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Satsuki

May 17, 2025

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What do you want for dinner tonight?

“Hamburg steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he said something different after that,” l want to cook it.”
Then he looked up for a recipe suitable for him, went out for shopping and got what we didn’t have in the fridge. Not just doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understood the process to the end. He struggled a little when he had to mince the onions by hocho (a Japanese knife) but managed it. Though I oversaw and helped him when necessary, the steak he cooked on his own was just perfect.
He looked as if it was nothing, but I was very impressed inside.


「晩ごはん何食べたい?」「ハンバーグ!」ここまではいつもの会話であったが、違ったのはその次だった。「俺、作ってみたい」と息子が言ったのだ。そこからレシピを調べて家にない材料を買いに行くことを始め、お膳立てされた材料を混ぜる「やった感」だけではなくて、ちゃんと調味料を計測し、一連の流れを予習した。難関は玉ねぎのみじん切りだったが、どうにかやり遂げた。私の監督と手助けはあったもののほとんど息子の自力で完成したハンバーグはほぼ完璧で、息子は当たり前のような顔をしていたが、私は内心で舌を巻いていた。

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“Hamburg steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he also said something different after that,” l want to cook it.”
Then he looked up for a recipe suitable for him, went out for shopping and got what we didn’t have in the fridge.

Not just doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understoodanding the process to thebeginning to end.

"understanding" to match the tense of "measuring" is more natural here.

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What do you want for dinner tonight?

“Hamburg steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he said something different after that,” l “I want to cook it.” ¶
Then he looked up for a recipe suitable for him, went out for shopping, and got what we didn’t have in the fridge.

The quotation marks around "I want to cook it" should start with a comma outside and open the quote correctly.
"l" should be capital "I".
The comma after "that" should be outside the quotation marks, not inside.
「I want to cook it」の引用符の使い方が不適切です。
「l」は「I」の間違いです。
カンマは引用符の外に置くべきです。
"looked up for" is incorrect; the correct phrase is "looked up."
"went out for shopping" is unnatural; "went out shopping" is the natural collocation.
Comma before "and" in a list improves clarity.
「looked up for」は間違いで、正しくは「looked up」です。
「went out for shopping」は不自然で、「went out shopping」が自然です。
リストでの「and」の前にカンマを入れると読みやすくなります。

Not just doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most of the preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understoodanding the process to the end.

"most preparations" should be "most of the preparations" for grammatical completeness.
Parallel structure requires "measuring" and "understanding" to be consistent (both gerunds).
「most preparations」より「most of the preparations」が文法的に正しいです。
「measuring」と「understood」は形が違うため、両方を動名詞に揃えるべきです。

He struggled a little when he had to mince the onions bywith a hocho (a Japanese knife), but managed it.

When indicating an instrument, "with" is the correct preposition, not "by."
Add a comma before "but" to separate two independent clauses.
道具を示すときは「by」ではなく「with」を使います。
「but」の前にカンマを入れて文を区切ります。

Though I oversaw and helped him when necessary, the steak he cooked on his own was just perfect.

"Just perfect" is somewhat informal and redundant; "perfect" alone is clearer and more formal.
「just perfect」は口語的で冗長な表現なので、「perfect」だけのほうが明確で丁寧です。

He looked as if it was nothing, but I was very impressed inside.

"Inside" is unnecessary and sounds awkward in this context. "Very impressed" alone sufficiently expresses the feeling.
「inside」はこの文脈では不要で、不自然に聞こえます。「very impressed」だけで十分気持ちを表現できます。

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Your writing shows your son’s effort and care well. Thank you for the warm story. I hope my corrections helped. Sorry if my Japanese was awkward—I used it to explain better.

息子さんの努力と気持ちがよく伝わっています。心温まる話をありがとうございます。修正が役立てば嬉しいです。日本語が不自然ならすみません、わかりやすくするために使いました。

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Satsuki

May 18, 2025

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詳細にご教示くださり、ありがとうございました。

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Satsuki

May 18, 2025

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日本語を使ってくださって、お気遣いありがとうございます。不自然なところはひとつもなかったです!

“Hamburg steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he said something different after that,” l want to cook it.”
Then he looked up
for a recipe that was suitable for him, went out for shopping, and got what we didn’t have in the fridge.

Not justInstead of doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most of the preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understood the process tountil the end.

He struggled a little when he had to mince the onions bywith a hocho (a Japanese knife) but he managed it.

Though I oversaw and helped him when necessary, the steak he cooked on his own was just perfect.

He looked as if it was nothing, but I was very impressed inside.

Alternately : ". . . but deep down I was very impressed."

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Excellent!

Your son is very impressive for wanting to cook by himself at such young of an age! I definitely wasn't like that at his age. I have no doubts that with your support and guidance he'll be able to gradually cook more difficult things and become a wonderful cook. In the future, he may start cooking delicious food for you.

