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June 20, 2023

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Writing about my ideal day in 5 years

I wake up at 7 am and tidy up my bed. I go to the bathroom and wash my face. I read a book that I’m having fun with these days for 30 minutes before I eat my breakfast. After I finish my breakfast, I grab my stuff and go to work. I take a bus and listen to a podcast on the way to work. I start work at 9 am. I analyze data that is collected by survey. I enjoy my work. I finish my work at 5 pm. I don’t overwork, so that’s one of the reasons why I like my work. I come back home at almost 6 pm and take a shower. I call my girlfriend and invite her to hang out at my house. We watch a TV show and talk about our favorite character in the show. I get a little jealous of the character she likes. After our enthusiastic debate, we go to bed and sleep. I sleep quietly and happily cuddling with my love.

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Writing about mMy ideal day in 5 years.

I wake up at 7 am and tidy uphen make my bed.

I goThen, I'll to the bathroom and wash my face.

I'll read a book that I’m having fun with these daysenjoying for 30 minutes before I eat my breakfast.

I don’t overwork too hard, so that’s one of the reasons why I like my working so much.

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This is beautifully written! One piece of advice I would give is to use more connectives, (such as and, or, then) to make your sentences flow better. Well done!

I go to the bathroom and wash my face.

I goThen, I'll to the bathroom and wash my face.

I wake up at 7 am and tidy up my bed.

I wake up at 7 am and tidy uphen make my bed.

I don’t overwork, so that’s one of the reasons why I like my work.

I don’t overwork too hard, so that’s one of the reasons why I like my working so much.

Writing about my ideal day in 5 years

Writing about mMy ideal day in 5 years.

I read a book that I’m having fun with these days for 30 minutes before I eat my breakfast.

I'll read a book that I’m having fun with these daysenjoying for 30 minutes before I eat my breakfast.

After I finish my breakfast, I grab my stuff and go to work.

I take a bus and listen to a podcast on the way to work.

I start work at 9 am.

I analyze data that is collected by survey.

I enjoy my work.

I finish my work at 5 pm.

I come back home at almost 6 pm and take a shower.

I call my girlfriend and invite her to hang out at my house.

We watch a TV show and talk about our favorite character in the show.

I get a little jealous of the character she likes.

After our enthusiastic debate, we go to bed and sleep.

I sleep quietly and happily cuddling with my love.

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