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alexwong2164

March 2, 2021

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Work Less, Play More

Between my day shift and night shift has 3 off days.

Last few months I will also working for a part time job in that 3 off days.

Because no places you can go.

But now most places are open again.

For example, I can go to library read books, go to sport hall play badminton with my friends.

Also, I can have dinner with another 3 friends in restaurants.

So, next few days I will not working for that part time job.

Just hang out and have fun with my friends.

Eat hard, Play Hard and Not work hard.

Corrections

Work Less, Play More

Between my day shift and night shifts, I hasve 3 off days.

No reason to have shift twice. You are talking about yourself, so you use "I have". You always have the pronoun in English

LFor the last few months, I will alsohave been working for a part time job during thatose 3 off days.

Need "for the". "Have been working" means you have been doing it since a certain point and are still doing it. Will be doing is the future. You are referring to multiple days, so use those instead of that.

Because no places yYou can't go. anywhere.

Don't end a sentence with a verb. Also, it is better to use "not go anywhere" instead of no places, because of stylistic reasons.

But now, most places are open again.

Comma after "but now"

For example, I can go to the library to read books, or go to the sport hall to play badminton with my friends.

Add "to" in between places and what you are doing there. Get rid of comma and add "or" because you are only talking about two things. Also, if you are referring to a place, use "the" for a specific library or sport hall, or "a" for any.

Also, I can have dinner with another 3 friends in restaurants.

No reason to have "another"

So, for the next few days, I will not working for that part time job.

add "for the" for passing time. Comma after next few days because it is a lead in into the main clause.

JI will just hang out and have fun with my friends.

No verb or personal pronoun.

Eat hard, Pplay Hhard and N, but do not work hard.

Use "but" instead of and because they are disagreeing.

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Because no places you can go.


Because no places yYou can't go. anywhere.

Don't end a sentence with a verb. Also, it is better to use "not go anywhere" instead of no places, because of stylistic reasons.

But now most places are open again.


But now, most places are open again.

Comma after "but now"

Work Less, Play More


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Between my day shift and night shift has 3 off days.


Between my day shift and night shifts, I hasve 3 off days.

No reason to have shift twice. You are talking about yourself, so you use "I have". You always have the pronoun in English

Last few months I will also working for a part time job in that 3 off days.


LFor the last few months, I will alsohave been working for a part time job during thatose 3 off days.

Need "for the". "Have been working" means you have been doing it since a certain point and are still doing it. Will be doing is the future. You are referring to multiple days, so use those instead of that.

For example, I can go to library read books, go to sport hall play badminton with my friends.


For example, I can go to the library to read books, or go to the sport hall to play badminton with my friends.

Add "to" in between places and what you are doing there. Get rid of comma and add "or" because you are only talking about two things. Also, if you are referring to a place, use "the" for a specific library or sport hall, or "a" for any.

Also, I can have dinner with another 3 friends in restaurants.


Also, I can have dinner with another 3 friends in restaurants.

No reason to have "another"

So, next few days I will not working for that part time job.


So, for the next few days, I will not working for that part time job.

add "for the" for passing time. Comma after next few days because it is a lead in into the main clause.

Just hang out and have fun with my friends.


JI will just hang out and have fun with my friends.

No verb or personal pronoun.

Eat hard, Play Hard and Not work hard.


Eat hard, Pplay Hhard and N, but do not work hard.

Use "but" instead of and because they are disagreeing.

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