あなたの息子はいい子ですね。

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Satsuki

May 18, 2025

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Thank you for your support and encouragement for my son.
My son says he wants to be a pro baseball player or a sushi chef in future, so general cooking skills are helpful for him anyway!

“Hamburger steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he said something different after that,” l want to cook it.”
Then he looked up
/for a recipe suitable for him, and went out for shopping andto goet what we didn’t have in the fridge.

"looked up" or "looked for"

NotInstead of just doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understoodanding the process to the end.

I think I'd say "Instead of just using what is pre-prepared for you", but I think what you've written is correct.

or "understanding the process completely".

He struggled a little when he had to mince the onions bywith a/using a hocho (a Japanese knife) but he managed it.

Though I oversaw and helped him when necessary, the steak he cooked on his own was just perfect.

He looked as if it was nothing, but I was very impressed inside.

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Nicely written, good job! Lots of your sentences are very natural. I hope your son continues to impress you with delicious meals :)

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Satsuki

May 18, 2025

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Thank you for your support!
He is a moody person, which is natural as a 10-years-old, but I hope he'll continue to be interested!

He looked as if it was nothing, but I was very impressed inside.


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He looked as if it was nothing, but I was very impressed inside.

Alternately : ". . . but deep down I was very impressed."

He looked as if it was nothing, but I was very impressed inside.

"Inside" is unnecessary and sounds awkward in this context. "Very impressed" alone sufficiently expresses the feeling. 「inside」はこの文脈では不要で、不自然に聞こえます。「very impressed」だけで十分気持ちを表現できます。

What do you want for dinner tonight?


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“Hamburg steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he said something different after that,” l want to cook it.” Then he looked up for a recipe suitable for him, went out for shopping and got what we didn’t have in the fridge.


“Hamburger steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he said something different after that,” l want to cook it.”
Then he looked up
/for a recipe suitable for him, and went out for shopping andto goet what we didn’t have in the fridge.

"looked up" or "looked for"

“Hamburg steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he said something different after that,” l want to cook it.”
Then he looked up
for a recipe that was suitable for him, went out for shopping, and got what we didn’t have in the fridge.

“Hamburg steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he said something different after that,” l “I want to cook it.” ¶
Then he looked up for a recipe suitable for him, went out for shopping, and got what we didn’t have in the fridge.

The quotation marks around "I want to cook it" should start with a comma outside and open the quote correctly. "l" should be capital "I". The comma after "that" should be outside the quotation marks, not inside. 「I want to cook it」の引用符の使い方が不適切です。 「l」は「I」の間違いです。 カンマは引用符の外に置くべきです。 "looked up for" is incorrect; the correct phrase is "looked up." "went out for shopping" is unnatural; "went out shopping" is the natural collocation. Comma before "and" in a list improves clarity. 「looked up for」は間違いで、正しくは「looked up」です。 「went out for shopping」は不自然で、「went out shopping」が自然です。 リストでの「and」の前にカンマを入れると読みやすくなります。

“Hamburg steaks!” my son answered as usual, but he also said something different after that,” l want to cook it.”
Then he looked up for a recipe suitable for him, went out for shopping and got what we didn’t have in the fridge.

Not just doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understood the process to the end.


NotInstead of just doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understoodanding the process to the end.

I think I'd say "Instead of just using what is pre-prepared for you", but I think what you've written is correct. or "understanding the process completely".

Not justInstead of doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most of the preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understood the process tountil the end.

Not just doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most of the preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understoodanding the process to the end.

"most preparations" should be "most of the preparations" for grammatical completeness. Parallel structure requires "measuring" and "understanding" to be consistent (both gerunds). 「most preparations」より「most of the preparations」が文法的に正しいです。 「measuring」と「understood」は形が違うため、両方を動名詞に揃えるべきです。

Not just doing what is “ready for you” to get a quick feeling of achievement, he really went through most preparations on his own, like measuring all the ingredients and understoodanding the process to thebeginning to end.

"understanding" to match the tense of "measuring" is more natural here.

He struggled a little when he had to mince the onions by hocho (a Japanese knife) but managed it.


He struggled a little when he had to mince the onions bywith a/using a hocho (a Japanese knife) but he managed it.

He struggled a little when he had to mince the onions bywith a hocho (a Japanese knife) but he managed it.

He struggled a little when he had to mince the onions bywith a hocho (a Japanese knife), but managed it.

When indicating an instrument, "with" is the correct preposition, not "by." Add a comma before "but" to separate two independent clauses. 道具を示すときは「by」ではなく「with」を使います。 「but」の前にカンマを入れて文を区切ります。

Though I oversaw and helped him when necessary, the steak he cooked on his own was just perfect.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Though I oversaw and helped him when necessary, the steak he cooked on his own was just perfect.

"Just perfect" is somewhat informal and redundant; "perfect" alone is clearer and more formal. 「just perfect」は口語的で冗長な表現なので、「perfect」だけのほうが明確で丁寧です。

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