Oct. 19, 2023
Who Bombed the Hospital
The day before yesterday. A hospital in Gaza was bombed and resulted in over 500 people died. This disaster also caused thousands of people in many countries, especially in Arab areas to demonstrate on the street, accusing the atrocity of the Israeli army.
At the first stage after the event, the president of the USA, when he boarded the plane to Israel, also showed his concern about the case and asked for more explanation from the Israeli side.
However, a few hours later, Israel released some footage testifying that the strike to the hospital was indeed from another terrorist team, implying they were from Hamas.
Who Bombed the Hospital?
The day before yesterday.,
Not a complete sentence, so it should connect with the next sentence
Aa hospital in Gaza was bombed and resulted in over 500 people dikilled.
This disaster also caused thousands of people in many countries, especially in Arab areas, to demonstrate on the streets, accuscondemning the atrocity of the Israeli army.
At the first stageImmediately after the evincident, the president of the USA, when hile boardeding the plane to Israel, also showed hisexpressed concern about the case and asked for morean explanation from the Israeli side.
However, a few hours later, Israel released some footage testifyshowing that the strike to the hospital was indeed from another terrorist teamgroup, implying they were from Hamas.
Testifying is done in court
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Well written, very understandable, just some suggestions to make it sound more natural
Who Bombed the Hospital?
The day before yesterday, a hospital in Gaza was bombed and resulted in over 500 deaths.
A hospital in Gaza was bombed and resulted in over 500 people died.
This disaster also causprompted thousands of people in manydifferent countries, especialparticularly in Arab areas to demonstrate ongions, to take to the street,s and accusinge the atrocity of the Israeli armIsraeli army of committing the atrocity.
AtIn the first stage afterinitial stage following the event, the pPresident of the USA, when henited States, upon boardeding the plane to Israel, also showexpressed his concern about the case and asked for more explansituation and requested further clarification from the Israeli side.
However, a few hours later, Israel released some footage testifying thathat confirmed the strike ton the hospital was indeed fromcarried out by another terrorist teamgroup, implying they terrorists were from Hamas.
"implying they were from Hamas..." = here, "they" is rather vague. I think you are referring to the terrorists being from Hamas?
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Great use of reported speech
Oct. 19, 2023
Thank you for your corrections!
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The day before yesterday. The day before yesterday, a hospital in Gaza was bombed and resulted in over 500 deaths. The day before yesterday Not a complete sentence, so it should connect with the next sentence |
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A hospital in Gaza was bombed and resulted in over 500 people died.
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This disaster also caused thousands of people in many countries, especially in Arab areas to demonstrate on the street, accusing the atrocity of the Israeli army. This disaster This disaster also caused thousands of people in many countries, especially in Arab areas, to demonstrate on the streets, |
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At the first stage after the event, the president of the USA, when he boarded the plane to Israel, also showed his concern about the case and asked for more explanation from the Israeli side.
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However, a few hours later, Israel released some footage testifying that the strike to the hospital was indeed from another terrorist team, implying they were from Hamas. However, a few hours later, "implying they were from Hamas..." = here, "they" is rather vague. I think you are referring to the terrorists being from Hamas? However, a few hours later, Israel released some footage Testifying is done in court |
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