In recent years, the number of people who want to followenter the teaching profession, especially in secondary schools, has decreased.

Young people often refuse to gain a teachering qualification due to several factors.

In this essay, I will discuss the main drawbacks preventing people from working as a teacher, and find solutions to those problems.

The government as the education system’sors' employer should increase teachers’ salaries.

This includes preparing and, teaching in classes and, checking homework, as well as some other responsibilities such as, for example, school events, after class lessons and so on.

For this problem, I suppose that the schools should have more assistants who will help teachers deal with minor responsibilities like checking homework and organizing events.

"I think" or "I suppose" isn't needed in an essay.

Another main problem is the stress of working with troubled students.

Keeping in mRememberindg their own school years, young people often have the fearare afraid of bad behavior in classes, which prevents them from even to starting working as a teacher.

This problem can be solved withby making the class groups smaller and addressing to children’s parents to instill respect and gratefulnessitude for teachers.

The enormous amount of duties and the stressful atmosphere in classes, makes the teachering professions not that desirable for young people.

However, I believe that the government solutions such as the increase ofing the education budget, as well as allowing teachers to have assistants and creating a respectful environment in classes will help to make the teaching a more attractive profession.

The government as the education system’s employerAs educators' employer, the government should increase teachers’ salaries.

I think it sounds more natural to put the dependent clause at the beginning, rather than in the middle.

Why Don't People Don't Want to Become Teachers?

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"Refusing" to get a qualification would make more sense if someone were asking them to do it and they declined. I think you mean that, in general, they opt not to on their own.

In this essay, I will discuss the main drawbacks preventing people from work as abecoming teacher,s and findpropose solutions to those problems.

Having the same number of working hours, orTeachers work the same hours as doctors, managers, bank workers, and so on, sometimes even more, teachers. But they earn considerably less than doctors, managers, bank workers and so on.

The government should increase the education system’s employer should increase teachers’ salariessalaries for the teachers it employs to make up this difference.

Presumably you have private teachers employed outside the government, too, but (in most places) it will have less control over what they are paid. Is can, however, choose to pay its own employees more.

The next problem, which has already been mentioned, is the great is the immense amount of work for schoolthat teachers face.

This includes preparing and teaching in classes and, checking homework, as well as somend other responsibilities such as, for example,like school events, and after -class lessons and so on.

In many cases, this amount of work is overwhelming for teachers.

For this problem, I suppropose that the schools should have more assistants who will help teachers deal with minor responsibilities like checking homework and organizing events.

Another main problem is the stress of working with troublechallenging students.

At the other editors noted, "troubled" would be better here. But a "troubled" student is usually one who has personal problems. There may be other things that make a student take more of the teacher's energy, so for me the more general "challenging students" feels better.

Keeping in mindYoung people often remember their own school years, young people often have the and fear of bad behavior in classes, which prevents them from even to startwanting to working as a teacher.

This problem canould be solved with making the class groups smaller and addressencouraging to children’s parents to instill respect and gratefulness for teachers in their children.

When making a suggestion for an improvement, "we could do this" is usually better than "we can do this". "We can do this" feels more like you are talking about being able to do something, rather than proposing it as an action.

The enormous amount of duties, and the stressful atmosphere in the classesrom, makes the teachering professions not that undesirable for many young people.

However, I believe that the government solutions such as the increase of education budget, as well as allowing teachers have assistants, and creating a respectful environment in classerooms will help to make the teaching profession more attractive profession.

Why Don't People Don't Want tTo Become Teachers?

In recent years, the number of people who want to follow the teaching professionenter the profession of teaching, especially in secondary schools, has decreased.

I think follow isn't exactly the verb you would use, but there's a bunch of different ones that would fit (enter, train to become etc) so I just picked one.

Young people often refuse to gain a teacher qualificationdecline to pursue teacher training due to several factors.

I used 'decline to pursue' even though it's a bit fancy because it seems to fit the tone of your piece. Refuse is better suited if it is something being offered to them, rather than a choice they are making.

In this essay, I will discuss the main drawbacks preventing people fromreasons why people chose not to work as a teacher, and find solutions to those problems.

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<Than them> is optional. Good ideas.

The government a, which funds the education system’s employer should increase teachers’ salaries.

This includes preparing and teaching in classes and checking homework, as well as some other responsibilities such as, for example, school events, after class lessons and so on.

This is well written but minor things: the some is unnecessary, and 'such as' and 'for example' together are also redundant. You could use either, but I think such as sounds nicer here.

For this problem, I supposethink that the schools should have more assistants who will help teachers deal with minor responsibilities like checking homework and organizing events.

When you say 'suppose' it makes it sound like this could solve the problem, or it might not. Using a simpler word like 'think' or 'feel' makes your suggestion seem like a real solution!

Another mainjor problem is the stress of working with troubled students.

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