April 29, 2023
Ways in which stories for young children are important
Children are overexposed and overestimulated by screens in the digital era. Let’s think about cartoons, Youtube videos even for babies and so on. Entertainment has been relegaded to this media and it seems there is no space for the classical ways, such as stories and fables.
The typical picture of parents reading a book to their children looks like a black and white one. Reading should remain as an important means of diversion, at the same time that enhance creativity in children’s mind. Therefore, it could be the perfect presentation letter that leads them to really appreciate all the advantages that stories have for them. In other words, it is unquestionable the value of enjoying a good story, nevertheless it should be noted that this is the best alternative to teach the little ones about certain aspect of life, especially morality and ethic.
Lack of social values is present in news, series,... not to mention in the daily life, thereby it becomes crucial to compensate for it. Books play a major role in this sense, particularly during childhood, the most exposed stage of our life. They teach what it is correct and persuade kids to follow this path. Furthermore, there is a feedback between what they learn from their parents or at school and what it is illustrated in the popular books for this age.
To sum up, when it comes to read, amusement becomes a superficial reason compared to values like humbleness or generosity, which lie beyond in an excellent book.
Choose 2 ways and if you want 2 opinions (but you should use different words
as far as possible).
‘Ways in which stories for young children
are important:
* entertainment
* education ‘Some opinions expressed in the
* social values discussion;
Opinions:
“Stories are fun.”
“Stories develop children’s vocabulary.”
“Children find out the difference
between right and wrong.”
Children are overexposed and overestimulated by screens in the digital era.
Let’s think about cartoons, Youtube videos even for babies, and so on.
Entertainment has been relegadted to this kind of media and it seems there is no space for the classical ways, such asapproach through stories and fables for example.
I found "classical ways" a bit awkward.
The typical picture of parents reading a book to their children looks like ais in black and white one.
Reading should remain as an important means of diversion, that at the same time that enhances creativity in the children’s mind.
Therefore, it could be the perfect presentation letter that leads them to really appreciate all the advantages that stories have for them.
I'm confused about what "presentation letter" means here.
In other words, it is unquestionable the value of enjoying a good story, n is unquestionable. Nevertheless, it should be noted that this ia good story also presents the best alternative tofor teaching the little ones about certain aspect of life, especially morality and ethics.
"alternative to" and "alternative for" are nuanced a bit differently. I think "alternative for" works better here. Instead of starting a new sentence with "Nevertheless" as I did, you could join the two thoughts like this: "...is unquestionable, but it should be noted nevertheless that..."
LSince lack of social values is present in news, series,... and more, not to mention in the daily life, thereby it becomes crucial to compensate for it.
Books play a major role in this sense, particularly during childhood, the most exposed stage of our life.
I don't think "exposed" is the right word, but I don't know what you are aiming for. Maybe something like "teachable" or "malleable"?
Furthermore, there is a feedback between what theykids learn from their parents or at school and what it is illustrated in the popular books for this age.
I feel "they" wants to refer to "books" even though "books" wouldn't make sense here.
To sum up, when it comes to reading, amusement becomes a superficial reason compared to values like humbleness or generosity, which lie beyondlow the surface in an excellent book.
The phrase "lie beyond" doesn't contrast well with "superficial", so I'm suggesting "lie below the surface" which is exactly opposite to "superficial".
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Nice piece of writing overall. I agree with your viewpoint!
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Ways in which stories for young children are important |
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Children are overexposed and overestimulated by screens in the digital era. Children are overexposed and over |
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Let’s think about cartoons, Youtube videos even for babies and so on. Let’s think about cartoons, Youtube videos even for babies, and so on. |
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Entertainment has been relegaded to this media and it seems there is no space for the classical ways, such as stories and fables. Entertainment has been relega I found "classical ways" a bit awkward. |
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The typical picture of parents reading a book to their children looks like a black and white one. The typical picture of parents reading a book to their children |
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Reading should remain as an important means of diversion, at the same time that enhance creativity in children’s mind. Reading should remain as an important means of diversion, that at the same time |
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Therefore, it could be the perfect presentation letter that leads them to really appreciate all the advantages that stories have for them. Therefore, it could be the perfect presentation letter that leads them to really appreciate all the advantages that stories have for them. I'm confused about what "presentation letter" means here. |
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In other words, it is unquestionable the value of enjoying a good story, nevertheless it should be noted that this is the best alternative to teach the little ones about certain aspect of life, especially morality and ethic. In other words, "alternative to" and "alternative for" are nuanced a bit differently. I think "alternative for" works better here. Instead of starting a new sentence with "Nevertheless" as I did, you could join the two thoughts like this: "...is unquestionable, but it should be noted nevertheless that..." |
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Lack of social values is present in news, series,... not to mention in the daily life, thereby it becomes crucial to compensate for it.
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Books play a major role in this sense, particularly during childhood, the most exposed stage of our life. Books play a major role in this sense, particularly during childhood, the most exposed stage of our life. I don't think "exposed" is the right word, but I don't know what you are aiming for. Maybe something like "teachable" or "malleable"? |
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They teach what it is correct and persuade kids to follow this path. |
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Furthermore, there is a feedback between what they learn from their parents or at school and what it is illustrated in the popular books for this age. Furthermore, there is a feedback between what I feel "they" wants to refer to "books" even though "books" wouldn't make sense here. |
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To sum up, when it comes to read, amusement becomes a superficial reason compared to values like humbleness or generosity, which lie beyond in an excellent book. To sum up, when it comes to reading, amusement becomes a superficial reason compared to values like humbleness or generosity, which lie be The phrase "lie beyond" doesn't contrast well with "superficial", so I'm suggesting "lie below the surface" which is exactly opposite to "superficial". |
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