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liya_allien

Feb. 16, 2023

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Why Art loses its Value

Art has been considered an essential part of the world for many centuries. However, in modern culture, there are more and more people who turn their focus to technology and business, while the popularity of art is gradually decreasing. From my perspective, there are some reasons for that, among which are changes in job motivation, and the deterioration of the concept of art by itself.


The development of technology has provided us with rich opportunities. Online booking of flights, ordering a takeaway, and working from home are just vivid examples of such conveniences among many others. Indeed, past generations couldn’t even think of such benefits, and now that we have them, we often take them for granted. At the same time, technology on part has changed our values, transforming them in a way that seems irreversible. Not thinking about their personal preferences anymore, many people choose IT professions simply because they could guarantee them a good job position today. Now that people has the luxury to make life choices, they more often choose something because it’s advantageous for their future in financial way. People have forgotten how to choose because they just like something.


Instead, today the process of choosing is becoming similar to a business project. That's true that entrepreneurs always have been thinking in terms of profit and common sense rather than a vocation. They’re certainly not people guided by romantic ideas about life calling or personal interests. Though in the past, the business sector made up only a part of society, today any person is forced to be an entrepreneur in any way. People slowly but surely have been getting used to the idea that money is equal to success, which, in turn, equals happiness. In fact, the belief that money equals happiness is no more than a generalization, though people acquire this concept without doubts and hesitations.


The business and technology sectors give people some guarantees—to find a well-paid job, have a carefree old age, the list goes on. Indeed, guarantees are a rare thing in the modern messy world, and that alone might be a sensible reason why people focus their efforts on business or IT. At the same time, it’s difficult today to achieve success in the art world. Consider this example: one modern artist who, at first glance, didn’t create anything specific or outstanding, still earns small fortunes year by year. Another modern artist, finishing the art university and devoting all his life to art, still couldn’t make ends meets.


What I mean by that is that today there’s no strict border between the concepts of real and fake art anymore. Curators couldn't tell with certainty whether one artist will be successful while another won’t. With a lack of objective parameters, creating art is becoming a lottery, where some players win and some won’t. If you ask a random person on the street what is a real art, you’ll probably hear “Mona Lisa”, or, if a person is familiar with modern art, “Banksy”. People don’t know what they should call “art” anymore.


It’s also not a coincidence that there’s no board between real and commercial art anymore; in essense, this board have been destroyed by commercialization of art. Sure enough, there’ve always been people interested in getting profit from art, but today the profitability of any art project has become a necessity, not a choice. Art curators don’t want anymore to contribute to experimental artists or unusual concepts that won’t bring them financial results. That's why it’s difficult to become a well-known artist today. Since the concepts of art and money have been mixed and meshed, neither ordinary people nor artists themselves know what is should be considered art today.


What can we do to encourage more people to take interest in the art? The truth is, we have to admit that the popularity of art has been destroyed by the overfocused attention to the concepts of financial profit and practical choices. People know why they should value money and career, but they've forgotten why they should value freedom and art. By acknowledging the power of art, we’ll learn to appreciate its influence on society and comprehend the full potential of artists’ professions and crafts. For this to happen, we have to learn to give art as much attention as we’ve been giving to business and technology for the last decades. The only way to preserve art and make it an essential part of the world is to see it as an astonishing tool for expanding and refining our minds, not just as a hobby for weekends. We have to make art our priority, not a by-product of life.


Art has been considered an essential part of the world for many centuries. However, in modern culture, there are more and more people who turn their focus to technology and business, while the popularity of art is gradually decreasing. From my perspective, there are some reasons for that, among which are changes in job motivation, and the deterioration of the concept of art itself.

The development of technology has provided us with rich opportunities. Online booking of flights, ordering a takeaway, and working from home are just vivid examples of such conveniences among many others. Indeed, past generations couldn’t even think of such benefits, and now that we have them, we often take them for granted. At the same time, technology, in part, has changed our values, transforming them in a way that seems irreversible. Not thinking about their personal preferences anymore, many people choose IT professions simply because they could be guaranteed a good job today. Now that people have the luxury to make life choices, they more often choose something because it’s advantageous for their financial future. People have forgotten how to choose because they just like something.

