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Nevertheless, women argue that it is nothis isn’t the case.

In this essay I will expose to you the significant changes that women have adcquired during the last decades in the working world.

At the same time, I will be writting about the gap that is still touching woman around the world.

During the Second World War, women haved been forced to worked since men had to defend their country.

Había + past participle = had + past participle

Previous to this event, women didn't really have the possibility to work, they had to take care of their family, that was their priority at that time.

Besides the one mistake, this is a really good sentence and is very well structured as if a native wrote it, well done!!!

A women nowadays can dream about being a lawyer, scientist, doctor or whatever she wants.

In English, we use articles with professions.
“Soy artista” = I am an artist

On the other hand, due to prejudgments such as pregnancy orand sensitivenessity, the quantity of women working on high ranks of a company is still less than the quantity of men.

In point of fact, even if the women are no longer seen as people who cannot work and must be stay always at home taking care of their families, they don't eitherstill don’t have the privilege men have to occupy a job today.

To sum it up, women’s battles have allowed them to obtain a better possition in the society, nevertheless, the battle has not finished, there is still some differences between women and men at workingin the workforce.

Thus it is necessary tofor women to continue fighting for equality.

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Women are included in work more and more included every year, at working,least that is what it i's said.

In this essay I will expose to you the significant changes that women have adcquired during the lasrecent decades in the working world.

At the same time, I will be writting about the gap that is still touching/impacting woman around the world.

I think "touching" works, but "impacting" fits better in the context of this sentence

During the Second World War, women have beenwere forced to worked since men had to defend their country.

Previous to this event, women didn't really have the possibility to work, as they had to take care of their family, and that was the priority at that time.

However, leveraging their abilities to lead, to convince, and to encourage, over the years, women achieved better opportunities over the years.

Just added commas and moved some words around to make it clear that "leveraging their abilities to lead, to convince, and to encourage" is all one list of examples.

Currently, women can study, can vote(,) and they can even lead big companies.

A situation like this is called the Oxford Comma, and it's a pretty heated subject even in the native English world. You can put a comma after every example in a sentence, if you'd like, or you can leave out the comma like you did. Both are correct, it's just a matter of personal preference.

A women nowadays can dream about being a lawyer, scientist, doctor(,) or whatever she wants.

Another example of the Oxford Comma! Whether you use one here or not, both are correct.

On the other hand, due to prejudgments such as pregnancy or sensitiveness, the quantity/number of women working on high ranks of a company is still less than the quantity/number of men.

I think "quantity" technically works, but we often don't say "quantity" when referring to people. I think "number of women/men" might work better.

Regarding politics, for example, there are more malen politicians than womenfemale.

"male" is an adjective describing politicians, while "men" is a noun.

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Thus it is necessary tofor women to continue fighting for equality.