Introspection wve Writing Introspective Writing

Introspectionve writing Introspective writing

1- I saw oily water running under my feet, a. All that greasy and colorful liquid somehow maketurned the water into a completely different form of state. 1- I saw oily water running under my feet. All that greasy and colorful liquid somehow turned the water into a completely different form.

Separating into two sentences felt more natural in this case. Instead of "form", you can also use "form of matter" or "state of matter" since you are writing metaphorically.

1- I saw oil and water running under my feet, all that greasy and colorful liquid somehow make the water a completely different form of stateconsistency. 1- I saw oil and water running under my feet, all that greasy and colorful liquid somehow make the water a completely different consistency.

1- I saw oily water running under my feet, all that greasy and colorful liquid somehow makde the water into a completely different form of state. 1- I saw oily water running under my feet, all that greasy and colorful liquid somehow made the water into a completely different form.

The sShapes that barely touches each other. Shapes that barely touch each other.

The shapes that barely touches each other. The shapes that barely touch each other.

The shapes that barely touches each other. The shapes that barely touch each other.

Since it's shapes plural, it should be "touch" instead of "touches"

I wonder at what cost were they separated in a past life.? I wonder at what cost were they separated in a past life?

2- The wind carries all the bad thoughts away, i. It´s getting cold. 2- The wind carries all the bad thoughts away. It´s getting cold.

Separating into two sentences felt more natural in this case.

There, a feathered bird fights to take the wind down. There, a feathered bird fights to take the wind down.

There, a feather bird fights to take the wind down. There, a bird fights to take the wind down.

There, a feathered bird fights to take the wind down. There, a feathered bird fights to take the wind down.

Somehow it trusts hits bravery, to not fall, to not lose. Somehow it trusts its bravery, to not fall, to not lose.

Your next sentence uses "its", so I'm changing for consistency.

Somehow it trusts his brave,mself to not fall, to not lose. Somehow it trusts himself to not fall, to not lose.

Somehow it trusts hisits own bravery, to not fall, to not lose. Somehow it trusts its own bravery, to not fall, to not lose.

My eyes met hits. My eyes met his.

My eyes met its eyes. My eyes met its eyes.

You can use "his", "her" on their own and leave the eyes implied, but it sounds really unnatural to do the same for "its" I think.

aAnd I immediately understood it . And I immediately understood it.

and I immediately understood it . and I immediately understood.

and II immediately understood it . I immediately understood it .

It's considered poor style to start a sentence with "and" in English. If you hadn't ended the last sentence with a full stop and just used this as an extra clause, you could have used "and" here.