Momofuku Ando、, 安藤百福 is the person who invented instant ramen. Momofuku Ando, 安藤百福 is the person who invented instant ramen.

I would be consistent with your name ordering - in the title you use the Japanese order, "Ando Momofuku", but here you're using the English order. Generally the trend with Japanese names is to change it to the English order, though there are a few Japanese people (like Natsume Soseki) whose names use the Japanese order.

Momofuku Ando、安藤百福 is the person who invented instant ramen. Use commas before and after appositives. Add a comma after the Kanji name. Momofuku Ando、安藤百福 is the person who invented instant ramen. Use commas before and after appositives. Add a comma after the Kanji name.

Momofuku Ando、安藤百福, is the person who invented instant ramen. Momofuku Ando、安藤百福, is the person who invented instant ramen.

He was the founder of Nissin Foods and devoted himself to developing food products, even sacrificing sleep (to do so). He was the founder of Nissin Foods and devoted himself to developing food products, even sacrificing sleep (to do so).

Works fine as it is, but "to do so" sounds a little better to me.

He was the founder of Nissin Foods and devoted himself to developing food products, even sacrificing sleep. I would delete "even sacrificing sleep" and write that idea as a separate sentence with a bit of development to show how hard he worked. He was the founder of Nissin Foods and devoted himself to developing food products, even sacrificing sleep. I would delete "even sacrificing sleep" and write that idea as a separate sentence with a bit of development to show how hard he worked.

From a young age, he was involved in many different businesses and experienced both success and failure. Yes. And you can also say "successes and failures" or even "numerous successes and failures". From a young age, he was involved in many different businesses and experienced both success and failure. Yes. And you can also say "successes and failures" or even "numerous successes and failures".

At one point, he fell into debt and was left with only his house as his only remaining asset. At one point, he fell into debt and was left with his house as his only remaining asset.

At one point, he fell into debt and was left with only his house as his remaining asset. Yes. Alternatively, "sank into debt" here. At one point, he fell into debt and was left with only his house as his remaining asset. Yes. Alternatively, "sank into debt" here.

After the war, he saw long lines at ramen stalls and the happy faces of people eating ramen. After the war, he saw long lines at ramen stalls and the happy faces of people eating ramen.

This line reminds me: I think I had to read a passage about him in my Japanese textbook when I was studying Japanese at university.

After the war, he saw long lines at ramen stalls and the happy faces of people eating ramen. Yes. Or "he saw long lines at ramen stalls and was deeply moved by the happy faces of people eating ramen." After the war, he saw long lines at ramen stalls and the happy faces of people eating ramen. Yes. Or "he saw long lines at ramen stalls and was deeply moved by the happy faces of people eating ramen."

This inspired him to create “ramen that can be eaten immediately at home with just hot water.” My professors used to fuss at me for using "This" as a subject rather than "This ... [what?] + verb/predicate." This experience ... (for example). This inspired him to create “ramen that can be eaten immediately at home with just hot water.” My professors used to fuss at me for using "This" as a subject rather than "This ... [what?] + verb/predicate." This experience ... (for example).

This inspired him to create “ramen that can be eaten immediately at home with just hot water.” This inspired him to create “ramen that can be eaten immediately at home with just hot water.”

I feel like the stuff in your quotes is a Japanese phrase in quotes that you directly translated. It feels like a direct translation from a Japanese translator rather than a natural English sentence that a native speaker would think of.

He immersed himself in researching instant ramen, but struggled for a long time to create something truly delicious. He immersed himself in researching instant ramen but struggled for a long time to create something truly delicious.

This is again the compound sentence construction, where two phrases or clauses are joined by a conjunction ("but"). In this case, "He immersed himself in researching instant ramen" is an independent clause, meaning that it can stand on its own as a complete sentence. However, "struggled for a long time to create something truly delicious" is not a complete sentence on its own, so it is not an independent clause. Therefore, you do not need a comma before "but."

