There was no money, sims were always dying, they didn't want to make friends or lovers, but playing was awesome. There was no money, sims were always dying, they didn't want to make friends or lovers, but playing was awesome.

There was no money and sims were always dying; they didn't want to make friends or lovers, but playing was awesome.

I could make jam or Frankenstein, buy a coffin with a skeleton-cleaner or a cake with a stripper, get an autograph from a superstar, go to a resort, etc. I could make jam or Frankenstein, buy a coffin with a skeleton-cleaner or a cake with a stripper, get an autograph from a superstar, go to a resort, etc.

I could make jam or make a Frankenstein, buy a coffin with a skeleton-cleaner or buy a cake with a stripper, get an autograph from a superstar, or go to a resort, etc.

I have always loved to fantasize, make up stories and characters. I have always loved to fantasize, make up stories and characters.

I have always loved to fantasize, making up stories and characters.

I have always loved to fantasize, and make up stories and characters. I have always loved to fantasize, and make up stories and characters.

My parents bought me the anthology (18 in 1) at once. My parents bought me the anthology (18 in 1) at once.

I admireenjoy creating towns. I enjoy creating towns.

admire doesn't make sense here

I admireenjoy creating towns. I enjoy creating towns.

"admire" needs a person or group as the target, rather than an activity. If you want to say you look up to city planners (people who plan out towns in reality) you could say "I admire city planners" or "I admire people who create towns"

I've been working on thea town named Profound River for approximately one year. I've been working on a town named Profound River for approximately one year.

I've been working on thea town named Profound River for approximately one year. I've been working on a town named Profound River for approximately one year.

A is more natural than "the" here as it's your first time mentioning this town.

There is a custom system of managing, and a custom political system based on clans. There is a custom system of managing and a custom political system based on clans.

There isI made a custom system of managingement, a custom political system based on clans. I made a custom system of management, a custom political system based on clans.

It's not a natural phenomenon or something the game provided you with, so it's more natural to talk about your role in creating this system.

I'm not even going to tell about this because it's the topic for another giant esse. I'm not even going to tell about this because it's the topic for another giant esse.

Essay, not esse.

I'm not even going to tell aboutmention this because it's the topic for another giant esseay. I'm not even going to mention this because it's the topic for another giant essay.

I'm not even going to (tell you / talk) about this because it's thea topic for another giant esseay. I'm not even going to (tell you / talk) about this because it's a topic for another giant essay.

"tell" requires a target, like "tell _you_ about this". "talk" does not.

The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal top. The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal top.

The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal favorites.

The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal topfavorites. The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal favorites.

The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal topfavourites. The Sims 3 takes third place in my personal favourites.

"top" is an adjective, it doesn't work as a noun

I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around a town, events, ability to change appearance of furniture and clothes, the journal of custom memories (you can even choose how to perceive them - as bad or good ones), and the journal for skills, ability to garden, addingnd add spices into dishes (ito changes their characteristics). I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around a town, events, ability to change appearance of furniture and clothes, the journal of custom memories (you can even choose how to perceive them - as bad or good ones), and the journal for skills, ability to garden, and add spices into dishes (to change their characteristics).

very long sentence, consider separating into different thoughts.

I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, the ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around a town, events, the ability to change the appearance of furniture and clothes, the journal of custom memories (you can even choose how to perceive them - as bad or good ones), the journal for skills, the ability to garden, addingnd add spices into dishes (it changes their characteristics). I love it for the "Adventures" add-on, the ability to register your Sim as self-employed, quests around town, events, the ability to change the appearance of furniture and clothes, the journal of custom memories (you can even choose how to perceive them - as bad or good ones), the journal for skills, the ability to garden, and add spices into dishes (it changes their characteristics).

It's as fake as plastic. It's as fake as plastic.

I'm not sure your simile lands - how is plastic fake? And how are any of the other Sims games less fake? You'd need to elaborate what you're describing and probably make a different comparison to help communicate your point.

It's just a sandbox which you have to supply with "sand" - add-ons. It's just a sandbox which you have to supply with "sand" - add-ons.

It's just a sandbox in which you have to supply "sand" add-ons.

As for me, the fourth installment is no more than just a commercial product whose quality is not a concern for developers, which is a shame. As for me, the fourth installment is no more than just a commercial product whose quality is not a concern for developers, which is a shame.

To me, the fourth installment is no more than just a commercial product whose quality was not a concern for its developers, which is a shame.

Of course, it has some advantaggood qualities. Of course, it has some good qualities.

The main one is the graphics. The main one is the graphics.

Combine this with the next sentence.

Building houses and creating characters are so detailed. Building houses and creating characters are so detailed.

The main one is the graphics; building the houses and creating the characters is so detailed.

BuildingThe houses and creating characters are so detailed. The houses and characters are so detailed.

Building houses and creating characters areis so detailed. Building houses and creating characters is so detailed.

"creating characters" is one activity, so is treated as singular grammatically. It's a little confusing because "characters" is plural, but the "is" is applied to the whole activity, not just the target of the activity.

But how boring it is to play... But boring to play...