Instead, today the process of choosing is becoming similar to a business project. It's true that entrepreneurs always have been thinking in terms of profit and common sense rather than a vocation. They’re certainly not people guided by romantic ideas about life calling or personal interests. Though in the past, the business sector made up only a part of society, today any person is forced to be an entrepreneur in any way. People slowly but surely have been getting used to the idea that money is equal to success, which, in turn, equals happiness. In fact, the belief that money equals happiness is no more than a generalization, though people acquire this concept without doubts and hesitations.

The business and technology sectors give people some guarantees—to find a well-paid job, have a carefree old age, the list goes on. Indeed, guarantees are a rare thing in the modern messy world, and that alone might be a sensible reason why people focus their efforts on business or IT. At the same time, it’s difficult today to achieve success in the art world. Consider this example: one modern artist who didn’t create anything outstanding but have a good artist agent, earns small fortunes year after year. Another artist, finishing his studies of art at university and devoting all his life to art, still can't make ends meets because he doesn't have an agent or support from a wealthy patron.

What I mean by that, is that today there’s no strict boundary between the concepts of real and fake art anymore. Curators can't tell with certainty whether one artist will be successful while another won’t. With a lack of objective parameters, creating art is becoming a lottery, where some players win and some don’t. If you ask a random person on the street what is a real art, you’ll probably hear “Mona Lisa”, or, if a person is familiar with modern art, “Banksy”. People don’t know what they should call “art” anymore.

It’s also not a coincidence that there’s no boundary between real and commercial art anymore; in essence, this boundary has been destroyed by the commercialization of art. Sure enough, there’ve always been people interested in getting profit from art, but today the profitability of any art project has become a necessity, not a choice. Art curators don’t want to contribute to experimental artists anymore or unusual concepts that won’t bring them financial results. That's why it’s difficult to become a well-known artist today. Since the concepts of art and money have been mixed and meshed, neither ordinary people nor artists themselves know what should be considered art today.

What can we do to encourage more people to take an interest in art? The truth is, we have to admit that the popularity of art has been destroyed by the over focused attention on the concepts of financial profit and practical choices. People know why they should value money and career, but they've forgotten why they should value freedom and art. By acknowledging the power of art, we’ll learn to appreciate its influence on society and comprehend the full potential of artists’ professions and crafts. For this to happen, we have to learn to give art as much attention as we’ve been giving to business and technology for the last decades. The only way to preserve art and make it an essential part of the world is to see it as an astonishing tool for expanding and refining our minds, not just as a hobby for weekends. We have to make art our priority, not a by-product of life.

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Why Art loses its Value

Art has been considered an essential part of the world for many centuries.

However, in modern culture, there are more and more people who turn their focus to technology and business, while the popularity of art is gradually decreasing.

From my perspective, there are some reasons for that, among which are changes in job motivation, and the deterioration of the concept of art by itself.

The development of technology has provided us with rich opportunities.

Online booking of flights, ordering a takeaway, and working from home are just vivid examples of such conveniences, among many others.

Indeed, past generations couldn’t even think of such benefits, and now that we have them, we often take them for granted.

At the same time, technology o, in part, has changed our values, transforming them in a way that seems irreversible.

Not thinking about their personal preferences anymore, many people choose IT professions simply because they could be guarantee themd a good job position today.

What you wrote was not a mistake. Since your English level is so high, I just wanted to point out that the repeated use of "they" and then "them" is very natural in spoken English, but is a bit confusing in written English.

Now that people hasve the luxury to make life choices, they more often choose something because it’s advantageous for their future in financial wayfuture.

People have forgotten how to choose because they just like something.

Instead, today the process of choosing is becoming similar to a business project.

ThaIt's true that entrepreneurs always have been thinking in terms of profit and common sense rather than a vocation.

They’re certainly not people guided by romantic ideas about life calling or personal interests.

Though in the past, the business sector made up only a part of society, today any person is forced to be an entrepreneur in any way.

People slowly but surely have been getting used to the idea that money is equal to success, which, in turn, equals happiness.

In fact, the belief that money equals happiness is no more than a generalization, though people acquire this concept without doubts and hesitations.

The business and technology sectors give people some guarantees—to find a well-paid job, have a carefree old age, the list goes on.

Indeed, guarantees are a rare thing in the modern messy world, and that alone might be a sensible reason why people focus their efforts on business or IT.

At the same time, it’s difficult today to achieve success in the art world.

