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courageuse19

Feb. 14, 2023

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Writing Challenge Day, 136

Today is day 136 of my daily English challenge. Today I choose a difficult subject but it was very difficult because I do not much of vocabulary.

I want to write to my friend email to give him my advice and support him.I hope everyboy to understand me.

I don't to talk to you of the name religion but I want to talk to you of the name humanity.

They are two differents women.One woman guides one right path and the other guides him through Hell.

I am guiding you on the right path because it is my duty... remember that whoever sows good will reap good... and you are a man of high morals... so I allowed myself to tell you to be patient to your mother... and if you have any problem occurs, be patient. Remember that we are guests on earth.
Don't let a problem affect you. Try to talk to me until we find a solution.

And if we meet and God prolongs your mother's life, which I consider like my mother, I will take care of her.

Remember, I am here for you and to support you.

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Today I choose a very difficult subject but it was very difficult because I do not know much of vocabulary.

I want to write to my friend an email to give him my advice and support him. I hope everybody to understands me.

I dwon't to talk toell you of the name of the religion, but I want to talk to you of the nameill speak of its humanity.

This was really confusing... not sure if my correction is clear. You will not say the name of the religion, but you will speak of its humanity (as a lesson). Right?

Theyre are two differents women. One woman guides one right paththose to righteousness and the other guides him throughto Hell.

I am familiar with this type of idea. Also removing gender pronouns is stylistic on my part, as it applies to the listener regardless of gender. The use of Hell here is often simply left as "ruin" for non-religious discussions, but makes sense either way.

I am guiding you on the right path because it is my duty... remember that whoever sows good will reap good... and you are a man of high morals... so I allowed myself towill tell you to be patient to your mother... and if you have any problem occurs, be patienttry to be understanding.

Is this not the story anymore? I am lost. So I will answer as if this is your advice. I felt that patient here is redundant - Trying to be understanding means many things, mindfulness, compassionate and patient as well.

And iIf we meet and God prolongs your mother's life, which I consider like my mother, I will take care of herif she is still with you than I will do my best help you take care of your mother as if she were my own.

This is... tough. The way your words are suggest that the mother has an incurable illness and will soon die. I have reworded it on two principals - 1. that you will take reasonable care for your friend's mother (an expression of sympathy really) and 2. that you will not take over her care, the last part of your sentence implies that "I will take care of her." as if your friend's duty will be over. This would not make sense. So that is why I also used "with you" instead of "with us" as you are outside the family.

Writing Challenge Day, 136

Today is day 136 of my daily English challenge.

Today I choose a difficult subject but it was very difficult because I do not have much of the vocabulary.

That's okay! I do that a lot because I think it's a good way to learn a lot of things quickly.

I want to write to my friend an email to give him my advice and to support him. I hope everybody towill understand me.

Let's do this!!

I don't to talk'm not talking to you ofin the name of religion but I want to talk to you ofin the name of humanity.

Theyre are two differents types of women. One woman guides onsomeone down the right path andwhile the other guides hima person through Hell.

Note: Men and nonbinary people can be like this, too.

I am guiding you on the right path because it is my duty... remember that whoever sows good will reap good... and you are a man of high morals... so I allowed myself to tell you to be patient towith your mother... and if you have any problem occurs, be patient.

Remember that we are guests on eEarth.

Don't let a problem affect you.

Try to talk to me until we find a solution.

And if we meet and God prolongs your mother's life, which I consider like my mother's, I will take care of her.

You're so kind!

Remember, I am here for you and to support you.

This is how we usually say it in the US. It means a lot!

Feedback

I think you did very well on a topic you haven't written about before. Good luck with and to your friend!

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courageuse19

Feb. 15, 2023

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I don't to talk'm not talking to you ofin the name of religion but I want to talk to you ofin the name of humanity.

Wow Mari! You're alone person understand what I meant.

Thank you so much.

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mari

Feb. 16, 2023

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Wow Mari! You're alone person understand what I meant. Thank you so much.

woo hooo! \o/

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mari

Feb. 16, 2023

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You're very welcome! 😊

Writing Challenge Day, 136

Today is day 136 of my daily English challenge.

Today I choose a difficult subject but i. It was very difficult (to write about) because I do not have very much of vocabulary.

Past tense needed.

I want to write an email to my friend email to give him my advice and support him. I hope heveryboy to understands me.

I don't to talk to you of the name religion but I want to talk to you of the name humanity.

They are two differents women. One woman guides him one right path and the other guides him through Hell.

