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Ways of keeping informed about the news

Nowadays there is great variety of means to be informed about the news, not only about our country but also worldwide. In fact, due to the huge amount of information available it is necessary to decide the way and content which one consider more enriching and reliable.
In order to compare the modern and classic ways of news communication, it should be stated the differences between the Internet and newspapers.
Since the arrival of the Internet it is possible to look for specific news about any sort of topic around the world. Actually there is so much information that it has become especially important to contrast it, both for journalist and users, since one will frequently find one version and its opposite for the same facts. Although this seems to be intrinsicatelly linked to all media, it is more clear in case of the Internet, where even ordinary people, that is, those who are not specialised in journalism, are allowed to write about an event on their own websites.
In regards to the paper version I would highlight its details and writing style. Both are crucial to be fully informed about news and attract readers’ attention respectively. Furthermore, it enable us to be more focus on its content, since one do not need to cross over tons of pop-ups and advertisements as it usually happens in online versions.
All in all, if I would have to evaluate the most effective way of being up-to-date about news in terms of quality, rather than quantity, I would consider the newspapers as the best choice.


Your class has just attended a student discussion on different ways of keeping informed
about the news. You have made the notes below:

‘Ways of keeping informed about the news':
* printed newspapers
* television
* the internet

Some opinions expressed in the discussion:

“The amount of in-depth reporting is really impressive.”
“Live images give additional impact to the news.”
“You can access the news online anywhere, anytime.”

Write an essay for your tutor discussing two of the ways in your notes. You should explain
which way you think is more effective in keeping informed about the news, giving
reasons in support of your opinion.

You may, if you wish, make use of the opinions expressed in the discussion, but you should
use your own words as far as possible.

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Titles should be especially concise

Nowadays, there is great variety ofare many means to bestay informed about bothe news, not only about our country but also worldwideational and global news.

Being informed is a one-time thing. Take the sentence: “He insisted on continuing the project despite being informed of the potential issues weeks in advance.” In this sentence the guy was told (presumably once or a few times) about the problems his project might cause. Staying informed/being kept informed, on the other hand, is a process. Staying informed about local news means regularly consuming information about current events. It's not something you're told about once but something that you are continually updated on. For that reason, “stay informed” >> “be informed” here.

In fact, due to the huge amountvolume of information available it is necessary to decide the way and content which one consider moreto us, we have to select sources that are the most enriching and reliable.

“Volume” is a word that comes up often in conversations about media, news, information, misinformation, etc.

Generally, if you have choose between saying the exact same thing with more words or less words, less is better. When you're writing, reread your sentences and ask yourself, “Could I make this sentence shorter without losing information?” if the answer is yes, do it.

In order toBut before we can compare the modern and classic waymethods of news communication, it should be we must understatend the differences between the Internet and newspapers.

Only use passive voice (ie. “It must be stated” is passive while “we must state” is active) when it adds something to your message

Since the arrival of the Internet it is possible to look for, we can find specific news about any sort of topic around the world.

We can >> it is possible to (active vs passive voice)
I prefer “find” over “look for” because we could always attempt to find information (”look for”/”search” means you're trying to find information while “find” means you were successful in getting that information) but the cool thing about the internet is that *successfully* finding reliable information is much quicker and easier.

ActuallyIn fact, there is so much information available that it has become especially important to contrast it,for both for journalists and users, since one will frequently find one version and its opposite for the same factsconsumers to cross-check their sources, as many articles on the same topic contradict each other.

Subject of sentence (journalists and users) should come before verb (cross-check sources)

Although this seems to be intrinsicatelly linked to all media, it is more clear in caseevident ofn the Internet, where even ordinary people, that is, those who are not specialised in journalism, are allowed to write about an event on their ownpeople without journalism experience can write about news on minimally regulated websites.

Run on sentence - either shorten it like I did or break it up into multiple sentences. Shortening is the better option here since a lot of the information originally present wasn't necessary
I changed “their own” to minimally regulated partially because “their own” is redundant and also because a lot of misinformation comes from social media sites like Facebook and tiktok where posters do not own the websites and the lack of quality/verification is the real focus here

In regards to the newspaper versions(?), I would highlight itstheir details and writing style.

I'm not sure what you are trying to say here, please clarify

Both are crucial to be fully informed about news and attract readers’A paper’s details and writing style are crucial to inform readers and hold their attention, respectively.

If you're going to say “respectively”, the things you're referencing should be in the same sentence.

You can't switch subjects mid-sentence: at first you’re talking about READERS (being informed) but then you suddenly switch to talking about ARTICLES/THEIR AUTHORS (Attracting readers’ attention)

Furthermore, it enables us to be more focus more on its content, since because unlike the Internet, one does not need to cross overget past tons of pop-ups and advertisements as it usually happens in online versionsto enjoy a physical article.

what is “it”? Newspapers?
Subject-verb agreement! “It enables”, not “it enable”
“Cross over” is used to talk about getting past borders of some kind, such as rivers, bridges, national borders, dimensional rifts, etc. If you're crossing over something, the other side is different in some way

All in all, if I would have to evaluathad to choose the mobest effective way of being up-to-date about news in terms of quality, rather than quantitysource of up-to-date, quality news, I would consider the newspapers as the best choice.

“If I had to evaluate” is a hypothetical, which doesn't fit as you already have evaluated these news sources. You could say “After evaluating these sources... I would consider newspapers the best choice.”

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Use the passive voice less, be more concise, focus on the subject-verb agreement

Ways of keeping informed about the news


Ways of keeping iHow to Stay Informed aAbout the nNews

Titles should be especially concise

Society is influenced by moral, traditions, technologies and a long etcetera.


No matter how individualistic it has become, since no one can feel really detached of this items.


