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Jan. 12, 2022

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I have to declare first that I have never gotten a mental illness, but I can give some thoughts about this topic.

We can see many people having mental problems at any gender and at any age. It's both really sad for them and us.

I am not a medical worker, so I don't really know the reason which caused these problems, but I guess if it's not caused by brain tissues, it is mostly caused by people's mentality.

If people are open minded, kind, friendly and generous, they hardly seem to get mental illness, otherwise, they are easy to.

So, the best way to avoid getting mental illness is to build a strong mental power and be open minded to everything.

Additionally, giving is always happier than taking and I think it's another good method to keep from mental illness.

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I have to declare first that I have never gottenhad a mental illness, but I can givshare some thoughts about this topic.

I feel like "had" is better than "gotten" here since to me, "getting" an illness is more related to getting infected with an illness that spread from someone else (a cold, the flu, etc.) while "having" an illness is more suitable for things that develop over time and are not caught from other people (autoimmune diseases, mental illness, etc.). Other native speakers might disagree.

We can see many people havdeveloping mental problems at anyregardless of gender and at any age.

It's both really sad for them and us.

I am not a medical worker, so I don't really know the reason whichwhat causeds these problems, but I guess if it's not caused by the brain tissues, it is mostly caused by people's mentality.

If pPeople who are open minded, kind, friendly and generous, they hardly seem to getdevelop mental illness, otherwise, they are easy toes. Other people seem to develop them easily.

So, the best way to avoid gettdeveloping a mental illness is to build a strongyour mental power and be open -minded to everything.

Additionally, giving is always beings more happierness than taking, and I think it's another good method to keep fromway to avoid mental illness.

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Good writing overall. I don't really agree with your opinion, but it's interesting to see other peoples' ideas on this topic :)

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Jack

Jan. 12, 2022

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Thank you very much for correcting my junior.

When you have a mental illness...

I have to declare first that I have never had a mental illness, but I can share some thoughts about this topic.

We can see many people developing mental problems regardless of gender and at any age. It's really sad for them and us.

I am not a medical worker, so I don't really know what causes the problems, but I guess if it's not caused by brain tissue, it is mostly caused by people's mentality.

People who are open minded, kind, friendly and generous, hardly seem to develop mental illnesses, otherwise, other people seem to develop them easily.

So, the best way to avoid developing a mental illness is to build your mental power and be open minded.

Additionally, giving always beings more happiness than taking, and I think it's another good way to avoid mental illness.

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I have to declare first that I have never gotten a mental illness, but I can give some thoughts about this topic.


I have to declare first that I have never gottenhad a mental illness, but I can givshare some thoughts about this topic.

I feel like "had" is better than "gotten" here since to me, "getting" an illness is more related to getting infected with an illness that spread from someone else (a cold, the flu, etc.) while "having" an illness is more suitable for things that develop over time and are not caught from other people (autoimmune diseases, mental illness, etc.). Other native speakers might disagree.

We can see many people having mental problems at any gender and at any age.


We can see many people havdeveloping mental problems at anyregardless of gender and at any age.

It's both really sad for them and us.


It's both really sad for them and us.

I am not a medical worker, so I don't really know the reason which caused these problems, but I guess if it's not caused by brain tissues, it is mostly caused by people's mentality.


I am not a medical worker, so I don't really know the reason whichwhat causeds these problems, but I guess if it's not caused by the brain tissues, it is mostly caused by people's mentality.

If people are open minded, kind, friendly and generous, they hardly seem to get mental illness, otherwise, they are easy to.


If pPeople who are open minded, kind, friendly and generous, they hardly seem to getdevelop mental illness, otherwise, they are easy toes. Other people seem to develop them easily.

So, the best way to avoid getting mental illness is to build a strong mental power and be open minded to everything.


So, the best way to avoid gettdeveloping a mental illness is to build a strongyour mental power and be open -minded to everything.

Additionally, giving is always happier than taking and I think it's another good method to keep from mental illness.


Additionally, giving is always beings more happierness than taking, and I think it's another good method to keep fromway to avoid mental illness.

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