March 24, 2023
When was the last time you visited a zoo or safari park?
The last time I visited a zoo was 10 years ago. I was ten then, and by that age I had already visited a zoo three times. That time was a bit different, as my parents and I went on to an aquarium. I was very excited about it as a dolphin show was going to take place there.
That day, the weather was perfect! There were a few clouds in the sky, but it was quite sunny. I had applied sunscreen before we got there, as I had very fair skin at that time. There were a lot of children there, but I wasn't able to befriend any, since I was shy (and I still am).
I saw several kinds of fish I had never seen before. Still, I knew a few of them because of the Pixar film "Finding Nemo". I loved that movie! I had watched it so many times that I was able to remember all the character's names. In fact, I can still remember.
But back to what I was saying, I was especially interested in a class of fish: the bull shark. It was enormously big and it has a huge number of long and sharp fangs. My parents were surprised at I wasn't afraid of the shark. Instead, I was impressed by his size.
Later, we had to hurry up and finish what we were doing at the time, as the show was about to begin. Fortunately, we came on time and had a great time seeing the show. What was funny is that we got soaked by the dolphins' acrobatics.
When was the last time you visited a zoo or safari park?
The last time I visited a zoo was 10 years ago.
I was ten then, and by that age I had already visited a zoo three times.
That time was a bit different, as my parents and I went on to an aquarium.
I was very excited about it as a dolphin show was going to take place there.
That day, the weather was perfect!
There were a few clouds in the sky, but it was quite sunny.
I had applied sunscreen before we got there, as I had very fair skin at that time.
There were a lot of children there, but I wasn't able to befriend any, since I was shy (and I still am).
I saw several kinds of fish I had never seen before.
Still, I knew a few of them because of the Pixar film "Finding Nemo".
I loved that movie!
I had watched it so many times that I was able to remember all the character's names.
In fact, I can still remember.
But back to what I was saying, I was especially interested in a class of fish: the bull shark.
It wais enormously big and it has a huge number of long and sharp fangsteeth.
My parents were surprised that I wasn't afraid of the shark.
Instead, I was impressed by his size.
Later, we had to hurry up and finish what we were doing at the time, as the show was about to begin.
Fortunately, we came on time and had a great time seeing the show.
What was funny is that we got soaked by the dolphins' acrobatics.
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What a fun memory! Again, very well written!
March 26, 2023
Thanks!
When was the last time you visited a zoo or safari park?
The last time I visited a zoo was 10 years ago.
I was ten then, and by that age I had already visited athe zoo three times.
"go to the theater", "go to the doctor", "visit the zoo" etc - I believe that _normally_ you use "the" in English. :-)
That time was a bit different, as my parents and I went on to an aquarium.
I was very excited about it as a dolphin show was going to take place there.
That day, the weather was perfect!
There were a few clouds in the sky, but it was quite sunny.
I had applied sunscreen before we got there, as I had very fair skin at that time.
There were a lot of children there, but I wasn't able to befriend any, since I was shy (and I still am).
I saw several kinds of fish I had never seen before.
Still, I knew a few of them because of the Pixar film "Finding Nemo".
I loved that movie!
I had watched it so many times that I was able to remember all the character's names.
In fact, I can still remember.
But back to what I was saying, I was especially interested in a class of fish: the bull shark.
It was enormously big and it hasd a huge number of long and sharp fangs.
Solo cambié "has" a "had" por la concordancia del tiempo. :-)
My parents were surprised that I wasn't afraid of the shark.
They were surprised that/were afraid that/were sad that/were angry that ... etc. Se usa "that" en esta forma.
Instead, I was impressed by his size.
Later, we had to hurry up and finish what we were doing at the time, as the show was about to begin.
Fortunately, we came on time and had a great time seeing the show.
What was funny is that we got soaked by the dolphins' acrobatics.
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WOW súper bien escrito. Suena muy muy natural. Saludos! jz
March 24, 2023
Thank you very much! :)
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