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Writing - Part 1 An essay

Nowadays, neither parents nor teenagers have much free time and logically everyone prefers to spend their spare time doing amusing things instead of houseworking.
Taking into account the equallity lack of time, the best approach could be share housework based on time optimization, that is, parents should take skillful tasks since they should be faster doing them because of the practice over the years, tasks like cooking, ironing, setting washing machine... and teenagers should collaborate with simple tasks like set the table, make the bed, sweep the floor... specially in weekdays when there is less free time.
Added to the above, both parents and young people should do the skillful home tasks together on the weekends, in this way, teenagers will manage to accomplish them in the future.
Thus, in my opinion, the best option is that parents and teenagers share housework as much as possible, so this is an important part of the life family and helps in the mature of children.


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Essay question:
Teenagers and young people should share housework equally with their parents. Do you agree?

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Nowadays, neither parents nor teenagers have much free time and logically everyone prefers to spend their spare time doing amusing things instead of houseworking.

Taking into account the equallity lack of time, the best approach could be share housework based on time optimization, t. That is, parents should take skillful tasks since they should be faster doing them because of the practice over the years, t. Tasks like cooking, ironing, and setting the washing machine... and t Teenagers should collaboratehelp with simple tasks like set the table, make the bed, and sweep the floor... s Specially in weekdays when there is less free time.

Added to the aboveIn addition, both parents and young people should do the skillful home tasks together on the weekends, i. In this waymanner, teenagers will manage to accomplish implement them in the future.

Thus, in my opinion, the best option is that parents and teenagers share housework as much as possible, so t. This is an important part of the life family life and helps in the mature of children mature.

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Careful with making sentences very long.
Better to make it clear instead of having many different ideas in one sentence.
well done

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Dani

Feb. 26, 2022

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Thanks, I follow you to check your Spanish writings ;-)

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Feb. 27, 2022

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Gracias! Tengo que practicar más porque soy principiante

Writing - Part 1 An essay

Nowadays, neither parents nor teenagers have much free time and logically everyone prefers to spend their spare time doing amusing things instead of houseworking.

Taking into account the equallity lack of time, the best approach could be to share housework based on time optimization, that imeans, parents should take skillful(more difficult?) tasks since they should be faster doing them because of the practice over the years, tasks like cooking, ironing, setting washing machine... and teenagers should collaborate with simple tasks like setting the table, makeing the bed, sweeping the floor... especially ion weekdays, when there is less free time.

skillful is about a person, not about a task
The sentence is too long, you should break it up

Added to the abMoreover, both parents and young people should do the skillful(difficult? challenging? skill-intensive?) home tasks together on the weekends, in this way, teenagers will manage to accomplish them in the future.

Thus, in my opinion, the best option is that parents and teenagers share housework as much as possible, aso this is an important part of the life family and helps in the mature of childrenlife and makes the children more mature.

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Well written!

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Dani

Feb. 26, 2022

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Thank you sebra, I appreciate your time.

Writing - Part 1 An eEssay

In titles important words are alway capitalised.

Nowadays, neither parents nor teenagers have much free time and logicnaturally everyone prefers to spend their spare time doing amusing things instead of doing houseworking.

Taking into account the equallity lack of time, the best approach could be to share housework based on time optimization, that is, parents should take skillful taskson tasks that require more skill since they should be faster doing them because of the practice over the years, tasks like cooking, ironing, settingoperating the washing machine... and teenagers should collaborate with simple tasks like setting the table, makeing the beds, sweeping the floors ... especially ion weekdays when there is less frespare time.

A task can't be "skillful", but it requires skill.

Addeding to the above, both the parents and the young people should do the skillfulmore complex home tasks together on the weekends, in this way, teenagers will manage to accomplish them in the future.

Thus, in my opinion, the best option is that parents and teenagers share housework as much as possible, aso this is an important part of the life family life and it helps in the mature of childrenthe children to mature.

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Nice :)

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Dani

Feb. 26, 2022

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Thank you. I'm going to follow you as you're writing some Spanish essay, that way I'll be able to help you too.

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diggn

Feb. 26, 2022

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Muchas gracias, lo aprecio :)

Writing - Part 1 An essay


Writing - Part 1 An eEssay

In titles important words are alway capitalised.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Nowadays, neither parents nor teenagers have much free time and logically everyone prefers to spend their spare time doing amusing things instead of houseworking.


Nowadays, neither parents nor teenagers have much free time and logicnaturally everyone prefers to spend their spare time doing amusing things instead of doing houseworking.

Nowadays, neither parents nor teenagers have much free time and logically everyone prefers to spend their spare time doing amusing things instead of houseworking.

Nowadays, neither parents nor teenagers have much free time and logically everyone prefers to spend their spare time doing amusing things instead of houseworking.

Taking into account the equallity lack of time, the best approach could be share housework based on time optimization, that is, parents should take skillful tasks since they should be faster doing them because of the practice over the years, tasks like cooking, ironing, setting washing machine... and teenagers should collaborate with simple tasks like set the table, make the bed, sweep the floor... specially in weekdays when there is less free time.


Taking into account the equallity lack of time, the best approach could be to share housework based on time optimization, that is, parents should take skillful taskson tasks that require more skill since they should be faster doing them because of the practice over the years, tasks like cooking, ironing, settingoperating the washing machine... and teenagers should collaborate with simple tasks like setting the table, makeing the beds, sweeping the floors ... especially ion weekdays when there is less frespare time.

A task can't be "skillful", but it requires skill.

Taking into account the equallity lack of time, the best approach could be to share housework based on time optimization, that imeans, parents should take skillful(more difficult?) tasks since they should be faster doing them because of the practice over the years, tasks like cooking, ironing, setting washing machine... and teenagers should collaborate with simple tasks like setting the table, makeing the bed, sweeping the floor... especially ion weekdays, when there is less free time.

skillful is about a person, not about a task The sentence is too long, you should break it up

Taking into account the equallity lack of time, the best approach could be share housework based on time optimization, t. That is, parents should take skillful tasks since they should be faster doing them because of the practice over the years, t. Tasks like cooking, ironing, and setting the washing machine... and t Teenagers should collaboratehelp with simple tasks like set the table, make the bed, and sweep the floor... s Specially in weekdays when there is less free time.

Added to the above, both parents and young people should do the skillful home tasks together on the weekends, in this way, teenagers will manage to accomplish them in the future.


Addeding to the above, both the parents and the young people should do the skillfulmore complex home tasks together on the weekends, in this way, teenagers will manage to accomplish them in the future.

Added to the abMoreover, both parents and young people should do the skillful(difficult? challenging? skill-intensive?) home tasks together on the weekends, in this way, teenagers will manage to accomplish them in the future.

Added to the aboveIn addition, both parents and young people should do the skillful home tasks together on the weekends, i. In this waymanner, teenagers will manage to accomplish implement them in the future.

Thus, in my opinion, the best option is that parents and teenagers share housework as much as possible, so this is an important part of the life family and helps in the mature of children.


Thus, in my opinion, the best option is that parents and teenagers share housework as much as possible, aso this is an important part of the life family life and it helps in the mature of childrenthe children to mature.

Thus, in my opinion, the best option is that parents and teenagers share housework as much as possible, aso this is an important part of the life family and helps in the mature of childrenlife and makes the children more mature.

Thus, in my opinion, the best option is that parents and teenagers share housework as much as possible, so t. This is an important part of the life family life and helps in the mature of children mature.

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