June 26, 2021
Want to Travel to XIan
Traveling to Xian is on my bucket list and I hope to go someday as well.
Xian is one of the historical city in China.
It was the capital city for more than 10 dynasties in China.
It is also a well known city in Korea because of a popular novel, the romance of three kingdoms which is written 700 years ago.
A big main road in front of the palace and a square appearance of the city influenced to Kyoto in Japan
Mausoleum of the first emperor in China is there.
The most interesting point for me is that it was one of the main cities on the silk road.
I am always blown away by listening to stories about the silk road and the city.
After the pandemic, I will travel to Xian first.
Xian is one of the many historical cityies in China.
It is also a well known city in Korea because of a popular novel, t"The rRomance of tThree kKingdoms," which iwas written 700 years ago.
A big main road in front of the palace and a square appearance of the city influenced tohe layout of Kyoto in Japan.
"to" is the wrong preposition to place in front of Kyoto, and also you need to explain how Kyoto was influenced. "layout" seemed to me to be a good word to use; although, there is possibly a better one.
MThe mausoleum of the first emperor inof China is there.
It is important to place "The" before "mausoleum" because you are mentioning a specific mausoleum, unless Mausoleum was a proper noun, which then you would have to write the sentence a little differently.
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June 27, 2021
Thank you for the corrections
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Want to Travel to XIan |
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Traveling to Xian is on my bucket list and I hope to go someday as well. |
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Xian is one of the historical city in China. Xian is one of the many historical cit |
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It was the capital city for more than 10 dynasties in China. |
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It is also a well known city in Korea because of a popular novel, the romance of three kingdoms which is written 700 years ago. It is also a well known city in Korea because of a popular novel, |
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A big main road in front of the palace and a square appearance of the city influenced to Kyoto in Japan A big main road in front of the palace and a square appearance of the city influenced t "to" is the wrong preposition to place in front of Kyoto, and also you need to explain how Kyoto was influenced. "layout" seemed to me to be a good word to use; although, there is possibly a better one. |
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Mausoleum of the first emperor in China is there.
It is important to place "The" before "mausoleum" because you are mentioning a specific mausoleum, unless Mausoleum was a proper noun, which then you would have to write the sentence a little differently. |
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The most interesting point for me is that it was one of the main cities on the silk road. |
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I am always blown away by listening to stories about the silk road and the city. |
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After the pandemic, I will travel to Xian first. |
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