May 9, 2021
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Today is Mother's Day, but my mother is in hospital now. A couple of days ago, at dinner she ate a piece of cake, then she had diarrhea that night. The next morning I bought some medicine for her. She didn't continue to have diarrhea after taking the medicine. At night on that day, she suddenly felt unwell. Her hands and mouth shook hard and she couldn't explain herself. I called an ambulance to take her to the hospital. She was diagnosed with an acute intestinal infection and fever. It's been four days since she was in hospital. And every day she has to take some medicine and infusion. Fortunately, there is no big problem with her health. Maybe, after a few days of treatment, she can be discharged from the hospital.
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Today is Mother's Day, but my mother is in hospital now.
A couple of days ago, at dinner she ate a piece of cake, then she had diarrhea that night.
The next morning I bought some medicine for her.
She didn't continue tostopped haveing diarrhea after taking the medicine.
She stopped having diarrhea after taking the medicine.
This is more idiomatic and doesn't sound as convoluted.
AThat night on that day, she suddenly felt unwell.
That night, she suddenly felt unwell.
I called an ambulance to take her to the hospital.
She was diagnosed with an acute intestinal infection and fever.
It's been four days since she was inadmitted into hospital.
It's been four days since she was admitted into hospital.
According to your first sentence, your mother is still in the hospital, so "was admitted" is more appropriate. Otherwise, it sounds like it's been four days since she left the hospital.
And eEvery day, she has to take some medicine and infusions.
Every day, she has to take some medicine and infusions.
Avoid starting sentences with "and."
"Infusion" makes more sense to me because you used "some" earlier.
Maybe, after a few days of treatment, she can be discharged from the hospital.
Maybe, after a few days of treatment, she can be discharged from hospital.
The original was grammatical too, but I removed "the" from "the hospital" to make it consistent with the wording that you used before.
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I hope your mother recovers soon!
I should also mention that using "hospital" without a definite article to refer to a hospital in general is acceptable in British English, though it may sound strange to American ears.
May 9, 2021
Thank you very much for your corrections. When American English is conflicted with British English, I choose the latter because British English is the mother of American English. Am I right?
May 9, 2021
Not necessarily. Like with any other language, it depends more on what speakers you typically interact with.
I think there’s also typically more mixing between the American and British dialects than some language learners give credit for: if someone reads widely, she is bound to pick up some grammatical features or vocabulary that she wouldn’t encounter otherwise. However, “in (the) hospital” is, at least in my personal experience, not one of those less clear cut dialectal differences.
I will also mention that my comment was also for the benefit of any other readers or correctors who may have disagreed with my corrections in this respect.
May 9, 2021
Thank you for your comments. A passage of perfect points and words.
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Today is Mother's Day, but my mother is in hospital now. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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A couple of days ago, at dinner she ate a piece of cake, then she had diarrhea that night. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The next morning I bought some medicine for her. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She didn't continue to have diarrhea after taking the medicine.
She This is more idiomatic and doesn't sound as convoluted. |
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At night on that day, she suddenly felt unwell.
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Her hands and mouth shook hard and she couldn't explain herself. |
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I called an ambulance to take her to the hospital. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She was diagnosed with an acute intestinal infection and fever. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It's been four days since she was in hospital.
It's been four days since she was According to your first sentence, your mother is still in the hospital, so "was admitted" is more appropriate. Otherwise, it sounds like it's been four days since she left the hospital. |
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And every day she has to take some medicine and infusion.
Avoid starting sentences with "and." "Infusion" makes more sense to me because you used "some" earlier. |
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Fortunately, there is no big problem with her health. |
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Maybe, after a few days of treatment, she can be discharged from the hospital.
Maybe, after a few days of treatment, she can be discharged from The original was grammatical too, but I removed "the" from "the hospital" to make it consistent with the wording that you used before. |
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