Currently, it is worthy note the weight that topics as advertising and communications has on social currents, given the fact that people are continuously exposed to them in their daily lifes.


It is possible to find advertisments about almost any sort of product or service in all media and even in the most remote area.


Although these does not have a conscious influence on people’s decisions, it is out of question that they determine our choices in some way, making us participants in current social trends linked to topics as fashion, sports, music and so on.


Nonetheless, marketing through advertising has not had nowhere near as powerful influencing social behaviours as communications.


Applications like WhatsApp and social media as Facebook and Instagram are a clear example of it.


They have become part of our lifes in a very short period of time, changing completely the way people relate and it requires a strong determination to escape from their influence.


Therefore, when it comes to, for instance, hobbies or people’s interests there is always a remaining of their attachment.


To sum up, nowadays whoever who decide to keep more in touch with the real life by reducing the use of smartphone will have to struggle and swim against the current, which demonstrate how important communications has become in society.


Nowadays there is great variety of means to be informed about the news, not only about our country but also worldwide.


Nowadays, there is great variety ofare many means to bestay informed about bothe news, not only about our country but also worldwideational and global news.

Being informed is a one-time thing. Take the sentence: “He insisted on continuing the project despite being informed of the potential issues weeks in advance.” In this sentence the guy was told (presumably once or a few times) about the problems his project might cause. Staying informed/being kept informed, on the other hand, is a process. Staying informed about local news means regularly consuming information about current events. It's not something you're told about once but something that you are continually updated on. For that reason, “stay informed” >> “be informed” here.

In fact, due to the huge amount of information available it is necessary to decide the way and content which one consider more enriching and reliable.


In fact, due to the huge amountvolume of information available it is necessary to decide the way and content which one consider moreto us, we have to select sources that are the most enriching and reliable.

“Volume” is a word that comes up often in conversations about media, news, information, misinformation, etc. Generally, if you have choose between saying the exact same thing with more words or less words, less is better. When you're writing, reread your sentences and ask yourself, “Could I make this sentence shorter without losing information?” if the answer is yes, do it.

In order to compare the modern and classic ways of news communication, it should be stated the differences between the Internet and newspapers.


In order toBut before we can compare the modern and classic waymethods of news communication, it should be we must understatend the differences between the Internet and newspapers.

Only use passive voice (ie. “It must be stated” is passive while “we must state” is active) when it adds something to your message

Since the arrival of the Internet it is possible to look for specific news about any sort of topic around the world.


Since the arrival of the Internet it is possible to look for, we can find specific news about any sort of topic around the world.

We can >> it is possible to (active vs passive voice) I prefer “find” over “look for” because we could always attempt to find information (”look for”/”search” means you're trying to find information while “find” means you were successful in getting that information) but the cool thing about the internet is that *successfully* finding reliable information is much quicker and easier.

Actually there is so much information that it has become especially important to contrast it, both for journalist and users, since one will frequently find one version and its opposite for the same facts.


ActuallyIn fact, there is so much information available that it has become especially important to contrast it,for both for journalists and users, since one will frequently find one version and its opposite for the same factsconsumers to cross-check their sources, as many articles on the same topic contradict each other.

Subject of sentence (journalists and users) should come before verb (cross-check sources)

Although this seems to be intrinsicatelly linked to all media, it is more clear in case of the Internet, where even ordinary people, that is, those who are not specialised in journalism, are allowed to write about an event on their own websites.


Although this seems to be intrinsicatelly linked to all media, it is more clear in caseevident ofn the Internet, where even ordinary people, that is, those who are not specialised in journalism, are allowed to write about an event on their ownpeople without journalism experience can write about news on minimally regulated websites.

Run on sentence - either shorten it like I did or break it up into multiple sentences. Shortening is the better option here since a lot of the information originally present wasn't necessary I changed “their own” to minimally regulated partially because “their own” is redundant and also because a lot of misinformation comes from social media sites like Facebook and tiktok where posters do not own the websites and the lack of quality/verification is the real focus here

In regards to the paper version I would highlight its details and writing style.


In regards to the newspaper versions(?), I would highlight itstheir details and writing style.

I'm not sure what you are trying to say here, please clarify

Both are crucial to be fully informed about news and attract readers’ attention respectively.


Both are crucial to be fully informed about news and attract readers’A paper’s details and writing style are crucial to inform readers and hold their attention, respectively.

If you're going to say “respectively”, the things you're referencing should be in the same sentence. You can't switch subjects mid-sentence: at first you’re talking about READERS (being informed) but then you suddenly switch to talking about ARTICLES/THEIR AUTHORS (Attracting readers’ attention)

Furthermore, it enable us to be more focus on its content, since one do not need to cross over tons of pop-ups and advertisements as it usually happens in online versions.


Furthermore, it enables us to be more focus more on its content, since because unlike the Internet, one does not need to cross overget past tons of pop-ups and advertisements as it usually happens in online versionsto enjoy a physical article.

what is “it”? Newspapers? Subject-verb agreement! “It enables”, not “it enable” “Cross over” is used to talk about getting past borders of some kind, such as rivers, bridges, national borders, dimensional rifts, etc. If you're crossing over something, the other side is different in some way

All in all, if I would have to evaluate the most effective way of being up-to-date about news in terms of quality, rather than quantity, I would consider the newspapers as the best choice.


All in all, if I would have to evaluathad to choose the mobest effective way of being up-to-date about news in terms of quality, rather than quantitysource of up-to-date, quality news, I would consider the newspapers as the best choice.

“If I had to evaluate” is a hypothetical, which doesn't fit as you already have evaluated these news sources. You could say “After evaluating these sources... I would consider newspapers the best choice.”

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