Sept. 7, 2021
Warm noodles
It was a late autumn day that I noticed the tiny pieces of happiness in my life.
I was suffering from severe upset stomach for two days without knowing exact reasons. I could hardly eat anything because as long as I send some food into my stomach, it would feel an intense pain like my intestines have twisted each other inside then coming with continuous sickness. What worsen my situation was I have to cross through the city to recreate my lost ID card. When I arrived the office centre, the officials sadly informed that I need to fetch my original ID card or citizenship paper at first. That was final thing which really drived me crazy since they didn’t require these papers last time!
What a bad day! Curbing the painful feeling, I had to go back my home with a sank heart. I even didn’t notice that my face were filled with tears and had a runny nose. My mother asked me what happened when she saw me looked like a stray dog. Then I told her my miserable day.(at least I think it is the most awful day of this month). She said nothing and boiled a pot of water to cook a bowl of noodles for me.
When she was cooking, I said “I don’t want to eat anything. I feel sick about food these days especially noodles. Canteen’s noodles should be blamed for.” “at least you should eat something. You shouldn’t eat nothing all day long.” She responded.
The moment When a bowl of noodles with fried eggs and diced tomatoes sitting in front of me, it is weird that I started feel hungry. I could smell the mild aroma of tender eggs mixed with juicy tomatoes, garlics and fresh herbs. The noodle soup was a little sour and sweet, inspiring my appetite. Actually it was a bowl of ordinary noodle but I devoured it. It seems this dish has magic and alleviate my pain and misery at once. 2 hours later, I stopped diarrhoea. Can I call this magic? I suddenly found it was my mother’s sensitive words and behavior that soothe my tense nerve. Thank you my mom.
Warm noodles
It was a late autumn day that Iwhen I began to noticed the tiny piecemoments of happiness in my life.
I was suffering from a severely upset stomach for two days without knowing exact reasonsand I didn't know why.
I could hardly eat anything because as l. As soong as I send some food into my stomach, itate, I would feel an intense pain, like my intestines have twisted each other inside then coming with continuousd knotted themselves in a bunch, and then I would feel pretty sickness.
Wasn't quite sure what the last part means
What worsened my situation was I haveing to cross throughgo to the other side of the city to recreateget my lost ID card reprinted.
When I arrived the office centre, the officials sadly informed that I neunfortunately needed to fetch my original ID card or citizenship paper ats first.
That was final thingthe last straw which really drioved me crazy, since they didn’t require these papers last time!
We use "last straw" in a lot of phrases like this. That was the last straw/the straw the broke the camel's back/I'm on my last straw.
What a bad day!
Curbing the painful feeling, I had to goSuppressing my disappointedness, I went back my home with a sank heart, crestfallen.
The beginning and end of your sentence are at odds with each other. Did you suppress your feelings or were you sad?
I even didn’t notice that my face were filled with tears andtears were streaming down my face, and that I had a runny nose.
My mother asked me what happened when she saw me lookeding like a stray dog.
Then I told her about my miserable day.
(at least, I think, it is the most awful day of this month).
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She said nothing and boiled a pot of water to cook a bowl of noodles for me.
Whilen she was cooking, I said “I don’t want to eat anything."
I feel sick about foodFood makes me feel sick these days especially noodles.
Canteen’s noodles should beare to blamed for.” “at least you should that. “You should at least eat something.
You shouldn’t eat nothing all day long.,” Sshe responded.
Even though she ended her sentence, we still put a comma in order to connect it to the rest of the non-dialogue part of the sentence.
The moment Whenthat a bowl of noodles with fried eggs and diced tomatoes sittingwas sat in front of me, it is weird that II unexpectedly started to feel hungry.
I could smell the mild aroma of tender eggs mixed with juicy tomatoes, garlics and fresh herbs.
The noodle soup was a little soursweet and sweetour, inspiring my appetite.
There's a common phrase for what you're trying to say with "inspiring my appetite" here, but I can't remember it.
Actually it was a bowl of ordinary noodles, but I devoured it anyway.
Wait, so it wasn't sweet and sour?
It seems this dish has magic andpowers, because alleviated my pain and misery all at once.
2 hours later, I stoppeno longer had diarrhoea either.
This sentence is a little strange because it implies that you had diarrhea for two hours straight (a.k.a. 两个小时一直上厕所了). My revision changes the meaning so that you discovered 2 hours later that your diarrhea (using American spelling here) had gone away.
Can I call this magic?
I suddenly founrealized it was my mother’s sensitive words and behavior that soothed my tense nerves.
Thank you my, mom.
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Nice job! Glad your mom could cure you!
Sept. 8, 2021
What worsened my situation was I haveing to cross throughgo to the other side of the city to recreateget my lost ID card reprinted.
Thank you a lot! I was wondering how to express the "reprinted" last night!
Sept. 8, 2021
That was final thingthe last straw which really drioved me crazy, since they didn’t require these papers last time!
Thank you! Now I know this phrase!
Sept. 8, 2021
Curbing the painful feeling, I had to goSuppressing my disappointedness, I went back my home with a sank heart, crestfallen.