He immersed himself in researching instant ramen, but struggled for a long time to create something truly delicious. (for a long time = for how long? or maybe struggled intensely / struggled considerably ... What you say is absolutely fine. You could be more descriptive, however, with alternative wording.) He immersed himself in researching instant ramen, but struggled for a long time to create something truly delicious. (for a long time = for how long? or maybe struggled intensely / struggled considerably ... What you say is absolutely fine. You could be more descriptive, however, with alternative wording.)

He immersed himself in researching instant ramen, but struggled for a long time to create something truly delicious. He immersed himself in researching instant ramen, but struggled for a long time to create something truly delicious.

I'm not sure "immersed" is the right word here. Maybe he drowned himself or buried himself would be better....Drowned himself in his research of instant ramen instead of researching instant ramen. I think research of instant ramen sounds better than researching instant ramen but I think that is just personal preference.

One day, while watching his wife frying tempura, he had a realization: “This is it.” Consider using the word "epiphany" for "realisation". I would use an exclamation mark on "This is it!" One day, while watching his wife frying tempura, he had a realization: “This is it.” Consider using the word "epiphany" for "realisation". I would use an exclamation mark on "This is it!"

One day, while watching his wife frying tempura, he had a realization: “This is it.” One day, while watching his wife fry tempura, he had a realization: “This is it.”

By frying the noodles in oil, the moisture could be removed. This is another dangling participle. Can you fix it? What is the subject of "frying"? It needs to be first in the main clause. By frying the noodles in oil, the moisture could be removed. This is another dangling participle. Can you fix it? What is the subject of "frying"? It needs to be first in the main clause.

Tiny holes would form in the noodles, allowing them to dry completely. Alternatively: This method allowed tiny holes to form in the noodles, causing them to dry out. Tiny holes would form in the noodles, allowing them to dry completely. Alternatively: This method allowed tiny holes to form in the noodles, causing them to dry out.

When hot water iwas poured over them, it would enters those holes and brings the noodles back to a soft texture. When hot water was poured over them, it would enter those holes and bring the noodles back to a soft texture.

Not too major (this would probably go past undetected by most people) but good to keep your tenses consistent through the paragraph.

When hot water is poured over them, it enters those holes and brings the noodles back to a soft texture. Okay, we are shifting tenses here. I think we are shifting from the manufacturer to the consumer, right? Later when hot water is poured over the noodles, the water enters the tiny holes and softens the noodles. When hot water is poured over them, it enters those holes and brings the noodles back to a soft texture. Okay, we are shifting tenses here. I think we are shifting from the manufacturer to the consumer, right? Later when hot water is poured over the noodles, the water enters the tiny holes and softens the noodles.

This is how instant noodles became known around the world. This is how instant noodles became known around the world.

The sentence is correct, but the paragraph before this sentence talks about how instant noodles were invented, not how they became famous. Maybe "And after that, instant noodles became famous around the world" or something along those lines? Or "This is how instant noodles were invented".

This is how instant noodles became known around the world. Please clarify this. How did instant noodles become known around the world? Or are you saying that this method became standard? Or ? This is how instant noodles became known around the world. Please clarify this. How did instant noodles become known around the world? Or are you saying that this method became standard? Or ?

Instant ramen can be essential for busy people, but we should not forget to eat vegetables as well. ... for busy people, but they should remember to include vegetables in their diet, as well. Instant ramen can be essential for busy people, but we should not forget to eat vegetables as well. ... for busy people, but they should remember to include vegetables in their diet, as well.

He lived to the age of 96. "He" -- Instead, give the full name here. He lived to the age of 96. "He" -- Instead, give the full name here.

I believe he must have taken good care of his health and maintained a balanced diet, including vegetables. Or: Considering the age to which he lived, I believe he likely maintained a healthful diet. I believe he must have taken good care of his health and maintained a balanced diet, including vegetables. Or: Considering the age to which he lived, I believe he likely maintained a healthful diet.

His success is certainly remarkable, but what stands out even more is his incredible mental strength. You are introducing a completely new idea here (mental strength) that should be expanded. His success is certainly remarkable, but what stands out even more is his incredible mental strength. You are introducing a completely new idea here (mental strength) that should be expanded.