Dec. 30, 2020
Who wants to live forever?
I wouldn't like to be imortal. There's no point in living forever, because everything was made to come to an end. If I were imortal I would feel so bored, life would be like a prison to me. Imagine waking up everyday knowing you're never going to die, even if I had a good life I would get bored in some point. I would reach a point in life, after achieving a lot of things, where I would feel with no purpose. I would be like "What is left for me to do? What I'm going to do next? I have the eternity, but no more goals".
Life was meant to be this way. Ephemeral. We aren't made to last forever, because as We know we're going to die someday We take all effort to do the best in our short lives.
I wouldn't like to be immortal.
There's no point in living forever, because everything wais made to come to an end.
Sounds better keeping both in present. Could also say "everything has been made to come to an end."
If I were immortal I would feel so bored, l. Life would be like a prison to me.
2 clauses. You could also use an "and" or ";" instead of a period.
Imagine waking up everyday knowing you're never going to die, e. Even if I had a good life I would get bored in some point.
I would get into a point in life, after achieving a lot of things, thatwhere I would feel with no purpose.
the point is a kind of "place" so where sounds more natural.
I would be like, "What is left for me to do?¶
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I would ask myself, "What is left for me to do?
"be like" is dialect, if your audience is more formal use the second choice.
What I'mam I going to do next?
I have the eternity, but no more goals"."
We weren't made to last forever, because, as Wwe know, we're going to die someday. We tmake allevery effort to do the best in this short life.
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Mostly needed some fixing in the writing. If you just spoke it, it would be pretty clear. Though "What I'm going to do next?" sounds like a caveman...so definitely unmemorize that! :)
Dec. 30, 2020
I would be like, "What is left for me to do?¶
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I would ask myself, "What is left for me to do?
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Dec. 31, 2020
Hey
Thank you for taking your time to correct my writing and leave an useful feedback. My goal in learning English is understand and being understood by people, so I'm happy to know it would be clear if I spoke it and thanks for the little warning about that caveman sentence :D
I wouldn't likewant to be immortal.
Although using the verb "like" is grammatically correct, "want" is more natural.
There's no point in living forever, because everything wais made to come to an end.
If I were immortal, I would feel so bored, and life would be like a prison to me.
Imagine waking up everyday knowing you're never going to die, e! Even if I hadwas having a good life, I would still get bored inat some point.
I would reach a point in life, after achieving a lot of things, where I would feel withat I had no purpose.
I would be likeask myself "What is left for me to do?
What I'mam I going to do next?
I have thmay have eternity, but with no more goals".
Life wais meant to be this way.
Ephemeral.
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Dec. 30, 2020
I would be likeask myself "What is left for me to do?
myself ,
Dec. 30, 2020
perfect
Dec. 31, 2020
If I were immortal, I would feel so bored, and life would be like a prison to me.
I think "If I were immortal, I would feel so bored life would be like a prison to me" is also fine. The 'and' feels a bit awkward.
Dec. 31, 2020
Thank you!
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Who wants to live forever? |
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I wouldn't like to be imortal. I wouldn't Although using the verb "like" is grammatically correct, "want" is more natural. I wouldn't like to be immortal. |
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There's no point in living forever, because everything was made to come to an end. There's no point in living forever, because everything There's no point in living forever, because everything Sounds better keeping both in present. Could also say "everything has been made to come to an end." |
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If I were imortal I would feel so bored, life would be like a prison to me. If I were immortal, I would feel so bored If I were immortal I would feel so bored 2 clauses. You could also use an "and" or ";" instead of a period. |
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Imagine waking up everyday knowing you're never going to die, even if I had a good life I would get bored in some point. Imagine waking up everyday knowing you're never going to die Imagine waking up everyday knowing you're never going to die |
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I would get in a point in life, after achieving a lot of things, that I would feel with no purpose. I would get the point is a kind of "place" so where sounds more natural. |
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I would be like "What is left for me to do? I would I would be like, "What is left for me to do?¶ "be like" is dialect, if your audience is more formal use the second choice. |
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What I'm going to do next? What What |
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I have the eternity, but no more goals". I I have |
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Life was meant to be this way. Life |
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Ephemeral. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Weren't made to last forever, because as We know we're going to die someday We take all effort to do the best in this short life. We We weren't made to last forever |
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I would reach a point in life, after achieving a lot of things, that I would feel with no purpose. |
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I would reach a point in life, after achieving a lot of things, where I would feel with no purpose. I would reach a point in life, after achieving a lot of things, where I would feel |
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We aren't made to last forever, because as We know we're going to die someday We take all effort to do the best in this short life. |
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We aren't made to last forever, because as We know we're going to die someday We take all effort to do the best in our short lives. |
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