Jan. 14, 2023
In the last decades more and more people are getting distracted for the amount of work and leisure activities around them. However they don’t usually take into account the importance that keeping on shape have on their lives. Linked to this topic I saw a programme on the radio where theses issues were discussed more in deep.
From all the solutions the solutions provided on this programme, I would like to highlight two of them, that is, better facilities and a proper advertising.
Firstly, I completely agree on what one of the participant told about the facilities: there is need of plenty of these, especially on small towns and villages, where lacks of public funding make the existing ones obsolete or they need to be repaired. Besides, people can not afford paying a gym, so the only alternative to this areas for its inhabitants is going running, which is not a very stimulating activity for most them.
Secondly, but not less important, any kind of sport activity must be widely announced, in order to keep people from different ages informed. That is the most unexpensive (mostly free) way to attack the problem at its source, specially for those activities aimed at young people, through social networks. What is described above link perfectly with was expressed by the broadcaster in the radio programme, who stated that just good facilities without a proper advertising about the activities which are taken place in your local area is senseless.
As a conclusion, both facilities availability and advertising are indispensable in order to encourage people from all ages to find spaces in their busy agendas for getting started again in doing physical exercise.
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Essay: HowWhat is a good way to encourage people to do exercise?
Essay: What is a good way to encourage people to exercise?
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They don’t usually take into account, however, the importance that keeping in shape has on their lives.
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I listened to a program on the radio where these issues were discussed more in depth.
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From all the solutions provided in this program, I would like to highlight two of them: better facilities and proper advertising.
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Besides, people cannot afford to pay for gym membership, so the only alternative in these areas is for its inhabitants to go running, which is not always a very stimulating activity for most of them.
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Secondly, but not less important, any kind of sports activity must be widely announced in order to keep people of all ages informed.
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This is the most inexpensive (mostly free) way to attack the problem at its source, especially for those activities aimed at young people through social networks.
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What is described above connects well with what was expressed by the broadcaster in the radio program, who stated that good facilities without proper advertising of the activities it offers is senseless.
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In conclusion, both the availability and advertising of the facilities are indispensable in order to encourage people of all ages to find room in their busy agendas for getting started again in doing physical exercise.
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Good work.
Essay: How tocan we encourage people to do exercise?
Essay: How can we encourage people to do exercise?
In the last few decades more and more people arehave been getting distracted forby the amount of work and leisure activities around them.
In the last few decades more and more people have been getting distracted by the amount of work and leisure activities around them.
However they don’t usually take into account the importance that keeping on shape haves on their lives.
However they don’t usually take into account the importance that keeping on shape has on their lives.
Linked to this topic I sawI listened to a programme on the radio related to this topic, where theses issues were discussed more in deepth.
I listened to a programme on the radio related to this topic, where theses issues were discussed more in depth.
From all the solutions the solutions provided on this programme, I would like to highlight two of them, that is,: better facilities and a proper advertising.
From all the solutions the solutions provided on this programme, I would like to highlight two of them: better facilities and proper advertising.
Firstly, I completely agree onwith what one of the participant tols said about the facilities: there is need ofare plenty of these, especially on small towns and villages, where lacks of public funding makes the existing ones obsolete or theyin need to beof repaired.
Firstly, I completely agree with what one of the participants said about facilities: there are plenty of these, especially on small towns and villages, where lack of public funding makes the existing ones obsolete or in need of repair.
Besides, people can not afford payingto pay for a gym, so the only alternative to this areas for its inhabitantfor the inhabitants of these areas is going running, which is not a very stimulating activity for most them.
Besides, people can not afford to pay for a gym, so the only alternative for the inhabitants of these areas is going running, which is not a very stimulating activity for most them.
Secondly, but not less important, any kind of sport activity must be widely announced, in order to keep people from different ages informed.
That is the most uinexpensive (mostly free) way to attack the problem at its source, specially for those activities aimed at young people, through social networks.
That is the most inexpensive (mostly free) way to attack the problem at its source, specially for those activities aimed at young people, through social networks.
What is described above links perfectly with was expressed by the broadcaster in the radio programme, who stated that just having good facilities without a proper advertising about the activities which are takening place in your local area is senseless.
What is described above links perfectly with was expressed by the broadcaster in the radio programme, who stated that just having good facilities without proper advertising about the activities which are taking place in your local area is senseless.
As aIn conclusion, both facilities availability and advertising are indispensable in order to encourage people ofrom all ages to find spaces in their busy agendas for getting started again in doing physical exercise.
In conclusion, both facilities availability and advertising are indispensable in order to encourage people of all ages to find spaces in their busy agendas for getting started again in doing physical exercise.
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nicely written!
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Essay: How to encourage people to do exercise?
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In the last decades more and more people are getting distracted for the amount of work and leisure activities around them.
In the last few decades more and more people
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However they don’t usually take into account the importance that keeping on shape have on their lives.
However they don’t usually take into account the importance that keeping on shape ha
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Linked to this topic I saw a programme on the radio where theses issues were discussed more in deep.
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From all the solutions the solutions provided on this programme, I would like to highlight two of them, that is, better facilities and a proper advertising.
From all the solutions the solutions provided on this programme, I would like to highlight two of them
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Firstly, I completely agree on what one of the participant told about the facilities: there is need of plenty of these, especially on small towns and villages, where lacks of public funding make the existing ones obsolete or they need to be repaired.
Firstly, I completely agree
Firstly, I completely agree |
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Besides, people can not afford paying a gym, so the only alternative to this areas for its inhabitants is going running, which is not a very stimulating activity for most them.
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Secondly, but not less important, any kind of sport activity must be widely announced, in order to keep people from different ages informed. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
Secondly, but not less important, any kind of sports activity must be widely announced |
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That is the most unexpensive (mostly free) way to attack the problem at its source, specially for those activities aimed at young people, through social networks.
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What is described above link perfectly with was expressed by the broadcaster in the radio programme, who stated that just good facilities without a proper advertising about the activities which are taken place in your local area is senseless.
What is described above links perfectly with was expressed by the broadcaster in the radio programme, who stated that just having good facilities without
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As a conclusion, both facilities availability and advertising are indispensable in order to encourage people from all ages to find spaces in their busy agendas for getting started again in doing physical exercise.
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