In fact, due to diarrhea, I didn't feel well that day. I want to express I was uncomfortable both physically and psychologically. I have to control myself to stand the stomach ache and disappointedness.
Sept. 8, 2021
In fact, due to diarrhea, I didn't feel well that day. I want to express I was uncomfortable both physically and psychologically. I have to control myself to stand the stomach ache and disappointedness.
You might then just say outright, "Exhausted physically and mentally, I trudged back home, crestfallen." "Trudged" adds a little extra flavor and helps to emphasize how tired/unwell you were.
Sept. 8, 2021
Actually it was a bowl of ordinary noodles, but I devoured it anyway.
hhhhhhhh, this kind of nooldes is sweet and sour for we usually add tomatoes and some vinegar. This is a homestyle dishes. Almost every chinese can cook it. We usually called it 番茄鸡蛋面，literally meaning noodles with fried eggs and tomatoes. I said it was ordinary because its taste was common or simple?
Sept. 8, 2021
You might then just say outright, "Exhausted physically and mentally, I trudged back home, crestfallen." "Trudged" adds a little extra flavor and helps to emphasize how tired/unwell you were.
:) ! I'm gald you are still there! Thank you for your advice!
Sept. 8, 2021
hhhhhhhh, this kind of nooldes is sweet and sour for we usually add tomatoes and some vinegar. This is a homestyle dishes. Almost every chinese can cook it. We usually called it 番茄鸡蛋面，literally meaning noodles with fried eggs and tomatoes. I said it was ordinary because its taste was common or simple?
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In English words like ordinary/plain when describing food indicate that there mostly are no extra ingredients. Instead you might say, "Although it was just a simple bowl of (sweet and sour/tomato and egg) noodles, I devoured it all the same." The part in parentheses you could add if you wanted to be extra clear. Common would be not so natural. Simple implies that there's just a few main ingredients, in this case noodles, eggs, tomatoes, vinegar etc.
Sept. 8, 2021
:) ! I'm gald you are still there! Thank you for your advice!
Glad I can help!
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It was a late autumn day that I noticed the tiny pieces of happiness in my life. It was a late autumn day |
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I was suffering from severe upset stomach for two days without knowing exact reasons. I was suffering from a severely upset stomach for two days |
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I could hardly eat anything because as long as I send some food into my stomach, it would feel an intense pain like my intestines have twisted each other inside then coming with continuous sickness. I could hardly eat anything Wasn't quite sure what the last part means |
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What worsen my situation was I have to cross through the city to recreate my lost ID card. What worsened my situation was |
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When I arrived the office centre, the officials sadly informed that I need to fetch my original ID card or citizenship paper at first. When I arrived the office centre, the officials |
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That was final thing which really drived me crazy since they didn’t require these papers last time! That was We use "last straw" in a lot of phrases like this. That was the last straw/the straw the broke the camel's back/I'm on my last straw. |
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What a bad day! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Curbing the painful feeling, I had to go back my home with a sank heart.
The beginning and end of your sentence are at odds with each other. Did you suppress your feelings or were you sad? |
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I even didn’t notice that my face were filled with tears and had a runny nose. I even didn’t notice that |
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My mother asked me what happened when she saw me looked like a stray dog. My mother asked me what happened when she saw me look |
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Then I told her my miserable day.
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(at least I think it is the most awful day of this month). (at least, I think, it is the most awful day Connect to previous sentence |
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She said nothing and boiled a pot of water to cook a bowl of noodles for me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When she was cooking, I said “I don’t want to eat anything. While |
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I feel sick about food these days especially noodles.
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Canteen’s noodles should be blamed for.” “at least you should eat something. Canteen’s noodles |
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You shouldn’t eat nothing all day long.” She responded. You shouldn’t eat nothing all day long Even though she ended her sentence, we still put a comma in order to connect it to the rest of the non-dialogue part of the sentence. |
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The moment When a bowl of noodles with fried eggs and diced tomatoes sitting in front of me, it is weird that I started feel hungry. The moment |
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I could smell the mild aroma of tender eggs mixed with juicy tomatoes, garlics and fresh herbs. I could smell the mild aroma of tender eggs mixed with juicy tomatoes, garlic |
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The noodle soup was a little sour and sweet, inspiring my appetite. The noodle soup was There's a common phrase for what you're trying to say with "inspiring my appetite" here, but I can't remember it. |
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Actually it was a bowl of ordinary noodle but I devoured it. Actually it was a bowl of ordinary noodles, but I devoured it anyway. Wait, so it wasn't sweet and sour? |
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It seems this dish has magic and alleviate my pain and misery at once. It seems this dish has magic |
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2 hours later, I stopped diarrhoea. 2 hours later, I This sentence is a little strange because it implies that you had diarrhea for two hours straight (a.k.a. 两个小时一直上厕所了). My revision changes the meaning so that you discovered 2 hours later that your diarrhea (using American spelling here) had gone away. |
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Can I call this magic? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I suddenly found it was my mother’s sensitive words and behavior that soothe my tense nerve. I |
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Thank you my mom. Thank you |
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