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I immensely enjoy doing sports immensely. I enjoy doing sports immensely.

I'm not sure why, but "immensely" is usually added after the thing you enjoy doing

I immensely enjoy playing/doing sports. I immensely enjoy playing/doing sports.

playing is a bit more common

Before I switched to wall climbing, I had been running and swimming for five years, before I switched to wall climbing. Before I switched to wall climbing, I had been running and swimming for five years.

Before I switched to wall climbing, I had been running and swimming for five years. Tense is clearer with the "before" clause placed first.

While I really liked that in swimming and running that I needed a strong mindset to keep pushing through, after a timwhile I grew bored. While I really liked that in swimming and running I needed a strong mindset to keep pushing through, after a while I grew bored.

putting "that" and "in" together makes the sentence much easier to understand; "after a while" is a much more common/natural expression

While I really liked in swimming and running that I needed a strong mindset to keep pushing through in swimming and running, after a time I grew bored. While I really liked that I needed a strong mindset to keep pushing through in swimming and running, after a time I grew bored.

You could begin the sentence with "While I really liked THAT in swimming and running..." However it reads more clearly when you switch these two around

Whileat I really liked in swimming and running was that I needed a strong mindset to keep pushing through, but after a time I grew bored. What I really liked in swimming and running was that I needed a strong mindset to keep pushing through, but after a time I grew bored.

I remember, I was fascinated when I first went wall climbing, I was fascinated. I remember I was fascinated when I first went wall climbing.

putting "when I...climbing" in the middle of the sentence sounds a bit stilted or awkward

I remember, when I first went wall climbing, I was fascinated. I remember when I first went wall climbing, I was fascinated.

I remember I was fascinated, when I first went wall climbing, I was fascinated. I remember I was fascinated, when I first went wall climbing.

I remember I was fascinated, when I first went wall climbing. No need to have too many clauses nested between each other.

I was amazed by how creatively you could move around, and how you have to think, to plan out your moves before starting. I was amazed by how creatively you could move around, and how you have to think to plan out your moves before starting.

Unlike the sports mentioned before, these team sports require you to pay attention to your surroundings and react accordingly. Unlike the sports mentioned before, these team sports require you to pay attention to your surroundings and react accordingly.

Unlike the sports mentioned before, these team sports require you to pay attention to your surroundings and react accordingly. Unlike the sports mentioned before, these team sports require you to pay attention to your surroundings and react accordingly.

I also read a lot and like watching tv series, especially animes. I also read a lot and like watching tv series, especially animes.

It's more common to specify "tv series"

I also read a lot and like watching TV series, especially animes. I also read a lot and like watching TV series, especially animes.

"series" usually not used alone, even if you aren't watching them on TV

It has been really interesting so far, I love how the characters are so complex, and how it shows, that there is no such thing as pure evil. It has been really interesting so far, I love how the characters are so complex, and how it shows that there is no such thing as pure evil.

The second comma should go before "and" as that is a separate thought

It has been really interesting so far, I love how the characters are so complex and how it shows, that there is no such thing as pure evil. It has been really interesting so far, I love how the characters are so complex and how it shows that there is no such thing as pure evil.

You can also say "I love how complex rhe characters are and how..."

It has been really interesting so far, I love how complex the characters are so complex and how it shows, that there is no such thing as pure evil. It has been really interesting so far, I love how complex the characters are and how it shows that there is no such thing as pure evil.

It has been really interesting so far, I love how complex the characters are and how it shows that there is no such thing as pure evil.