Parks Aaround My House Parks around My House

('Around' isn't capitalized in the title because it is a preposition) The title could alternatively be: The Parks in My Area The Parks in My Neighborhood.

Near my house, there are three big parks where I used tolike to take walks. Near my house, there are three big parks where I like to take walks.

From the rest of the essay, it seems like this is something you still do, so I changed it to the present tense.

On the east sidEast of my house, there is "Metan Park" where many pet lovers visit their communitiesget together. East of my house, there is "Metan Park" where many pet lovers get together.

I wasn't sure what you meant by visit their communities so I changed it to "get together"

Many athletes work out there every day. Many athletes work out there every day.

OnTo the south side, there is a park which is called "Hywon Park". To the south, there is "Hywon Park".

I removed "a park' so there's less repetition.

AtIn this park, there is a big concert room for music performances. In this park, there is a big concert room for music performances.

OnTo the west side, there is another park that, which is my favorite one. To the west, there is another park, which is my favorite one.

The park is for teenagers, so there is a big library, a playground and a good -quality swimming pool. The park is for teenagers, so there is a big library, a playground and a good-quality swimming pool.

The different features of those parks make me happy. The different features of those parks make me happy.

Alternatively: I really appreciate the different amenities that these parks offer.