Dec. 21, 2021
My ideal life is to be born in a mediated wealthy family and my parents treat each other nicely. During my childhood, I had enough time to play with my fellow children and without a lot of worries. When I was in elementary school and high school, I studied hard and could get a good grade so that I could be admitted to a famous university. While I am growing up, my parents can give me a good education. I can get a decent job and a nice salary and the work is not so busy and does not involve lots of pressure and stress. I can afford a decent car and a house. Also, I can marry a nice woman and not scold me all the time. I also want to have certain savings to deal with some unexpected issues. If possible, I want to retire at the age of fifty and have enough money for me to travel by then. I also want to have a long life span and stay healthy because I hate illness. Of course, I will die, but die from age, not from disease. I think my request is not high, and I hope all my ideal life can come true.
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"certain" would be used if out of all savings in existence, you wanted *that* *certain* amount of savings (hehe). "some" would fit here better.
If possible, I want to retire atby the age of fifty and have enough money for me to travel by then.
I also want to halive a long life span and stay healthy, because I hate illnesses.
"illnesses" is plural here because you're saying something generally. You hate *all* illnesses, in *general*.
Of course, I will die, but diue fromto age, not from disease.
I think my request is not highnone of that is too much to ask for, and I hope all my ideal life can come true.
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Nice writing practice, as always :)
That is indeed a very nice ideal life which you've described.
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My ideal life is to be born in a mediated wealthy family and my parents treat each other nicely.
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During my childhood, I had enough time to play with my fellow children and without a lot of worries. During my childhood, I would have had enough time to play with my fellow children I'm using "would" in all of these sentences because this is all a hypothetical situation. |
When I was in elementary school and high school, I studied hard and could get a good grade so that I could be admitted to a famous university. When I |
While I am growing up, my parents can give me a good education.
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I can get a decent job and a nice salary and the work is not so busy and does not involve lots of pressure and stress. I c |
I can afford a decent car and a house. I |
Also, I can marry a nice woman and not scold me all the time. Also, I |
I also want to have certain savings to deal with some unexpected issues. I also want to have "certain" would be used if out of all savings in existence, you wanted *that* *certain* amount of savings (hehe). "some" would fit here better. |
If possible, I want to retire at the age of fifty and have enough money for me to travel by then. If possible, I want to retire |
I also want to have a long life span and stay healthy because I hate illness. I also want to "illnesses" is plural here because you're saying something generally. You hate *all* illnesses, in *general*. |
Of course, I will die, but die from age, not from disease. Of course, I will die, but d |
I think my request is not high, and I hope all my ideal life can come true. I think |
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