April 1, 2023
Volunteering Job
What volunteering job would you like to do? And why?
I would like to take part in a dog rescue center. During my life I have owned two dogs, so I have experience treating and looking after them. Dogs always have been really important to me; for me, they are a kind of life companion. Sharing my life with them has made me to grow so much, both personally and mentally. I will always cherish all of the memories and moments we have spent together. Thus, I have always considered returning the favour somehow. I have always dreamed of having an animal shelter, where stray animals and abandoned pets could live and grow in until a family would offer to adopt them. However, that requires a lot of money and time which I don't currently have. Instead of this, I am thinking about donating a little bit of money to an animal shelter, but I haven't chosen one yet. In short, adopt rather than buy an animal whenever you can; they deserve a home too.
A Volunteering Job
This sounds more natural in the US.
What volunteering job would you like to do?
And why?
I would like to take part in a dog rescue center.
During my life I have owned two dogs in my life, so I have experience treataining and looking after them.
Dogs always have been really important to me; for me, they are a kind of life companion.
Sharing my life with them has made me to grow so much, both personally and mentally.
I will always cherish all of the memories and moments we have spent together.
Thus, I have always considered returning the favour somehow.
I have always dreamed of having an animal shelter, where stray animals and abandoned pets could live and grow in until a family would offercame by to adopt them.
However, tThat requires a lot of money and time which I don't currently have, however.
We try to avoid using "however" at the beginning of sentences when writing.
Instead of this, I am thinking about donating a little bit of money to an animal shelter, but I haven't chosen one yet.
In short, adopt rather than buy an animal whenever you can; they deserve a home, too.
We always put a comma before "too."
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Again, very well done!
April 2, 2023
Thanks! I understand that "however" can be substituted for "though", right?
April 2, 2023
Yes, that's correct.
April 5, 2023
Thus, I have always considered returning the favour somehow.
This is not a necessary correction. Favour is perfectly acceptable in non-American English (for instance in UK English)
April 5, 2023
However, tThat requires a lot of money and time which I don't currently have, however.
Also not necessary
April 5, 2023
Also not necessary
You're free to make your own corrections without criticizing the work of others.
April 6, 2023
You're free to make your own corrections without criticizing the work of others.
I completely agree. However, I only commented on the corrections where you made it seem as though your solution was the only correct way to write in English. I simply pointed out that that is not true. It was mainly for the benefit of the author, not yours. But of course, no offence to your corrections.
April 6, 2023
I completely agree. However, I only commented on the corrections where you made it seem as though your solution was the only correct way to write in English. I simply pointed out that that is not true. It was mainly for the benefit of the author, not yours. But of course, no offence to your corrections.
Again, you're free to submit your own corrections without criticizing the work of others.
Volunteering Job
What volunteering job would you like to do and why?
And why?
I would like to take part in a dog rescue center.
During my life, I have owned two dogs, so I have experience in treating and looking after them.
Dogs have always have been really important to me; for me, they are a kind of life companion.
Great use of the semicolon here!
Sharing my life with them has madeallowed me to grow so much, both personally and mentally.
I will always cherish all of the memories and moments we have spent together.
ThusAnd so, I have always considered returning the favour somehow.
'Thus' feels a bit stiff if it's not an academic writing piece.
I have always dreamed of having an animal shelter, where stray animals and abandoned pets could live and grow in until a family would offer to adopt them.
However, thatsuch a shelter requires a lot of money and time which I don't currently have.
Instead of this, I am thinking about donating a little bit of money to an animal shelter, but I haven't chosen one yet.
In short, someone can/should adopt, rather than buy , [an animal]/pet whenever youthey can; theyanimals in shelters deserve a home too.!
I put an exclamation mark for more enthusiasm since this is a call-to-action sentence.
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Very good writing!
April 2, 2023
Thanks a million!
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I would like to take part in a dog rescue center. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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During my life I have owned two dogs, so I have experience treating and looking after them. During my life, I have owned two dogs, so I have experience in treating and looking after them.
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I will always cherish all of the memories and moments we have spent together. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Thus, I have always considered returning the favour somehow.
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I have always dreamed of having an animal shelter, where stray animals and abandoned pets could live and grow in until a family would offer to adopt them. I have always dreamed of having an animal shelter I have always dreamed of having an animal shelter, where stray animals and abandoned pets could live and grow |
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However, that requires a lot of money and time which I don't currently have. However,
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Instead of this, I am thinking about donating a little bit of money to an animal shelter, but I haven't chosen one yet. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In short, adopt rather than buy an animal whenever you can; they deserve a home too. In short, someone can/should adopt, rather than buy I put an exclamation mark for more enthusiasm since this is a call-to-action sentence. In short, adopt rather than buy an animal whenever you can; they deserve a home, too. We always put a comma before "too." |
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