Hello, my name is Jacky, and I am currently 19 years old.

Before the word "and" a comma is placed *IF* a clause, or sentence, is placed after the "and."

I live in Germany and went to school for my A-levels until mMarch 2024.

Nice. Month names, place names, weekdays, etc. Are all capitalized.

After that, I started an apprenticeship as an insurance sales woman, but iI stopped after 3three months because the job wasn`'t for me.

Commas go after transition words and phrases.

Since last year november I'm joblessI have been jobless since November last year, and iI have been trying to figure out what to do with my life.

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This may be turning into some kind of vent, but it feels kind of freeing to just write about my problems and also do something to improve my eEnglish skills.

Just some nuances in grammar.

I've experienced a lot of negative thoughts throughout the months, and I'm frantically trying to find professional help, but that seems pointless.

Ich verstehe dich. Ich versuche, meine Zeit mit Hobbys wie Laufen und kreativen Aktivitäten zu füllen. Es scheint zu helfen. (Ich habe dafür einfach Google Translate verwendet, damit ich das klarer kommunizieren kann.)

They either have no free appointments or a wait-list of 6 months andor more, which really gets on my nerves.

They either have no free appointments or a wait-list of 6 months or more, which really gets on my nerves.

Moreover, I feel like my mental health is slowly breaking apart again (I have had problems since I was 13, so I am scared of falling into that hole again), and it feels like I am trapped in my own thoughts that I can't escape.

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MOut of the blue, my parents got divorced in May 2023 out of the blue, and my mum, the person that watched me grow up, moved out and left me in biggreat disappointment, since she cheated on my father and didn't even tell me nor my siblings.

Out of the blue, my parents got divorced in May 2023, and my mum, the person that watched me grow up, moved out and left me in great disappointment since she cheated on my father and didn't even tell me or my siblings.

I was hurt, and devastated, and I felt like she was leaving me.

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I did not have a good connection with my father since he was working from 6 am to 8 pm most of the days, so iI never got to share my childhood with him.

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When we moved in 2016 into our new home, he worked from home, but because of my brother, who was born in 2015, he mostly spent time with him and my little sister, (born in 2008).

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So I was kinda the left out or left behind child, especially after the divorce because my siblings and I were devastated, but my father only noticed their feelings, not mine.

So I was left out or left behind, especially after the divorce because my siblings and I were devastated, but my father only noticed their feelings, not mine.

He does non't know what I went through the past 2 years, and it hurts me so bad that it seems like I can't talk to anyone.

He doesn't know what I went through the past 2 years, and it hurts me so bad that it seems like I can't talk to anyone.

I just want him to show the same affection to me likethat he shows to my siblings, and realize that it hurts me too.

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iI just want him to see how hurt I am, how confused and fed up I am with my feelings.

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I just want to be seen and get help and treated equally, because I am his daughter too, and just because I'm the oldest it does non't mean I am less hurt.

You can omit the first "just"

Since last year november I'mve been jobless and i have been trying to figure out what to do with my life.

"I am" is present tense, and even though you still are jobless, the "since" at the start puts the sentence in past tense.

(It's maybe not "simple past", but a more technical explanation is beyond me.)

I've experienced a lot of negative thoughts throughout the months and I'm frantically trying to find professional help, but thait seems pointless.

"it" just felt more natural to me here, but it's hard to explain.

They either have no free appointments or a waitlist of 6 months and more, which. It really gets on my nerves.

My parents got divorced in May 2023 out of the blue and my mum, the person that watched me grow up, moved out and left me in big disappointment(?), since she cheated on my father and didn't even tell me nor my siblings.

I'm not sure what "left me in a big disappointment" means exactly. If you mean your mother disappointed you by cheating, I might say

> My parents got divorced in May of 2023 out of the blue. My mum, the person that watched me grow up, disappointed me by cheating on my father and didn't even tell me, nor my siblings.

"mum" is a term of endearment so it feels unfitting here... but I'm not sure what I'd say here.

I was hurt, devastated, and felt like she was leaving me.

So I was kinda the left out or left behind child, especially after the divorce, because my siblings and I were devastated, but my father only noticed their feelings, not mine.

Hello, m. My name is Jacky, and I am currently 19 years old.

