March 7, 2022
Writing essay C1 Advanced CAE
"Write paragraphs to answer the question: about medical doctors"
Most medical doctors want to work in cities where they will make a lot of money. Yet in many rural areas there are not enough doctors. 1) What are the reasons for this problem?
2) How can it be solved?
In the most of the developed countries the public health system is assumed as a citizenship's right,
so it has not been until the recent Covid-19 pandemic than most people was aware of the relevance of
taking care of it. In this way, one of its main problems came from the distribution of our doctors
and medical resources between urban and rural areas.
Medicine is one of the harder and longer academic careers that exists (it is about to 10 years, taking into
consideration the time necessary to get the PhD or Doctorate). Because of that, it's completely reasonable
that medical doctors should look for a good salary, as long as, a minimum quality in the facilities where
they work. This work conditions are found mainly in big cities rather than in small villages, where you need
to move far away to be attended at a hospital.
This problem doesn't seem to be in the agenda of our politicians, no matter the ideology. Despite of the fact
that they are the only ones who are able to reorganise public funding, in order to attract more medical doctors
to stay at rural areas.
As a conclusion, politicians should increase the public heath budget, speacially on small towns and villages,
where such a basic right is not always guaranteeded.
I would like know if the structure, content,... (besides grammar) are correct.
Most medical doctors want to work in cities where they will make a lot of money.
Yet in many rural areas there are not enough doctors.
1) What are the reasons for this problem?
2) How can it be solved?
In the most of the developed countries free access to the public health system is assumed as a citizenship's right,to be a right of citizens.
so it has not been until the recent Covid-19 pandemic thant most people wasere made aware of the relevance of
taking care of it.
In this way, one of its main problems came from the distribution of our doctors
and medical resources between urban and rural areas.
Medicine is one of the harderst and longerst academic careers that exists (it isa person can undertake (it can take about to 10 years until someone is fully qualified as a doctor, taking into
consideration the time necessary to get the PhD or Doctorate).
Because of that, it's completely reasonable
that medical doctors should look for a good salary, as long as, a minimum quality there is a good standard in the facilities where
they work.
Thisese work conditions are found mainly in big cities rather than in small villages, where you need
to move far away to be attendedtravel a great distance to be seen at a hospital.
This problem doesn't seem to be ion the agenda of our politicians, no matter theregardless of ideology.
Despite of the fact
that they are the only ones who are able to reorganise public funding, in order to attract more medical doctors
to stay at rural areas.
As aIn conclusion, politicians should increase the public heath budget, espeacially oin small towns and villages,
where such a basic right is not always guaranteeded.
March 12, 2022
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Writing essay C1 Advanced CAE |
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"Write paragraphs to answer the question: about medical doctors" |
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Most medical doctors want to work in cities where they will make a lot of money. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Yet in many rural areas there are not enough doctors. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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1) What are the reasons for this problem? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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2) How can it be solved? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In the most of the developed countries the public health system is assumed as a citizenship's right, In |
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so it has not been until the recent Covid-19 pandemic than most people was aware of the relevance of so it has not been until the recent Covid-19 pandemic tha |
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taking care of it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In this way, one of its main problems came from the distribution of our doctors This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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and medical resources between urban and rural areas. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Medicine is one of the harder and longer academic careers that exists (it is about to 10 years, taking into Medicine is one of the harde |
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consideration the time necessary to get the PhD or Doctorate). This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Because of that, it's completely reasonable This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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that medical doctors should look for a good salary, as long as, a minimum quality in the facilities where that medical doctors should look for a good salary, as long as |
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they work. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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This work conditions are found mainly in big cities rather than in small villages, where you need Th |
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to move far away to be attended at a hospital. to |
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This problem doesn't seem to be in the agenda of our politicians, no matter the ideology. This problem doesn't seem to be |
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Despite of the fact Despite |
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that they are the only ones who are able to reorganise public funding, in order to attract more medical doctors This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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to stay at rural areas. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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As a conclusion, politicians should increase the public heath budget, speacially on small towns and villages,
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where such a basic right is not always guaranteeded. where such a basic right is not always guaranteed |
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