Consider this example: one modern artist who, at first glance, didn’t create anything specific or outstanding, still earns a small fortunes year byafter year.

"a small fortune" is more natural, not the plural "fortunes".

Another modern artist, finishing the art university and devoting all his life to art, still couldan’t make ends meets.

Since the tense of this sentence and the previous in a present, even a hypnotical present, can't should also be in the present.
I don't think "art university" is actually a thing. It would be better to say something like "after studying art in university".

What I mean by that, is that today there’s no strict borderdelineation / boundary between the concepts of real and fake art anymore.

I understand what you mean by "border", but this is a not a typical usage of the word.

Curators couldan't tell with certainty whether one artist will be successful while another won’t.

Tense is present. This is an error that many native speakers make as well.

With a lack of objective parameters, creating art is becoming a lottery, where some players win and some wdon’t.

Not a mistake, but keeping the parallelism in English sounds better: where some players win and some lose, or where some player will win and some won't.

If you ask a random person on the street what is a real art, you’ll probably hear “Mona Lisa”, or, if a person is familiar with modern art, “Banksy”.

People don’t know what they should call “art” anymore.

It’s also not a coincidence that there’s no boundardy between real and commercial art anymore; in essensce, this boundardy haves been destroyed by the commercialization of art.

"Board" doesn't work here. I think you mean boundary.

Sure enough, there’ve always been people interested in getting profit from art, but today the profitability of any art project has become a necessity, not a choice.

Art curators don’t want anymore to contribute to experimental artists anymore or unusual concepts that won’t bring them financial results.

That's why it’s difficult to become a well-known artist today.

Since the concepts of art and money have been mixed and meshed, neither ordinary people nor artists themselves know what is should be considered art today.

What can we do to encourage more people to take an interest in the art?

The truth is, we have to admit that the popularity of art has been destroyed by the over focused attention ton the concepts of financial profit and practical choices.

People know why they should value money and career, but they've forgotten why they should value freedom and art.

By acknowledging the power of art, we’ll learn to appreciate its influence on society and comprehend the full potential of artists’ professions and crafts.

For this to happen, we have to learn to give art as much attention as we’ve been giving to business and technology for the last decades.

The only way to preserve art and make it an essential part of the world is to see it as an astonishing tool for expanding and refining our minds, not just as a hobby for weekends.

We have to make art our priority, not a by-product of life.

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Your written English level is so high that I feel kind of weird making corrections. If it wasn't on this site, I would think this was a persuasive essay written by a native speaker, who just happened to make a few typos (happens to all of us). I hope you found my suggestions helpful. Congratulation on reaching such a high level in a foreign language, which is a feat few people actually accomplish.

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Feb. 17, 2023

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Thank you so much for your corrections and feedback, I appreciate that 👏 Learning a language is a difficult (but pleasurable) goal, so I'm happy to know that my efforts pay off.

Why Art loses its Value


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Art has been considered an essential part of the world for many centuries.


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However, in modern culture, there are more and more people who turn their focus to technology and business, while the popularity of art is gradually decreasing.


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From my perspective, there are some reasons for that, among which are changes in job motivation, and the deterioration of the concept of art by itself.


From my perspective, there are some reasons for that, among which are changes in job motivation, and the deterioration of the concept of art by itself.

The development of technology has provided us with rich opportunities.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Online booking of flights, ordering a takeaway, and working from home are just vivid examples of such conveniences among many others.


Online booking of flights, ordering a takeaway, and working from home are just vivid examples of such conveniences, among many others.

Indeed, past generations couldn’t even think of such benefits, and now that we have them, we often take them for granted.


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At the same time, technology on part has changed our values, transforming them in a way that seems irreversible.


At the same time, technology o, in part, has changed our values, transforming them in a way that seems irreversible.

Not thinking about their personal preferences anymore, many people choose IT professions simply because they could guarantee them a good job position today.


Not thinking about their personal preferences anymore, many people choose IT professions simply because they could be guarantee themd a good job position today.

What you wrote was not a mistake. Since your English level is so high, I just wanted to point out that the repeated use of "they" and then "them" is very natural in spoken English, but is a bit confusing in written English.

Now that people has the luxury to make life choices, they more often choose something because it’s advantageous for their future in financial way.


Now that people hasve the luxury to make life choices, they more often choose something because it’s advantageous for their future in financial wayfuture.

