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IELTS Writing Part 2

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people think that governments should prefer to invest more on roads rather than railways. In my own opinion, I don't think it is a good idea.
Firstly, I think roads are more flexible than railways. They can easily go through not only cities but also towns, while railways can't. Furthermore, roads are more suitable for people's daily life. For example, people can drive a car in the road, or they can take a bus, even they can ride a bike. On the contrary, people can't do such things on railways. Also, constructing railways need more room than roads, which is rare in the big cities. Besides, I think it is much harder for building railways than roads.
Secondly, I think the cost of roads construction is cheaper than railways. For instance, when we have built a railway, we need trains, which will cost more. Besides, if few people take the train rather than the bus, the income won't match the require of the railway maintance. Furthermore, while the public transport is not full used, there will be energy waste, which is bad for the environment. What's worse, if there is an accident on railways, it will be fairly enconvinient for people, especially during the workdays.
In conculsion, I disagree that the money from governments should put on railways than on roads. I think roads will be used more than railways because it thr roads are more convinient. I also think that the roads cunstruction will cost less than the railways do.

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IELTS Writing Part 2

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

My article:

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Secondly, I think the cost of roads construction is cheaper than that of railways.

I get that all the above points are under the umbrella of "flexibility," but using all those other transitions in between makes the reader forget about the underlying thread a little bit. When I saw second, I thought to myself, "but you've already made three or four different arguments."

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Furthermore, whileas long as the public transport is not full usedation system is not operating at maximum capacity, there will be energy waste, which is bad for the environment.

To be fair, I'm sure the amount of people required for a train to be more environmentally friendly than a car is very small. Plenty of people drive to work every day in cars that can fit 5+ people, by themselves.

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To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


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Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


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Some people think that governments should prefer to invest more on roads rather than railways.


Some people think that governments should prefer to invest more oioritize investment in roads rather than railways. Some people think that governments should prioritize investment in roads rather than railways.

In my own opinion, I don't think it is a good idea.


In my own opinion, I don't think it isthis is not a good idea. In my opinion, this is not a good idea.

"I don't think" 太多余了

Firstly, I think roads are more flexible than railways.


Firstly, I think roads are more flexible than railways. First, I think roads are more flexible than railways.

Usually if you can remove the '-ly' without changing the meaning, it's better to omit it. Only other word (other than ordinals) I can think of right now where this applies is thus/thusly.

They can easily go through not only cities but also towns, while railways can't.


They can easily go through not onlyNot only can they travel through cities, but also small towns, while railways can't. Not only can they travel through cities, but also small towns, while railways can't.

Furthermore, roads are more suitable for people's daily life.


Furthermore, roads are more suitable for people's daileveryday life. Furthermore, roads are more suitable for everyday life.

For example, people can drive a car in the road, or they can take a bus, even they can ride a bike.


For example, on a road, people can drive a car in the road, or they can take a bus, even they ca, take a bus, or even ride a bike. For example, on a road, people can drive a car, take a bus, or even ride a bike.

On the contrary, people can't do such things on railways.


OIn the contrary, people can't do such things on railwaysst, rail only supports one method of transportation. In contrast, rail only supports one method of transportation.

Also, constructing railways need more room than roads, which is rare in the big cities.


Also, constructingFurthermore, railways need more room than roads, which is ralready a scarce in thecommodity in big cities. Furthermore, railways need more room than roads, which is already a scarce commodity in big cities.

Besides, I think it is much harder for building railways than roads.


Besides versatility and cost, I think it is also much harder forto building railways than roads. Besides versatility and cost, I think it is also much harder to build railways than roads.

Secondly, I think the cost of roads construction is cheaper than railways.


Secondly, I think the cost of roads construction is cheaper than that of railways. Second, I think the cost of road construction is cheaper than that of rail.

I get that all the above points are under the umbrella of "flexibility," but using all those other transitions in between makes the reader forget about the underlying thread a little bit. When I saw second, I thought to myself, "but you've already made three or four different arguments."

For instance, when we have built a railway, we need trains, which will cost more.


For instance, when we have built a railway, we need trains, which will cost morea railway is built, the trains are still needed, which will incur additional costs. For instance, when a railway is built, the trains are still needed, which will incur additional costs.

Try to avoid using personal pronouns like "we," "you," and "I" in formal writing.

Besides, if few people take the train rather than the bus, the income won't match the require of the railway maintance.


Besides, if fewer people take the train rather than the bus, the income won't match the require of the railwaygenerated won't suffice to cover the rail system's maintenance costs. Besides, if fewer people take the train than the bus, the income generated won't suffice to cover the rail system's maintenance costs.

Furthermore, while the public transport is not full used, there will be energy waste, which is bad for the environment.


Furthermore, whileas long as the public transport is not full usedation system is not operating at maximum capacity, there will be energy waste, which is bad for the environment. Furthermore, as long as the public transportation system is not operating at maximum capacity, there will be energy waste, which is bad for the environment.

To be fair, I'm sure the amount of people required for a train to be more environmentally friendly than a car is very small. Plenty of people drive to work every day in cars that can fit 5+ people, by themselves.

What's worse, if there is an accident on railways, it will be fairly enconvinient for people, especially during the workdays.


What's worse, if there is an accident on railwaysthe railroad, it will be fairincredibly einconvienient for peopleassengers, especially during the workdays week. What's worse, if there is an accident on the railroad, it will be incredibly inconvenient for passengers, especially during the work week.

"People" is a fairly generic word, try to omit it or use more specific words

In conculsion, I disagree that the money from governments should put on railways than on roads.


In conculusion, I disagree that the money from the governments should pube spent on railways rather than on roads. In conclusion, I disagree that the money from the government should be spent on railways rather than on roads.

I think roads will be used more than railways because it thr roads are more convinient.


I think roads will be used more than railways, because it thr roads are more convienient. I think roads will be used more than railways, because roads are more convenient.

I also think that the roads cunstruction will cost less than the railways do.


I also think that the roads cuonstruction will cost less than the railways do construction will. I also think that road construction will cost less than the railway construction will.

IELTS Writing Part 2


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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.


Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads infrastructure rather than car infrastructure. Governments should spend money on rail infrastructure rather than car infrastructure.

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