May 13, 2022
Book - A Shot in the Dark - 72
Summary no. 72
Ben Oliver was a young reporter for the Brighton-based newspaper Evening Argus. Ben had taken this career path because of one man: the popular and prominent journalist Harry Jupiter. Ben was only a child when he’d first read an article by Jupiter. Jupiter’s writing style had amazed Ben so much that he’d decided he would become a journalist himself. Now the man that had been a source of inspiration for Ben was lying in a hospital bed because of an incident. The worst was that he seemed to have lost his memory. Ben was flooded with a mixture of feelings. Naturally, he was heartbroken to have his hero in such a condition, but then a great sense of guilt took over. Had Ben not promptly reported the sensational murder of A. S. Crystal to the Daily Clarion (Jupiter’s employer), Jupiter wouldn’t have got hurt. For this reason, Ben felt compelled to go and help Jupiter retrieve his memory. In particular, Ben sought to bring back Jupiter’s memories of the day of the incident. However, it wasn’t only an act of charity. Ben was after a sensational scoop to boost his flagging career, and he’d heard rumours that Inspector Steine had pushed Jupiter off the pier.
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Book - A Shot in the Dark - 72
Summary no.
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Ben Oliver was a young reporter for the Brighton-based newspaper Evening Argus.
Ben had takchosen this career path because of one man: the popular and prominentrominent and popular journalist Harry Jupiter.
Ben had chosen this career path because of one man: the prominent and popular journalist Harry Jupiter.
Ben was only a child when he’d first read an article by Jupiter.
Jupiter’s writing style had amazed Ben so much that he’d decided he would become a journalist himself.
Now, the man that had been a source of inspiration for Ben was lying in a hospital bed because of an inaccident.
Now, the man that had been a source of inspiration for Ben was lying in a hospital bed because of an accident.
The worst part was that he seemed to have lost his memory. The worst part was that he seemed to have lost his memory.
Ben was flooded with a mixture of feelings.
Naturally, he was heartbroken to have his hero in such a condition, but then a great sense of guilt took over.
Had Ben not promptly reported the sensational murder of A. S. Crystal to the Daily Clarion (Jupiter’s employer), Jupiter wouldn’t have got hurt.
For this reasonBecause of this, Ben felt compelled to go and help Jupiter retrieve his memory.
Because of this, Ben felt compelled to go and help Jupiter retrieve his memory.
In particular, Ben sought to bring back Jupiter’s memories of the day of the inaccident.
In particular, Ben sought to bring back Jupiter’s memories of the day of the accident.
However, it wasn’t only an act of charity.
Ben was after a sensational scoop to boost his flagging career, and he’d heard rumours that Inspector Steine had pushed Jupiter off the pier.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections! You use the word "incident" several times through the passage, and then hint at the end that the event may have occurred intentionally. From what I've read, it's more typical to portray such an occurrence as an accident, or at least use the term, while at the same time hinting it might not have been so.
May 17, 2022
thank you very much
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Ben Oliver was a young reporter for the Brighton-based newspaper Evening Argus. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Ben had taken this career path because of one man: the popular and prominent journalist Harry Jupiter.
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Ben was only a child when he’d first read an article by Jupiter. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Jupiter’s writing style had amazed Ben so much that he’d decided he would become a journalist himself. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Now the man that had been a source of inspiration for Ben was lying in a hospital bed because of an incident.
Now, the man that had been a source of inspiration for Ben was lying in a hospital bed because of an |
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The worst was that he seemed to have lost his memory. The worst part was that he seemed to have lost his memory. The worst part was that he seemed to have lost his memory. |
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Ben was flooded with a mixture of feelings. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Naturally, he was heartbroken to have his hero in such a condition, but then a great sense of guilt took over. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Had Ben not promptly reported the sensational murder of A. S. Crystal to the Daily Clarion (Jupiter’s employer), Jupiter wouldn’t have got hurt. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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For this reason, Ben felt compelled to go and help Jupiter retrieve his memory.
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In particular, Ben sought to bring back Jupiter’s memories of the day of the incident.
In particular, Ben sought to bring back Jupiter’s memories of the day of the |
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However, it wasn’t only an act of charity. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Ben was after a sensational scoop to boost his flagging career, and he’d heard rumours that Inspector Steine had pushed Jupiter off the pier. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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