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4 days ago, I watched an interview of Tom Holland, the famous British actor. He was interviewed by Jay Shetty, a youtubeur and podcaster well known for his episods dedicated to health and self-development.
I had already watched some other videos from him before, like Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc, two incredible pilots (I will probably talk about them another day!), but I was really excited about this one.
The two first podcasts were really interesting and I loved the way Jay turned the questions and I was impressed by how much I learned about their lives.
In the interview with Tom Holland, they talked about various subjects.
The first one was how he became famous in the whole wide world and first and foremost, how he became an actor.
First things first, they discussed about his childhood. He was a pretty sociable person, and had pretty much friends. His parents were tolerant about whatever he did (hus grades for instance) as much as he did his best. He joined a dancing school when he was about 14 years old, and his teacher was great.
From that moment, he started to be on the payroll for different movies, and his career exploded when he played Spider Man. It was the turning point of his career.
However, everything in his life wasn't perfect.
A part that I found really interesting in the podcast was his alcoholic addiction. He used to think that alcohol made a cool person out of him, whereas he actually didn't need that to be sociable and have friends. He was really thankful about his friends for their understanding when he tried to stop that addiction. Indeed, they never tried to push him to drink with them during parties. He said he liked the role he has now by dropping his friends off after the parties and to be 100% sure that everything was safe. He also loved that people could talk freely to him and say their deeper thoughts so that he could understand them and try to help them.
To conclude, he talked about a life changing experience: his swiming session with a killing whale.
Once, he was with friends and his brother in the sea in a big ship, and by far, they saw a big whale. They decided to make their way back and to swim with it. It turned out that it was actually a dangerous whale. However, they could see it really closely, and it was only a moment of pure peace with "Mother Nature" as he called that. He emphasised this feeling of freedom when you can't act or change anything and just live the present moment without thinking about anything else. As a matter of fact, he said that it was an incredible experience but that he wouldn't do that again if he had the opportunity to.
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Tom Holland
4 days ago, I watched an interview of Tom Holland, the famous British actor.
He was interviewed by Jay Shetty, a yYoutTubeur and podcaster well known for his episodes dedicated to health and self-development.
Good job! Just two minor spelling and capitalization errors.
I had already watched some other videos from him before, like his interviews with Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc, two incredible pilots (I will probably talk about them another day!), but I was really excited about this one.
I would clarify that you are watching the interviews Jay Shetty does, so the reader knows that Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc are subjects in his videos. Saying "I had already watched some other videos from him before, like Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc" kind of sounds like Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc are separate YouTubers who you also happen to watch.
The two first two podcasts were really interesting and. I loved the way Jay turnphrased the questions and I was impressed by how much I learned about their lives.
In English you would say "first two" instead of "two first." I've never really heard someone say "turned the questions." Depending on what you mean by that, you could instead say "I loved the questions Jay asked" or "I loved Jay's questions" or even "I loved the way Jay phrased the questions" if you specifically liked the WAY he asked the questions and not just the questions themselves.
In the interview with Tom Holland, they talked about various subjects.
The first one was how he became famous in the whole wide world and first and foremost, how he became an actorFirst and foremost, they talked about how he became an actor and how he later became famous around the world.
I don't think you can put "first and foremost" after you talk about how he became famous because then it only makes sense if it is first. If you flip it around like I did and put "first and foremost" in the beginning, then it works. But you should only use first and foremost if you are talking about the most IMPORTANT topic they discussed in the interview, not just the first topic. First = beginning, first and foremost = most important.
First things first, theyThey also discussed about his childhood.
Since you already introduced the first topic you don't need to say "first things first." Also, "discussed" takes a direct object, so you don't need to say "about" or any other filler words. You can just say "they discussed his childhood," but I put "they also discussed his childhood" because I think it sounds a bit more natural
He was a pretty sociable person, and had pretty muche had a lot of friends.
"Pretty much" means nearly, almost, or basically. For example, "the room was pretty much empty" means the room is nearly empty but there are just a couple of things in it.
His parents were tolerant about whatever he did (huis grades for instance) as muchlong as he did his best.
"As long as" is used here.
He joined a dancing school when he was about 14 years old, and his teacher was great.
A part that I found really interesting in the podcast was his alcoholic addiction.
"Alcoholic" is an adjective, like "an alcoholic drink". In this sentence it would be "alcohol addiction" because he's addicted TO alcohol.
He used to think that alcohol made a cool person out of him, whereasbut in reality, he actually didn't need thait to be sociable and have friends.
Whereas sounds unnatural here, though not technically wrong.
He was really thankful aboutfor his friends and for their understanding when he tried to stop that addiction.
"Thankful" goes with "for"
He said he likeds the role he has now by, where he droppings his friends off after the parties and tocan be 100% sure that everything wais safe.
Since you said that is his role now, you'd put the sentence in the present tense.
He also loveds that people couldan talk freely to him and say their deeper thoughts so that he couldhe can understand them and try to help them.
Is this something he currently still loves and currrently still happens? If so, use the present tense.
To conclude, he talked about a life changing experience: his swimming session with a killinger whale.
Perfect use of a colon! Only correction is that it's "killer whale" not "killing whale." Killer is its identity, killing is the action.
Once, he was with friends and his brother in the sea in a big ship, and by far,on a big ship in the sea, and they saw a bighuge whale from afar.
"By far" is used for comparisons. For example. "that was by far the biggest whale I've ever seen!"
They decided to make their way back and to swim with it.
Make their way back to what? Are they returning from something?
However, they could see it really closely, and it was only a moment of pure peace with "Mother Nature" as he called thait.
He emphasised thise feeling of freedom when you can't act or change anything and just live the present moment without thinking about anything else.
