealth among all sectors of society. I thought that poverty was born out of generations of poor decisions and laziness. But then, cracks began to appear in my former mindset after I discovered that corporations account for most of the pollution on the planet. I was shocked that the prevailing supply chains and the life cycle of commodities led to so much waste and inhumane working conditions. This started a rabbit hole of research into the systemic inequalities inherent in the current system. I found out that the average employee's wages and labor aren't commensurate with the amount of profit they bring to their companies. My laissez-faire assumption that corporate profits will trickle down to the masses was shattered by the realities on the ground. It turned out that corporations are primarily profit-driven and will do whatever it takes to maximize said profit, even if it means exploiting their employees and consumers. For capitalism to work, it requires an underclass who have no choice but to be paid peanuts. Thus, it is in their best interests to pursue policies that ensure a steady supply of cheap and compliant workforce.
It was an eye-opening experience to say the least. I felt uncomfortable and disturbed throughout the whole process since it led to painful realizations. I had to confront the fact that I was sorely mistaken and naive in my earlier convictions. However, it was necessary. It made me realize that we have to confront and interrogate the contradictions that exist in our society. We have to be critical of not only the status quo, but also ourselves in order to grow. I do not regret this experience one bit and would gladly relive it.
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When I was younger, I used to be an ardent believer in capitalism. When I was younger, I used to be an ardent believer in capitalism.
bravo on using 'ardent' I had to look up what this meant LOL
I believed that it was the system that brought the most prosperity to humanity.
I believed it was the system that brought the most prosperity to humanity.
using 'that' twce
This started a rabbit hole of research into the systemic inequalities inherent in the current system. This started a rabbit hole of research into the systemic inequalities inherent in the current system.
I felt uncomfortable and disturbed throughout the whole process since it led toas I made these painful realizations.
I felt uncomfortable and disturbed throughout the whole process as I made these painful realizations.
feeling uncomfortable and disturbed didn't lead to the realizations, you felt this way at the same time you made these realizations so I changed the sentence a bit
It made me realize that we have to confront and interrogate the contradictions that exist in our society. It made me realize that we have to confront and interrogate the contradictions that exist in our society.
interrogate is usually for a person. It technically works here but feels a bit formal (which matches the tone of this text)
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You believing in capitalism before this research means the propaganda worked as intended, at least temporarily
Really great text, you are much more articulate in english than I am and it's my native language LOL
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Thus, it is in their best interests to pursue policies that ensure a steady supply of cheap and compliant workforce. |
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It was an eye-opening experience to say the least. |
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I felt uncomfortable and disturbed throughout the whole process since it led to painful realizations.
I felt uncomfortable and disturbed throughout the whole process feeling uncomfortable and disturbed didn't lead to the realizations, you felt this way at the same time you made these realizations so I changed the sentence a bit |
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I had to confront the fact that I was sorely mistaken and naive in my earlier convictions. |
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However, it was necessary. |
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It made me realize that we have to confront and interrogate the contradictions that exist in our society. It made me realize that we have to confront and interrogate the contradictions that exist in our society. It made me realize that we have to confront and interrogate the contradictions that exist in our society. interrogate is usually for a person. It technically works here but feels a bit formal (which matches the tone of this text) |
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We have to be critical of not only the status quo, but also ourselves in order to grow. |
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I do not regret this experience one bit and would gladly relive it. |
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On Reevaluating Worldviews |
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When I was younger, I used to be an ardent believer in capitalism. When I was younger, I used to be an ardent believer in capitalism. When I was younger, I used to be an ardent believer in capitalism. bravo on using 'ardent' I had to look up what this meant LOL |
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I believed that it was the system that brought the most prosperity to humanity.
I believed using 'that' twce |
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I was convinced that the invisible hand of the market fairly distributed wealth among all sectors of society. |
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I thought that poverty was born out of generations of poor decisions and laziness. |
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But then, cracks began to appear in my former mindset after I discovered that corporations account for most of the pollution on the planet. |
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I was shocked that the prevailing supply chains and the life cycle of commodities led to so much waste and inhumane working conditions. |
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This started a rabbit hole of research into the systemic inequalities inherent in the current system. This started a rabbit hole of research into the systemic inequalities inherent in the current system. This started a rabbit hole of research into the systemic inequalities inherent in the current system. |
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I found out that the average employee's wages and labor aren't commensurate with the amount of profit they bring to their companies. |
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My laissez-faire assumption that corporate profits will trickle down to the masses was shattered by the realities on the ground. |
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It turned out that corporations are primarily profit-driven and will do whatever it takes to maximize said profit, even if it means exploiting their employees and consumers. |
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For capitalism to work, it requires an underclass who have no choice but to be paid peanuts. |
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