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Last weekend, i watched a new American TV drama, All her fault. The drama is about a rich family that thier child was kidnapped. It is a hot drama, the story is very attractive. Maybe many people have watched it.
In the drama, a rich family employed a babysitter only 20 or 21 yeas old. She is no any experrience of being a mom. I don't know if it can be happened in reality.Because no one believes that the girl has ability of babysitter.
Anyway, i never would like such a young woman to take care of my child.
Watching an American TV drama
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Titles should be capitalised. You can also place it in quotation marks to make it extra clear.
The drama is about a rich family that thierwhose child was kidnapped.
It is a hotcompelling drama, the story is very attractiveinteresting.
I'm not entirely sure what you wanted to say here but the original sentence gave an impression of the drama featuring sexy scenes and attractive actors, which I'm not sure you wanted to say.
Maybe many people have watched it.
In the drama, a rich family employed a babysitter who was only 20 or 21 yeas old.
If this is the same rich family whose child was kidnapped it would be better to write "the family" instead of "a rich family". The sentence as it is gives the impression that it's a different rich family
She ihas no any experrience of being a mom.
I don't know if it can bethat could happened in reality.
Here you could replace "could happen in reality" with "is realistic".
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Anyway, i never wouldI would never like such a young woman to take care of my child.
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Watching American TV drama Watching an American TV drama This should have an article unless the topic is watching American TV dramas in general (in which case it should be plural) |
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The drama is about a rich family that thier child was kidnapped. The drama is about a rich family |
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It is a hot drama, the story is very attractive. It is a I'm not entirely sure what you wanted to say here but the original sentence gave an impression of the drama featuring sexy scenes and attractive actors, which I'm not sure you wanted to say. |
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Maybe many people have watched it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In the drama, a rich family employed a babysitter only 20 or 21 yeas old. In the drama, a rich family employed a babysitter who was only 20 or 21 yeas old. If this is the same rich family whose child was kidnapped it would be better to write "the family" instead of "a rich family". The sentence as it is gives the impression that it's a different rich family |
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She is no any experrience of being a mom. She |
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I don't know if it can be happened in reality. I don't know if Here you could replace "could happen in reality" with "is realistic". |
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Because no one believes that the girl has ability of babysitter. Because no one believes that the girl has the ability to |
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Anyway, i never would like such a young woman to take care of my child. Anyway, |
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It is a hot dram, the story is very attractive. |
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Last weekend, i watched a new American TV drama, All her fault. Last weekend, Titles should be capitalised. You can also place it in quotation marks to make it extra clear. |
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