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simonaliu

Jan. 3, 2024

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Who are you

Who are you? I always ask myself these days.
I am a worker in a universal company who design how website works; I am a wife married with a man who loves playing computer games.
But those are only my roles in society or in family. It could not describe who I am. Only what you like and what you don’t that can draw what character you are. However, our education do not guide us to discover who you are, but to train you skills to work.
Nowadays we all have a better life and don’t need to worry about surviving, we care more about our inner lives. So I think the education mode should be changed.

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I am a worker in a universal company whoich design hows website works; I am a wife married withto a man who loves playing computer games.

You could also say "which designs the internal architecture of websites" or "which keeps websites running"

But those are only my roles in society or in family.social and familial roles.

It couldThey do not describe who are you.

You need a plural if you are referring to both social and family roles; I changed "could" to "do" because I think it reads better but the original is fine/makes sense

It couldThey do not describe who I am.

Only whatthe things you likedo and what you don’t thatdo not like can draw whatthe character you are.

Edited a bit for clarity; the only grammar mistake is the "that" shouldn't be there in "don't that can" unless you start the sentence with "It is"

However, our education does not guide us to discover who youwe are, but toit only trains your skills to work.

"does" because education is singular; "who we are" because you said "our education" not "your education"

Nowadays we all have a better liflife is better than before and we don’t need to worry about surviving, we care more about our inner lives.

"have a better life" implies you are comparing it to something else

So I think the education model should be changed.

"mode of education" is just the means of instruction (i.e. virtual, in-person, etc.); "education model" refers to the overall structure and purpose of education

I am a worker in a universal company whothat designs how websites works; I am a wife married withto a man who loves playing computer games.

Not sure what you mean by universal company.

But those are only my roles in society or inand within my family.

ItNeither could notI describe who I am.

It could not describe who are youyou are.

OnlyNoticing what you like and what you don’t that can draw whatis one of the ways to understand your character you are.

HoweverFurthermore, our education does not guide us to discoverour understanding of who youwe are, but toit does however, train your skills tofor work.

So I think the education mode should be changed.

Not sure what you meant by education mode

Who are you

Who are you?

I always ask myself these days.

I am a worker in a universal company who design hows website works; I am athe wife married withof a man who loves playing computer games.

But those are only my roles in society or in family.

It couldThey do not describe who are youyou are.

It couldThey do not describe who I am.

Only what you like and what you don’t that can draw whatdislike can describe your character you are.

Only that what you like and what you don’t that can draw what character you are.

I'm can't quite pick up what distinction you're trying to make between this and the previous sentence?

However, our education does not guide us to discover who youwe are, but tonly train you skillss us in the skills needed to work.

Nowadays, since we all have a better lifeves and don’t need to worry about surviving, we care more about our inner lives.

Who are you

Who are you?

I always ask myself this these days.

I am a worker inn employee at a universal company whoich designs how websites works; I am a wife married withto a man who loves playing computer games.

But those are only my roles in society or inand in my family.

It coulddoes not describe who are youyou are.

It coulddoes not describe who I am.

Only what you like and what you don’t that can draw what characterdetermines who you are.

However, our education does not guide us to discover who youwe are, but to train you skills to workinstead teaches skills for the workplace.

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So I think theFor this reason, I think education modestyles should be changed.

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I always ask myself these days.


I always ask myself this these days.

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I am a worker in a universal company who design how website works; I am a wife married with a man who loves playing computer games.


I am a worker inn employee at a universal company whoich designs how websites works; I am a wife married withto a man who loves playing computer games.

I am a worker in a universal company who design hows website works; I am athe wife married withof a man who loves playing computer games.

I am a worker in a universal company whothat designs how websites works; I am a wife married withto a man who loves playing computer games.

Not sure what you mean by universal company.

I am a worker in a universal company whoich design hows website works; I am a wife married withto a man who loves playing computer games.

You could also say "which designs the internal architecture of websites" or "which keeps websites running"

But those are only my roles in society or in family.


But those are only my roles in society or inand in my family.

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But those are only my roles in society or inand within my family.

But those are only my roles in society or in family.social and familial roles.

It could not describe who are you.


It coulddoes not describe who are youyou are.

It couldThey do not describe who are youyou are.

It could not describe who are youyou are.

It couldThey do not describe who are you.

You need a plural if you are referring to both social and family roles; I changed "could" to "do" because I think it reads better but the original is fine/makes sense

Only that what you like and what you don’t that can draw what character you are.


Only that what you like and what you don’t that can draw what character you are.

I'm can't quite pick up what distinction you're trying to make between this and the previous sentence?

However, our education do not guide us to discover who you are, but to train you skills to work.


However, our education does not guide us to discover who youwe are, but to train you skills to workinstead teaches skills for the workplace.

However, our education does not guide us to discover who youwe are, but tonly train you skillss us in the skills needed to work.

HoweverFurthermore, our education does not guide us to discoverour understanding of who youwe are, but toit does however, train your skills tofor work.

However, our education does not guide us to discover who youwe are, but toit only trains your skills to work.

"does" because education is singular; "who we are" because you said "our education" not "your education"

Nowadays we all have a better life and don’t need to worry about surviving, we care more about our inner lives.


Nowadays we all have a better lifeves and don’t need to worry about surviving, weleading us to care more about our inner lives.

Nowadays, since we all have a better lifeves and don’t need to worry about surviving, we care more about our inner lives.

Nowadays we all have a better liflife is better than before and we don’t need to worry about surviving, we care more about our inner lives.

"have a better life" implies you are comparing it to something else

So I think the education mode should be changed.


So I think theFor this reason, I think education modestyles should be changed.

So I think the education mode should be changed.

Not sure what you meant by education mode

So I think the education model should be changed.

"mode of education" is just the means of instruction (i.e. virtual, in-person, etc.); "education model" refers to the overall structure and purpose of education

It could not describe who I am.


It coulddoes not describe who I am.

It couldThey do not describe who I am.

ItNeither could notI describe who I am.

It couldThey do not describe who I am.

Only what you like and what you don’t that can draw what character you are.


Only what you like and what you don’t that can draw what characterdetermines who you are.

Only what you like and what you don’t that can draw whatdislike can describe your character you are.

OnlyNoticing what you like and what you don’t that can draw whatis one of the ways to understand your character you are.

Only whatthe things you likedo and what you don’t thatdo not like can draw whatthe character you are.

Edited a bit for clarity; the only grammar mistake is the "that" shouldn't be there in "don't that can" unless you start the sentence with "It is"

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