April 5, 2020
My cousin got an internship and was ready to take it. But he was alone and early to get to Wuhan from another province. So he has been stuck in the epicenter of coronavirus since the middle of January. He tells us how his quarantine goes on from time to time and he is good and healthy. He is the youngest child in our family and all the relatives care about him a lot.
Somehow one day, just as the official declared that Wuhan city would no longer lock down two weeks later, which means that my cousin will be no longer under quarantine and he can go back home, my aunt was in an argument with my father. My father suggested my cousin remain in Wuhan since Wuhan has all the attention from all over China due to COVID 19, there will be great development potential with favorable policies. My aunt misunderstood my father’s words. She was strongly against it and she didn’t listen at all. She just wanted her son come back as soon as possible. She considers that city a hell. But how could she ever think about it? Our family was born there. And she spent 18 years there. It’s our hometown with a lot of memories. Nobody knows.
Two days ago, my cousin made a decision. He will stay in Wuhan. But he told us the company closed down and would not offer anyone work. Since it's his decision, he had to struggling his life and find other ways to live on.
My cousin got an internship and was ready to take it.,
But because he was alone and, he left early to get to Wuhan from another province.
The sentence I corrected has a slightly different meaning, sorry! I wasn't 100% I understood.
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She just wanted her son to come back as soon as possible.
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My correction means the same thing but sounds a little more natural. :)
You cold also say "How could she even think that?" if you're talking about your thoughts.
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Good job :) Hope your cousin figures things out!
Writing 2
My cousin got an internship and was ready to take it.
But he was alone and early to get to Wuhanit was in Wuhan, and he was alone and arrived early from another province.
"Early to get to Wuhan" doesn't make sense here, since you haven't introduced the role of Wuhan yet in the writing. It seems like something is missing
So he has been stuck in the epicenter of the coronavirus outbreak since the middle of January.
He tells us how his quarantine goes on from time to time and h. He is good and healthy.
"And" must connect related phrases. You could also write "and says that" or something similar, but if not, this sounds disjointed. "Goes on" is related to continuity (e.g. "the adventure goes on"). To say how something is, just use "go."
He is the youngest child in our family and all the relatives care about him a lot.
Somehow one day, just as the officials declared that Wuhan city would be no longer be under lock down in two weeks later, which meanst that my cousin will beould no longer be under quarantine and he canwould be able to go back home, my aunt was in an argument with my father.
"Two weeks later" sounds like you are referring to when the official made the announcement in reference to the rest of the story, not when lockdown will be lifted.
My father suggested my cousin remain in Wuhan: since Wuhan has all the attention from all over China due to COVID 19, there will be great development potential with favorable policies.
You've introduced a subordinate clause with "since" that does not fit anywhere and creates a run-on. You need to either separate the sentences or reword it, like "My father suggested my cousin remain in Wuhan because there will be great development potential … since Wuhan has all the attention."
My aunt misunderstood my father’s words.
She was strongly against it and she didn’t listen at all.
She just wanted her son come back as soon as possible.
She considers that city a hell.
But how could she ever think about ithat?
"Think about something" means that you're thinking about a particular subject. To say that you're thinking a particular idea, "think that" ("that" being a pronoun referring to the idea) or "think that…" (to introduce the idea itself) should be used.
Our family was bornis from there.
People and individual things are "born," not families.
And she spent 18 years there.
It’s our hometown with a lot of memories.
Nobody knows.
Two days ago, my cousin made a decision.
He will stay in Wuhan.
But he told us the company closed down and would not longer offer anyone work.
Since it's his decision, he had tos been struggling with his life and has to find other ways to live on.
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My cousin got an internship and was ready to take it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! My cousin got an internship and was ready to take it |
But he was alone and early to get to Wuhan from another province. But "Early to get to Wuhan" doesn't make sense here, since you haven't introduced the role of Wuhan yet in the writing. It seems like something is missing But because he was alone The sentence I corrected has a slightly different meaning, sorry! I wasn't 100% I understood. |
So he has been stuck in the epicenter of coronavirus since the middle of January. So he has been stuck in the epicenter of the coronavirus outbreak since the middle of January. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
He tells us how his quarantine goes on from time to time and he is good and healthy. He tells us how his quarantine goes "And" must connect related phrases. You could also write "and says that" or something similar, but if not, this sounds disjointed. "Goes on" is related to continuity (e.g. "the adventure goes on"). To say how something is, just use "go." He tells us how his quarantine |
He is the youngest child in our family and all the relatives care about him a lot. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Somehow one day, just as the official declared that Wuhan city would no longer lock down two weeks later, which means that my cousin will be no longer under quarantine and he can go back home, my aunt was in an argument with my father. Somehow one day, just as "Two weeks later" sounds like you are referring to when the official made the announcement in reference to the rest of the story, not when lockdown will be lifted.
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My father suggested my cousin remain in Wuhan since Wuhan has all the attention from all over China due to COVID 19, there will be great development potential with favorable policies. My father suggested my cousin remain in Wuhan: since Wuhan has all the attention from all over China due to COVID 19, there will be great development potential with favorable policies. You've introduced a subordinate clause with "since" that does not fit anywhere and creates a run-on. You need to either separate the sentences or reword it, like "My father suggested my cousin remain in Wuhan because there will be great development potential … since Wuhan has all the attention." My father suggested that my cousin remain in Wuhan since Wuhan has |
My aunt misunderstood my father’s words. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
She was strongly against it and she didn’t listen at all. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
She just wanted her son come back as soon as possible. This sentence has been marked as perfect! She just wanted her son to come back as soon as possible. |
She considers that city a hell. She considers that city |
But how could she ever think about it? But how could she ever think "Think about something" means that you're thinking about a particular subject. To say that you're thinking a particular idea, "think that" ("that" being a pronoun referring to the idea) or "think that…" (to introduce the idea itself) should be used.
My correction means the same thing but sounds a little more natural. :) You cold also say "How could she even think that?" if you're talking about your thoughts. |
Our family was born there. Our family was People and individual things are "born," not families. Our family was |
And she spent 18 years there. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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It’s our hometown with a lot of memories. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Nobody knows. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Nobody knows why she said what she said. |
Two days ago, my cousin made a decision. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
He will stay in Wuhan. This sentence has been marked as perfect! He |
But he told us the company closed down and would not offer anyone work. But he told us the company closed down and would no
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Since it's his decision, he had to struggling his life and find other ways to live on. Since it's his decision, he ha Since it's his decision, he ha |
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