Indie is MakingMakes a Horse Out of Beeswax Indie Makes a Horse Out of Beeswax

In the Bluey episode "Cotton," the classmates are makingmake animals out of beeswax. In the Bluey episode "Cotton," the classmates make animals out of beeswax.

Present tense in essays, present continuous reads strange.

Indie wanttries / intends to make a horse, but her classmates think it looks like a cow. Indie tries / intends to make a horse, but her classmates think it looks like a cow.

Your sentence is correct but "tries" or "intends" is clearer.

Indie wants to make a horse, but her classmates think it looks like a cow. Indie wants to make a horse, but her classmates think it looks like a cow.

She starts to feel like she’s not good at anything. She starts to feel like she’s not good at anything.

Her matefriend, Winton, gives her a hand, and together they try to make the horse look just right. Her friend, Winton, gives her a hand, and together they try to make the horse look just right.

"Mate" is used more conversationally. 100% correct though.

Her matefriend, Winton, gives her a hand, and together they tryied to make the horse look just right. Her friend, Winton, gives her a hand, and together they tried to make the horse look just right.

Mate is more common in British, Australian English, but Friend is commonly used in America

Her matefriend, Winton, gives her a hand, and together they try to make the horse look just right. Her friend, Winton, gives her a hand, and together they try to make the horse look just right.

They found the neck is too short compared to the true onan actual horse. They found the neck is too short compared to an actual horse.

"The true one" is very good, but it's rather poetic. "A true horse" could work too but "an actual horse" is best.

They found the neck is too short compared to the true ona real horse. They found the neck is too short compared to a real horse.

Another way to put it.

So they stretch the neck a bit, and now the classmates say it’s's giraffe looking / it resembles a giraffe / it looks like a giraffe! So they stretch the neck a bit, and now the classmates say it's giraffe looking / it resembles a giraffe / it looks like a giraffe!

So they stretch the neck a bit, and now the classmates say it’s looks like a giraffe! So they stretch the neck a bit, and now the classmates say it looks like a giraffe!

During the process, Indie feels likewanted to givinge up. During the process, Indie wanted to give up.

This sounds better to me.

She says, “I can’t make a horse… but it’s a good cow.” That moment made me think: if we always change our ideas just to fit what others think, are we really being true to ourselves? She says, “I can’t make a horse… but it’s a good cow.” That moment made me think: if we always change our ideas just to fit what others think, are we really being true to ourselves?

Perfect!

She saysid, “I can’t make a horse… but it’s a good cow.” That moment made me think: if we always change our ideas just to fit what others think, are we really being true to ourselves? She said, “I can’t make a horse… but it’s a good cow.” That moment made me think: if we always change our ideas just to fit what others think, are we really being true to ourselves?

Hmmm 🤔