Dec. 15, 2020
War conflicts
Who can prevent conflicts? People who cause conflict, because they first need to understand why conflicts are unnecessary in the world. If they do not change themselves, the world situation will never change. And no one can not change their way of thinking until they realize that they should be tolerant of everyone of a different color skin, religion or origins. Conflicts will disappear if conflicting people stop appropriating for lands or fighting for lands with raw materials. Conflicts will disappear too if the whole world will be tolerant and honest each other.
We can also teach people by showing them, for example, pictures of various looks of each nationality, in order that accustom them that everyone is different. Eventually we are people and nothing that is human is to us strange (I don’t know if sentence is correct, original version: ‘Humani sum, humani nihil a me alienum puto’). We can also make conflicting individuals aware of the types of religion that do not hurt anyone, that all religions are in some way similar to each other.
Are there too many repetitions? Can it be replaced with something?
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Who can prevent conflicts?
People who cause conflict, because they first need to understand why conflicts are unnecessary in the world.
If they do not change themselves, the world situation will never change.
saying "world situation" is a bit redundant and unnecessary
And no one can not change their way of thinking until they realize that they should be tolerant of everyone of a different color skin, religion or origins.
The last part is redundant since "everyone" includes all those characteristics.
Conflicts will disappear if conflicting peoplepeople can resolve their differences peacefully and stop appropriating for lands or fighting for lands with raw materials.
You begin with "if", but then you skip ahead to what they individually have to do. You left out a critical step: where conflicting parties create a different solution than war.
Conflicts will disappear too if the whole world will become tolerant and honest each other.
With tolerance and honesty they can talk and create better solutions.
We can also teach people by showing them, for example, pictures of various lookfaces of each nationality, in order that accustom them that everyone is differento familiarize them with all the world.
The Olympics and movies and internationally-known artists are a great way to do that.
EvWe are all fundamentually we are people and nothing that is human is to us strange to us (I don’t know if sentence is correct, original version: ‘Humani sum, humani nihil a me alienum puto’).
It's an idealistic thought, but cultures and historical conflicts keep us at odds with one another.
We can also makehelp conflicting individuals to be aware of the types of religion that do not hurt anyone, that all religions are in some way similar to each other.
Again, it is an idealistic thought, but in practice religions are a lot like culture and people fight over those.
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The thinking behind your sentences is good. You have an occasional word misuse or redundancy. I suggest keeping sentences short and clear, though sometimes multiple phrases may be required.
Dec. 16, 2020
Thank you very much! Sometimes my thinking is actually idealistic (I think introverts are like that), but I had to write something about it in my course :)
'You have an occasional word misuse or redundancy' - I think this tendency is due to my native language in which we don't spare words haha.
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War conflicts War A title requires all the major words to be capitalized. However, less significant words like "the", "and", and others of that kind are generally NOT capitalized. |
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Who can prevent conflicts? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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People who cause conflict, because they first need to understand why conflicts are unnecessary in the world. People who cause conflict |
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If they do not change themselves, the world situation will never change. If they do not change themselves, the world saying "world situation" is a bit redundant and unnecessary |
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And no one can not change their way of thinking until they realize that they should be tolerant of everyone of a different color skin, religion or origins. And no one can The last part is redundant since "everyone" includes all those characteristics. |
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Conflicts will disappear if conflicting people stop appropriating for lands or fighting for lands with raw materials. Conflicts will disappear if You begin with "if", but then you skip ahead to what they individually have to do. You left out a critical step: where conflicting parties create a different solution than war. |
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Conflicts will disappear too if the whole world will be tolerant and honest each other. Conflicts will disappear too if the whole world will become tolerant and honest each other. With tolerance and honesty they can talk and create better solutions. |
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We can also teach people by showing them, for example, pictures of various looks of each nationality, in order that accustom them that everyone is different. We can The Olympics and movies and internationally-known artists are a great way to do that. |
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Eventually we are people and nothing that is human is to us strange (I don’t know if sentence is correct, original version: ‘Humani sum, humani nihil a me alienum puto’).
It's an idealistic thought, but cultures and historical conflicts keep us at odds with one another. |
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We can also make conflicting individuals aware of the types of religion that do not hurt anyone, that all religions are in some way similar to each other. We can also Again, it is an idealistic thought, but in practice religions are a lot like culture and people fight over those. |
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Are there too many repetitions? |
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Can it be replaced with something? |
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