As a matter of fact, he said that it was an incredible experience but that he wouldn't do that again if he had the opportunity to.
You can just get rid of "to" at the end.
I hope you enjoyed reading my text.
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This was really good! I was especially impressed with your use of a colon, your transition phrases like "however" and "as a matter of fact," and the order in which you organized the story.
He was interviewed by Jay Shetty, a yYoutTubeur and podcaster well known for his episodes dedicated to health and self-development.
I hadve already watched some other videos ofrom him before, like Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc, two incredible pilots (I will probably talk about them another day!), but I was really excited about this one.
He was a pretty sociable person, and had pretty muchquite a lot of friends.
His parents were tolerant about whatever he did (huis grades for instance) as much as he did his best.
He said he liked the role he has now by dropping his friends off after the parties and to be 100% sure that everythingone was safe.
To conclude the interview, he talked about a life changing experience: his swiming session with a killing whale.
As a matter of fact, he said that it was an incredible experience but that he wouldn't do that again if he had the opportunity to.
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I had already watched some other videos from him before, like Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc, two incredible pilots (I will probably talk about them another day!), but I was really excited about this one. I ha I had already watched some other videos from him before, like his interviews with Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc, two incredible pilots (I will probably talk about them another day!), but I was really excited about this one. I would clarify that you are watching the interviews Jay Shetty does, so the reader knows that Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc are subjects in his videos. Saying "I had already watched some other videos from him before, like Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc" kind of sounds like Lewis Hamilton and Charles Leclerc are separate YouTubers who you also happen to watch. |
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The two first podcasts were really interesting and I loved the way Jay turned the questions and I was impressed by how much I learned about their lives. The In English you would say "first two" instead of "two first." I've never really heard someone say "turned the questions." Depending on what you mean by that, you could instead say "I loved the questions Jay asked" or "I loved Jay's questions" or even "I loved the way Jay phrased the questions" if you specifically liked the WAY he asked the questions and not just the questions themselves. |
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In the interview with Tom Holland, they talked about various subjects. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The first one was how he became famous in the whole wide world and first and foremost, how he became an actor.
I don't think you can put "first and foremost" after you talk about how he became famous because then it only makes sense if it is first. If you flip it around like I did and put "first and foremost" in the beginning, then it works. But you should only use first and foremost if you are talking about the most IMPORTANT topic they discussed in the interview, not just the first topic. First = beginning, first and foremost = most important. |
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First things first, they discussed about his childhood.
Since you already introduced the first topic you don't need to say "first things first." Also, "discussed" takes a direct object, so you don't need to say "about" or any other filler words. You can just say "they discussed his childhood," but I put "they also discussed his childhood" because I think it sounds a bit more natural |
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He was a pretty sociable person, and had pretty much friends. He was a pretty sociable person, and had He was a pretty sociable person, and h "Pretty much" means nearly, almost, or basically. For example, "the room was pretty much empty" means the room is nearly empty but there are just a couple of things in it. |
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His parents were tolerant about whatever he did (hus grades for instance) as much as he did his best. His parents were tolerant about whatever he did (h His parents were tolerant about whatever he did (h "As long as" is used here. |
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He joined a dancing school when he was about 14 years old, and his teacher was great. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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From that moment, he started to be on the payroll for different movies, and his career exploded when he played Spider Man. |
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It was the turning point of his career. |
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However, everything in his life wasn't perfect. |
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A part that I found really interesting in the podcast was his alcoholic addiction. A part that I found really interesting in the podcast was his alcohol "Alcoholic" is an adjective, like "an alcoholic drink". In this sentence it would be "alcohol addiction" because he's addicted TO alcohol. |
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He used to think that alcohol made a cool person out of him, whereas he actually didn't need that to be sociable and have friends. He used to think that alcohol made a cool person out of him, Whereas sounds unnatural here, though not technically wrong. |
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He was really thankful about his friends for their understanding when he tried to stop that addiction. He was really thankful "Thankful" goes with "for" |
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Indeed, they never tried to push him to drink with them during parties. |
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He said he liked the role he has now by dropping his friends off after the parties and to be 100% sure that everything was safe. He said he liked the role he has now by dropping his friends off after the parties and to be 100% sure that every He said he like Since you said that is his role now, you'd put the sentence in the present tense. |
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He also loved that people could talk freely to him and say their deeper thoughts so that he could understand them and try to help them. He also love Is this something he currently still loves and currrently still happens? If so, use the present tense. |
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To conclude, he talked about a life changing experience: his swiming session with a killing whale. To conclude the interview, he talked about a life changing experience: his swiming session with a killing whale. To conclude, he talked about a life changing experience: his swimming session with a kill Perfect use of a colon! Only correction is that it's "killer whale" not "killing whale." Killer is its identity, killing is the action. |
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Once, he was with friends and his brother in the sea in a big ship, and by far, they saw a big whale. Once, he was with friends and his brother "By far" is used for comparisons. For example. "that was by far the biggest whale I've ever seen!" |
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They decided to make their way back and to swim with it. They decided to make their way back and Make their way back to what? Are they returning from something? |
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It turned out that it was actually a dangerous whale. |
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However, they could see it really closely, and it was only a moment of pure peace with "Mother Nature" as he called that. However, they could see it really closely, and it was |
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He emphasised this feeling of freedom when you can't act or change anything and just live the present moment without thinking about anything else. He emphasised th |
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As a matter of fact, he said that it was an incredible experience but that he wouldn't do that again if he had the opportunity to. As a matter of fact, he said that it was an incredible experience but As a matter of fact, he said that it was an incredible experience but that he wouldn't do that again if he had the opportunity You can just get rid of "to" at the end. |
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