July 18, 2020
Writing about my financial issues and mental health
Sometimes school and work get so overwhelming at a level I barely have time to take care of my mental health. Having leisure and recreation activities becomes a luxury and my mind almost blows up by being drowned by duties and responbilities with significant ones and the University. On the top of that, either I work to pay my dues or I will have no budget for food and essential stuff. So, I am left with no choice other than working dozens of hours a week.
On the flip side, recently my College granted me a scholarship so I assume I will no longer be so concerned about taking extra shifts at work to cover my tuition. As of now, I reckon I will be able to spare at least two days to work on my mental state, and since my college department provides free assistance for individuals who are suffering from psychological problems there will be no need to pull money out of my pocket to get help.
Therefore, from now on I hope to enjoy my time at college and live remarkable moments along with old and new friends.
Having leisure and recreation activities becomes a luxury and >>my mind almost blows up by being drowned<< by duties and responbilities with significant ones and the University.
The idea of an explosion AND the idea of drowning don't follow; Your head could explode OR you could drown. Including both thoughts gives us a mixed metaphor. Try using only one one metaphor or the other but not both. Either would work well in this context :-)
Writing about my financial issues and mental health
Sometimes school and work get so overwhelming that a level I barely have time to take care of my mental health.
Having leisure and recreation activities becomes a luxury and my mind almost blows up by being drowned by duties and responsibilities with significantloved ones and the Uuniversity.
On the top of that, either I work to pay my duestuition or I will have no budget for food and essential stuff.
I assumed you meant tuition for your university studies. "Dues" usually refers to money paid when you're a member in a particular organization, for example union dues when you're in a trade union.
So, I am left with no choice other than to working dozens of many hours a week.
On the flippositive side, recently my College granted me a scholarship so I assume I will no longer be so concerned aboutfeel obliged to takinge extra shifts at work to cover my tuition.
As of now, I reckonestimate I will be able to spare at least two days to work on my mental statehealth, and since my college department provides free assistance for individuals who are suffering from psychological problems there will be no need to pull money out of my pocket to get help.
"reckon" sounds kind of old fashioned, like you're a character in a Mark Twain novel or something. I changed it to "estimate" but if you want something more casual, you could say "figure" or "think."
Therefore, from now on I hope to enjoy my time at college and live rmemarkorable moments along with old and new friends.
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Good writing! All the best to you.
July 18, 2020
Thank you! I was told before that "reckon" sounds quite old fashioned, but I like being kinda quirk sometimes haha.
Does memorable fit better than remarkable in this context because it is more related to memories ?
July 18, 2020
Not just because it's related to memories, but because you are (I assume) writing about events that might stand out to you personally, but would not be truly remarkable in the grand scheme of things. Maybe you are talking about having good times with friends, a party, a games night, a really stimulating philosophy discussion, a fun hike in the mountains, a good relationship with a boyfriend/girlfriend. That's great for you, but not remarkable. Remarkable would be if you graduate from university at age 15, if you climb Mount Everest, if you invest your spare change and become a millionaire, if you get cancer and cure yourself with fruit juice. Something that would be really amazing to other people.
Note that "quirky" is the adjective, and "quirk" is the noun. "I have a quirk" vs. "I am quirky."
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writing about my financial issues and mental health |
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Sometimes school and work get so overwhelming at a level I barely have time to take care of my mental health. Sometimes school and work get so overwhelming that |
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Having leisure and recreation activities becomes a luxury and my mind almost blows up by being drowned by duties and responbilities with significant ones and the University. Having leisure and recreation activities becomes a luxury and my mind almost blows up by being drowned by duties and responsibilities with Having leisure and recreation activities becomes a luxury and >>my mind almost blows up by being drowned<< by duties and responbilities with significant ones and the University. The idea of an explosion AND the idea of drowning don't follow; Your head could explode OR you could drown. Including both thoughts gives us a mixed metaphor. Try using only one one metaphor or the other but not both. Either would work well in this context :-) |
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On the top of that, either I work to pay my dues or I will have no budget for food and essential stuff. On I assumed you meant tuition for your university studies. "Dues" usually refers to money paid when you're a member in a particular organization, for example union dues when you're in a trade union. |
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So, I am left with no choice other than working dozens of hours a week. So, I am left with no choice other than to work |
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On the flip side, recently my College granted me a scholarship so I assume I will no longer be so concerned about taking extra shifts at work to cover my tuition. On the |
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As of now, I reckon I will be able to spare at least two days to work on my mental state, and since my college department provides free assistance for individuals who are suffering from psychological problems there will be no need to pull money out of my pocket to get help. As of now, I "reckon" sounds kind of old fashioned, like you're a character in a Mark Twain novel or something. I changed it to "estimate" but if you want something more casual, you could say "figure" or "think." |
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Therefore, from now on I hope to enjoy my time at college and live remarkable moments along with old and new friends. Therefore, from now on I hope to enjoy my time at college and live |
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