People have forgotten how to choose because they just like something.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Instead, today the process of choosing is becoming similar to a business project.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

That's true that entrepreneurs always have been thinking in terms of profit and common sense rather than a vocation.


ThaIt's true that entrepreneurs always have been thinking in terms of profit and common sense rather than a vocation.

They’re certainly not people guided by romantic ideas about life calling or personal interests.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Though in the past, the business sector made up only a part of society, today any person is forced to be an entrepreneur in any way.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

People slowly but surely have been getting used to the idea that money is equal to success, which, in turn, equals happiness.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In fact, the belief that money equals happiness is no more than a generalization, though people acquire this concept without doubts and hesitations.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The business and technology sectors give people some guarantees—to find a well-paid job, have a carefree old age, the list goes on.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Indeed, guarantees are a rare thing in the modern messy world, and that alone might be a sensible reason why people focus their efforts on business or IT.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

At the same time, it’s difficult today to achieve success in the art world.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Consider this example: one modern artist who, at first glance, didn’t create anything specific or outstanding, still earns small fortunes year by year.


Consider this example: one modern artist who, at first glance, didn’t create anything specific or outstanding, still earns a small fortunes year byafter year.

"a small fortune" is more natural, not the plural "fortunes".

Another modern artist, finishing the art university and devoting all his life to art, still couldn’t make ends meets.


Another modern artist, finishing the art university and devoting all his life to art, still couldan’t make ends meets.

Since the tense of this sentence and the previous in a present, even a hypnotical present, can't should also be in the present. I don't think "art university" is actually a thing. It would be better to say something like "after studying art in university".

What I mean by that is that today there’s no strict border between the concepts of real and fake art anymore.


What I mean by that, is that today there’s no strict borderdelineation / boundary between the concepts of real and fake art anymore.

I understand what you mean by "border", but this is a not a typical usage of the word.

Curators couldn't tell with certainty whether one artist will be successful while another won’t.


Curators couldan't tell with certainty whether one artist will be successful while another won’t.

Tense is present. This is an error that many native speakers make as well.

With a lack of objective parameters, creating art is becoming a lottery, where some players win and some won’t.


With a lack of objective parameters, creating art is becoming a lottery, where some players win and some wdon’t.

Not a mistake, but keeping the parallelism in English sounds better: where some players win and some lose, or where some player will win and some won't.

If you ask a random person on the street what is a real art, you’ll probably hear “Mona Lisa”, or, if a person is familiar with modern art, “Banksy”.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

People don’t know what they should call “art” anymore.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It’s also not a coincidence that there’s no board between real and commercial art anymore; in essense, this board have been destroyed by commercialization of art.


It’s also not a coincidence that there’s no boundardy between real and commercial art anymore; in essensce, this boundardy haves been destroyed by the commercialization of art.

"Board" doesn't work here. I think you mean boundary.

Sure enough, there’ve always been people interested in getting profit from art, but today the profitability of any art project has become a necessity, not a choice.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Art curators don’t want anymore to contribute to experimental artists or unusual concepts that won’t bring them financial results.


Art curators don’t want anymore to contribute to experimental artists anymore or unusual concepts that won’t bring them financial results.

That's why it’s difficult to become a well-known artist today.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Since the concepts of art and money have been mixed and meshed, neither ordinary people nor artists themselves know what is should be considered art today.


Since the concepts of art and money have been mixed and meshed, neither ordinary people nor artists themselves know what is should be considered art today.

What can we do to encourage more people to take interest in the art?


What can we do to encourage more people to take an interest in the art?

The truth is, we have to admit that the popularity of art has been destroyed by the overfocused attention to the concepts of financial profit and practical choices.


The truth is, we have to admit that the popularity of art has been destroyed by the over focused attention ton the concepts of financial profit and practical choices.

People know why they should value money and career, but they've forgotten why they should value freedom and art.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

By acknowledging the power of art, we’ll learn to appreciate its influence on society and comprehend the full potential of artists’ professions and crafts.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

For this to happen, we have to learn to give art as much attention as we’ve been giving to business and technology for the last decades.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The only way to preserve art and make it an essential part of the world is to see it as an astonishing tool for expanding and refining our minds, not just as a hobby for weekends.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

We have to make art our priority, not a by-product of life.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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