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I live in Germany and went to school forfinished/completed my A-levels until min March 2024.

You might also say "and graduated in March 2024" if that's accurate for your situation.

After that I started an apprenticeship as a insurance sales woman, but iI stopped after 3 months because the job wasn`t for me.

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Since last year nNovember I'mve been jobless and i have been trying to figure out what to do with my life.

use "have been" for any action that started in the past and continues in the present

This may be turning into some kind of vent, but it feels kind of freeing to just write about my problems and to also do something to improve my eEnglish skills.

compound verbs: "it feels freeing TO... write.. and TO do..."

I've experienced a lot of negative thoughts throughout theover these past months and. I'm frantically trying to find professional help, but that seems pointless.

Not grammar but a question on vocab: 'frantic' is a strong word, implying lots of frenetic energy every single day. 'Pointless' is similarly an absolute. I'm not sure if that's what you intended here for something that has happened over a period of months. (It's a long time to be 'frantic'.)

Theyre's either have no freno available appointments or a waitlist of 6 months andor more, which really gets on my nerves.

Moreover, I feel like my mental health is slowly breaking apart again (I have had problems since I was 13, so I am scared of falling into that hole again), and it feels like I am trapped in my own thoughts that I can't escape.

So many things happened in the past 6 years, - the last 2 especially, so - that I don't know how I can continue.

My parents got divorced in May 2023 out of the blue and m. My mum, the person thatwho watched me grow up, moved out and left me in bigvery disappointmented, since she cheated on my father and didn't even tell me nor my siblings.

'who' not 'that' for people
'nor' is only used with in 'neither'... 'nor'
Here, a stronger word than 'disappointed' might fit better, like 'devastated'

I was hurt, devastated and felt like she was leaving me behind.

I did not have a good connection with my father since he washad been working from 6am to 8pm most of the days, so idays. I never got to share my childhood with him.

If the sentence starts in the past tense (I 'did not'), you'll pair that statement with 'had been working'

Another option: "I 'did not have' a good connection with my father WHILE he 'was working' from..." (past progressive is for a past activity that happens at the same time as the other one and is usually paired with a word like WHILE)

WIn 2016, when we moved in 2016 into our new home, he workedstarted working (?) from home, but because ofhe spent most of his time with my brother, who was born in 2015, he mostly spent time with him andand with my little sister, (born in 2008).

I would use "started working" to indicate that it was a new activity that started in the past and then continued while other actions were also happening in the past. (But I don't know if that's accurate, based on the present wording you have :) )

So I was kinda of the left out or left behind child, especially after the divorce, because my siblings and I were devastated, but my father only noticed theirmy siblings' feelings, not mine.

'kinda' appears in text messages and speech but never in complete sentences in an essay like this one :)

He does not know what I went throughhow hard the past 2two years have been for me, and it hurts me so badso much that it seems like I can'thave no one to talk to anyone.

I just want him to show me the same affection to me likehat he shows to my siblings and to realize that ithe divorce hurt me, too.

i just want him to see how hurt I am, as well as how confused and fed up I am with my feelings.

I just want to be seen and get help and treated equally, because I am his daughter, too and j. Just because I'm the oldest does not mean I am less hurt.

I live in Germany and went to school for my A-levels until mMarch 2024.

After that I started an apprenticeship as a insurance sales woman, but i stopped after 3 months because the job wasn`'t for me.

Since last year nNovember I'm jobless and iI have been trying to figure out what to do with my life.

They either have no free appointments or a waitlist of 6 months andor more, which really gets on my nerves.

So many things happened in the past 6 years, the last 2 especiallyespecially the last 2, so I don't know how I can continue.

My parents got divorced in May 2023 out of the blue and my mum, the person that watched me grow up, moved out and left me inwhich was a big disappointment, since she cheated on my father and didn't even tell me nor my siblings.

I did not have a good connection with my father since he was working from 6am to 8pm most of the days, so i never got to share my childhood with him.

When we moved in 2016 into our new home, he worked from home but because of my brother, who was born in 2015, he mostly spent time with him and my little sister (born in 2008).

I just want him to show the same affection to me likethat he shows to my siblings and realize that it hurt me too.