Aug. 1, 2020
what is the difference between the generations.
In my opinion, the younger generation has many options to chose the lifestyle that they want. In their age, the young generation doesn't need to face the burden of hungry in life. On the other hand, today youths who live in wealthy and stronger countries, live with the comfort of knowing where the next meal is coming from because they have a big government to support their life. Compared with the previous generation, they have much time to spend on entertainment, such as spending time playing computer games. Concurrent, for the majority, the responsibility from family is reducing by the undermining of moralities. For the older generation, the majority had to help in the fields, gather wood, fetch water, and do all kinds of odd jobs to eke out the family budget. Cause the teenagers don't have, most of them are without the sense of responsibility for their family, doubtless. Instead, they are intelligent that know has to avoid their duty and satisfy with staying where they are. The generation is lucky living in a safe environment, learning the knowledge online, receiving the newest information from the world rapidly, and enjoying the convenience of the global market that has low prices and high-quality products. These are benefits their parents didn't have at their age.
hoping you can help me to edit the paragraph sounds more native and make sense. thank you
wWhat is the difference between the generations.?
In my opinion, the younger generation has many optionportunities to choose the lifestyle that they want.
InAt their age, the young generation doesn't need to face the burden of hungery in lifetheir lives.
On the other hand, today's youths who live in wealthyier and stronger countries, live with the comfort of knowing where the next meal is coming from because they have a big government to support their lifeves.
Compared with the previous generation, they have muchore time to spend on entertainment, such as spending time playing computer games.
Concurrently, for the majority, the responsibility from family ishas been reducinged by the undermining of moralitiesy.
"Responsibility from family" is fine, but I would possibly change it to "responsibilities of family."
Or "morals."
You need to use the passive voice with "by the undermining of morality," but "is reducing" cannot work with that. The passive voice requires the past participle.
For the older generation, the majority had to help in the fields, gather wood, fetch water, and do all kinds of odd jobs to eke out the family budget.
CBecause the teenagers don't have to do these things, most of them are doubtless without thea sense of responsibility for their family, doubtless.
"Cause" as a contraction of "because" is very informal and shouldn't be used in writing unless you are trying to write very informally.
"Have" needs an object.
Instead, they are intelligent that know has, knowing how to avoid their dutyies and satisfyied with staying where they are.
The meaning of this is unclear to me. I've reworded it to what makes the most sense to me.
Theis generation is lucky livingto live in a safe environment, learning theacquiring knowledge online, receiving the newlatest information from the world rapidly, and enjoying the convenience of the global market that has low prices and high-quality products.
We rarely "learn" knowledge.
These are benefits their parents didn't have at their age.
Aug. 1, 2020
thank your feedback. it is very helpful to me.
I have more questions.
"Instead, they are intelligent, knowing how to avoid their duties and satisfied with staying where they are."
I want to explain today's youth is smart. but the majority of the youth use their smart brain in the wrong place. Like avoiding their family duties and rapidly find the excuse for their indolence.
So could you get some suggestions on how to rewrite this sentence making it more logical?
thank you very much
Aug. 1, 2020
You could use what you've just written. I'd suggest something like:
"They do have brains, but misuse them to avoid their duties or to stay inside their comfort zone"
Aug. 2, 2020
get it. thank your reply. :)
Aug. 2, 2020
You're welcome! :) As to that specific part that you asked about, I agree with Monsieur Elephant's comments.
wWhat is the difference between the generations.?
In my opinion, the younger generation has many options to choose the lifestyle that they want.
In their age, the young generation doesn't need to face the burden of being hungry in life.
On the other hand, today's youths who live in wealthy and stronger countries, live with the comfort of knowing where the next meal is coming from because they have a big government to support their life.
Compared with the previous generation, they have muchore time to spend on entertainment, such as spending time playing computer games.
For the older generation, the majority had to help in the fields, gather wood, fetch water, and do all kinds of odd jobs to eke out the family budget.
Theis generation is lucky living in a safe environment, learning thegaining knowledge online, receiving the newest information from the world rapidly, and enjoying the convenience of the global market that has low prices and high-quality products.
These are benefits their parents didn't have at their age.
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In their age, the young generation doesn't need to face the burden of hungry in life. In their age, the young generation doesn't need to face the burden of being hungry in life.
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Concurrent, for the majority, the responsibility from family is reducing by the undermining of moralities. Concurrently, for the majority, the responsibility from family "Responsibility from family" is fine, but I would possibly change it to "responsibilities of family." Or "morals." You need to use the passive voice with "by the undermining of morality," but "is reducing" cannot work with that. The passive voice requires the past participle. |
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Cause the teenagers don't have, most of them are without the sense of responsibility for their family, doubtless.
"Cause" as a contraction of "because" is very informal and shouldn't be used in writing unless you are trying to write very informally. "Have" needs an object. |
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Instead, they are intelligent that know has to avoid their duty and satisfy with staying where they are. Instead, they are intelligent The meaning of this is unclear to me. I've reworded it to what makes the most sense to me. |
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The generation is lucky living in a safe environment, learning the knowledge online, receiving the newest information from the world rapidly, and enjoying the convenience of the global market that has low prices and high-quality products. Th Th We rarely "learn" knowledge. |
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These are benefits their parents didn't have at their age. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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