I am guiding you on the right path because it is my duty... remember that whoever sows good will reap goodthe benefits... and you are a man of high morals... so I allowed myself to tell you to be patient towards your mother... and if you have any problem (that occurs), be patient.

Remember that we are guests on earth.

Don't let a problem affect you.

Try to talk to me until we find a solution.

And if we meet and God prolongs your mother's life, which I consider like my mother, I will take care of her.

Remember, I am here for you and to support you.

Feedback

Great writing! :)

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courageuse19

Feb. 14, 2023

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Thank you Grace.

Writing Challenge Day, 136


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Today is day 136 of my daily English challenge.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Today I choose a difficult subject but it was very difficult because I do not much of vocabulary.


Today I choose a difficult subject but i. It was very difficult (to write about) because I do not have very much of vocabulary.

Past tense needed.

Today I choose a difficult subject but it was very difficult because I do not have much of the vocabulary.

That's okay! I do that a lot because I think it's a good way to learn a lot of things quickly.

Today I choose a very difficult subject but it was very difficult because I do not know much of vocabulary.

I want to write to my friend email to give him my advice and support him.I hope everyboy to understand me.


I want to write an email to my friend email to give him my advice and support him. I hope heveryboy to understands me.

I want to write to my friend an email to give him my advice and to support him. I hope everybody towill understand me.

Let's do this!!

I want to write to my friend an email to give him my advice and support him. I hope everybody to understands me.

I don't to talk to you of the name religion but I want to talk to you of the name humanity.


I don't to talk to you of the name religion but I want to talk to you of the name humanity.

I don't to talk'm not talking to you ofin the name of religion but I want to talk to you ofin the name of humanity.

I dwon't to talk toell you of the name of the religion, but I want to talk to you of the nameill speak of its humanity.

This was really confusing... not sure if my correction is clear. You will not say the name of the religion, but you will speak of its humanity (as a lesson). Right?

They are two differents women.One woman guides one right path and the other guides him through Hell.


They are two differents women. One woman guides him one right path and the other guides him through Hell.

Theyre are two differents types of women. One woman guides onsomeone down the right path andwhile the other guides hima person through Hell.

Note: Men and nonbinary people can be like this, too.

Theyre are two differents women. One woman guides one right paththose to righteousness and the other guides him throughto Hell.

I am familiar with this type of idea. Also removing gender pronouns is stylistic on my part, as it applies to the listener regardless of gender. The use of Hell here is often simply left as "ruin" for non-religious discussions, but makes sense either way.

I am guiding you on the right path because it is my duty... remember that whoever sows good will reap good... and you are a man of high morals... so I allowed myself to tell you to be patient to your mother... and if you have any problem occurs, be patient.


I am guiding you on the right path because it is my duty... remember that whoever sows good will reap goodthe benefits... and you are a man of high morals... so I allowed myself to tell you to be patient towards your mother... and if you have any problem (that occurs), be patient.

I am guiding you on the right path because it is my duty... remember that whoever sows good will reap good... and you are a man of high morals... so I allowed myself to tell you to be patient towith your mother... and if you have any problem occurs, be patient.

I am guiding you on the right path because it is my duty... remember that whoever sows good will reap good... and you are a man of high morals... so I allowed myself towill tell you to be patient to your mother... and if you have any problem occurs, be patienttry to be understanding.

Is this not the story anymore? I am lost. So I will answer as if this is your advice. I felt that patient here is redundant - Trying to be understanding means many things, mindfulness, compassionate and patient as well.

Remember that we are guests on earth.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Remember that we are guests on eEarth.

Don't let a problem affect you.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Try to talk to me until we find a solution.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

And if we meet and God prolongs your mother's life, which I consider like my mother, I will take care of her.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

And if we meet and God prolongs your mother's life, which I consider like my mother's, I will take care of her.

You're so kind!

And iIf we meet and God prolongs your mother's life, which I consider like my mother, I will take care of herif she is still with you than I will do my best help you take care of your mother as if she were my own.

This is... tough. The way your words are suggest that the mother has an incurable illness and will soon die. I have reworded it on two principals - 1. that you will take reasonable care for your friend's mother (an expression of sympathy really) and 2. that you will not take over her care, the last part of your sentence implies that "I will take care of her." as if your friend's duty will be over. This would not make sense. So that is why I also used "with you" instead of "with us" as you are outside the family.

Remember, I am here for you and to support you.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Remember, I am here for you and to support you.

This is how we usually say it in the US. It means a lot!

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