May 9, 2023
Why I choose YYY University
Influenced by the global information age, I have had a strong interest in information technology since I was a child. During my undergraduate studies, I mainly studied how to use computer technology to develop an efficient organization and management strategy for business. However, during this time, I gradually realized my shortcomings in computer theory and software applications, so I chose to pursue a master's degree in computer software and theory to strengthen my knowledge and understanding of basic computer theory. Near the end of my master's degree, I saw and felt that the development of various fields, especially manufacturing and industry, could not be separated from computers, which greatly inspired me to apply my computer knowledge to these fields. Therefore, I entered XXX University in August 2020 to study for a PhD in intelligent manufacturing and robotics, but 9 months later, my research stalled due to the departure of my senior supervisor, which forced me to start thinking about how I should continue my research path. Because I had always hoped that I could apply my computer knowledge to real-world industry and manufacturing, so after much deliberation, I took the initiative to drop out of XXX University in June 2021, and then I started looking for other suitable PhD positions around the world.
After leaving XXX University, I started looking for a new PhD position. After struggling for a month, I found a program of YYY University. The advanced and international environment of its doctoral program attracted me. First, it can provide me with enough funding to cover my tuition and basic living expenses. Second, it provides TA/RA opportunities, which not only helps me get to know people from different grades, labs, and cultural backgrounds, but in communicating and sharing with them, it allows me to understand my research in a more simplified and objective way that I cannot get elsewhere. Finally, it provides students with internship projects outside of lab, allowing me to truly transfer my skills from theory to practical application in a way that many universities cannot provide. Besides, Where yyy University is located has world-class education system and has one of the lowest crime rates in the world, which can ensure a safe study environment for overseas students.
I have received the full-time program from YYY University. The program will start on September 1, 2023 and is expected to last for four years. With the help of YYY University's advanced experimental environment and diversified partners, such as enterprises, research institutes, I will be able to fully apply the theoretical computer knowledge I have learned before to practical scenarios, such as fault diagnosis in manufacturing industry. This will both increase my ability to engage in research in the lab and allow me to gain more real-world experience, which will greatly increase my chances of returning to a university or research institute in my home country.
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Besides, Where yyy University is locatedYYY University has world-class education system and has one of the lowest crime rates in the world, which can ensure a safe study environment for overseas students.
With the help of YYY University's advanced experimental environment and diversified partners, such as enterprises, and research institutes, I will be able to fully apply the theoretical computer knowledge I have learned before to practical scenarios, such as fault diagnosis in the manufacturing industry.
This will both increase my abilityallow me to engage in research in the lab and allow me to gain more real-world experience, which will greatly increase my chances of returning to a university or research institute in my home country.
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Why I choose YYY University
Influenced by the global information age, I have had a strong interest in information technology since I was a child.
During my undergraduate studies, I mainly studied how to use computer technology to develop an efficient organization and management strategy for business.
However, during this time, I gradually realized my shortcomings in computer theory and software applications, so I chose to pursue a master's degree in computer software and theory to strengthen my knowledge and understanding of basic computer theory.
Near the end of my master's degree, I saw and felt that the development of various fields, especially manufacturing and industry, could not be separated from computers, which greatly inspired me to apply my computer knowledge to these fields.
Therefore, I entered XXX University in August 2020 to study for a PhD in intelligent manufacturing and robotics, but 9 months later, my research stalled due to the departure of my senior supervisor, which forced me to start thinking about how I should continue my research path.
Because I had always hoped that I could apply my computer knowledge to real-world industry and manufacturing, so after much deliberation, I took the initiative to drop out of XXX University in June 2021, and then I started looking for other suitable PhD positions around the world.
After leaving XXX University, I started looking for a new PhD position.
After struggling for a month, I found a program of YYY University.
The advanced and international environment of its doctoral program attracted me.
First, it can provide me with enough funding to cover my tuition and basic living expenses.
Second, it provides TA/RA opportunities, which not only helps me get to know people from different grades, labs, and cultural backgrounds, but in communicating and sharing with them, it allows me to understand my research in a more simplified and objective way that I cannot get elsewhere.
Finally, it provides students with internship projects outside of lab, allowing me to truly transfer my skills from theory to practical application in a way that many universities cannot provide.
Besides, Where yyy University is located has world-class education system and has one of the lowest crime rates in the world, which can ensure a safe study environment for overseas students.
I have received the full-time program from YYY University.
The program will start on September 1, 2023 and is expected to last for four years.
With the help of YYY University's advanced experimental environment and diversified partners, such as enterprises, research institutes, I will be able to fully apply the theoretical computer knowledge I have learned before to practical scenarios, such as fault diagnosis in manufacturing industry.
This will both increase my ability to engage in research in the lab and allow me to gain more real-world experience, which will greatly increase my chances of returning to a university or research institute in my home country.
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During my undergraduate studies, I mainly studied how to use computer technology to develop an efficient organization and management strategy for business. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, during this time, I gradually realized my shortcomings in computer theory and software applications, so I chose to pursue a master's degree in computer software and theory to strengthen my knowledge and understanding of basic computer theory. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Near the end of my master's degree, I saw and felt that the development of various fields, especially manufacturing and industry, could not be separated from computers, which greatly inspired me to apply my computer knowledge to these fields. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After struggling for a month, I found a program of YYY University. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The advanced and international environment of its doctoral program attracted me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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First, it can provide me with enough funding to cover my tuition and basic living expenses. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I have received the full-time program from YYY University. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The program will start on September 1, 2023 and is expected to last for four years. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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With the help of YYY University's advanced experimental environment and diversified partners, such as enterprises, research institutes, I will be able to fully apply the theoretical computer knowledge I have learned before to practical scenarios, such as fault diagnosis in manufacturing industry. This sentence has been marked as perfect! With the help of YYY University's advanced experimental environment and diversified partners |
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